All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 80 "New Day"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from reconciled
This is exceptionally well done....I'm out already sorry...But I'll go vote ...-wink- Yes....I suppose the last indignity life offers....watching ourselves age...Anyhow beautiful....very well done. love Michael
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
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This is exceptionally well done....I'm out already sorry...But I'll go vote ...-wink- Yes....I suppose the last indignity life offers....watching ourselves age...Anyhow beautiful....very well done. love Michael
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
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hey thanks Michael - wink right back to ya!
Comment from notdeadyet
This is an interesting expression of aging. You creatively used the door image as the medicine cabinet door. Well done.
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
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This is an interesting expression of aging. You creatively used the door image as the medicine cabinet door. Well done.
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
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love your name!! very apt for my poem dear!
Comment from elliejean
You hide the outside appearance of age. But as my kids aged, I found out I really couldn't do it They looked older than I am. So I let the gray hair show. I have more fun that way. I can blame the grey hair and wrinkles on them. Great work.
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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You hide the outside appearance of age. But as my kids aged, I found out I really couldn't do it They looked older than I am. So I let the gray hair show. I have more fun that way. I can blame the grey hair and wrinkles on them. Great work.
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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me too elliejean! I wear less as I get older - otherwise it looks like a really bad paint job! :)))))
Comment from NaughtieScribe
lipstick'd and mascara'd - I so loved the ending stanza. Too relevant at any age past 25. lol. Me I'm a natural woman. I gave up on the cosmetic thing years ago. Lipstick and brow gel do me for a beauty fix.
I found nothing to adjust with this work. It just gave me a much needed chuckle. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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lipstick'd and mascara'd - I so loved the ending stanza. Too relevant at any age past 25. lol. Me I'm a natural woman. I gave up on the cosmetic thing years ago. Lipstick and brow gel do me for a beauty fix.
I found nothing to adjust with this work. It just gave me a much needed chuckle. Nicely done.
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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brow gel, hmm? haven't seen that! I have eyebrows inherited from Margot Hemingway, so pencil it is - but yes, I wear less as I get older!
Comment from Cry the Vile Rebel
I love the way you 'string' us along to what was , for me, a surprise twist. The visual placement of your lines added to the poem's feel. Well done, and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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I love the way you 'string' us along to what was , for me, a surprise twist. The visual placement of your lines added to the poem's feel. Well done, and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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oh good!! I'm so glad you enjoyed this one my dear!
Comment from Kiki12
Oh, crap, this is killer chickie, I love it. This part especially:
illuminate
the wherewithal to paint
in colors faint and subtle- your verse is subtle and emotive- you know I love that about it...hope you don't get the "this is unclear as to what the door is exactly" like I got because we don't hold their hand and walk them through the door (but I think we do anyway)-
well done S-
you're awesome and definitely will have my vote later :)
Kiki
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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Oh, crap, this is killer chickie, I love it. This part especially:
illuminate
the wherewithal to paint
in colors faint and subtle- your verse is subtle and emotive- you know I love that about it...hope you don't get the "this is unclear as to what the door is exactly" like I got because we don't hold their hand and walk them through the door (but I think we do anyway)-
well done S-
you're awesome and definitely will have my vote later :)
Kiki
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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bless you kiki! I was somewhat inspired by another mystery entry to this competition, do you believe? So you know exactly who's to blame, right?
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LOL- well, you got my vote earlier, it really is deserving of the win. Mine has received very mixed reviews, as I don't think I created the characters clearly enough. It's one of my favorite prompts, so I'm glad to have had the motivation, but sometimes the time factor gets me :) Yours is perfect, though-
xx
Kiki
Comment from Righteous Riter
The writer does a good job of getting the point across. The writer taps into the mind of the reader and working the thoughts of the reader. This piece flows well and has good harmony with it. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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The writer does a good job of getting the point across. The writer taps into the mind of the reader and working the thoughts of the reader. This piece flows well and has good harmony with it. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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thx so much RR!
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is just too cute, and a little sad at the same time, the painted on face that masks the effects of beauty on the skin. i enjoyed reading it and wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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this is just too cute, and a little sad at the same time, the painted on face that masks the effects of beauty on the skin. i enjoyed reading it and wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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you've got the idea, sweets - thank you so much.
Comment from woxlly20
With age comes wisdom and beauty is within. It was a pleasure reading your poem and the inside of ones mind. It all came together as it should be; great work:)
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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With age comes wisdom and beauty is within. It was a pleasure reading your poem and the inside of ones mind. It all came together as it should be; great work:)
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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let us hope so, hmmm? thx so much for reading & reviewing!
Comment from flippant
Very interesting interpretation/perspective on "what's behind the door" - identity, youth, new face, perhaps a crutch to hang on to? Many ways to view this - I like that some of the interpretation is left to the reader. I especially enjoyed the images of the first stanza - I wanted to be there!
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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Very interesting interpretation/perspective on "what's behind the door" - identity, youth, new face, perhaps a crutch to hang on to? Many ways to view this - I like that some of the interpretation is left to the reader. I especially enjoyed the images of the first stanza - I wanted to be there!
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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So glad you enjoyed this one flip!
