All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 45 "Wildest Rainbows"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Indie Skreet
beautiful Sharyn - what more can I say? This is a perfect sonnet and a strong contender one would think, for this contest. Good luck with this one, best Indie
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beautiful Sharyn - what more can I say? This is a perfect sonnet and a strong contender one would think, for this contest. Good luck with this one, best Indie
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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Bless you Indie - is see you're reviewing up a storm lately! :)S
Comment from J. Dark
Sharyn, this is beautiful with some perfect natural imagery. You certainly know how to work a sonnet form, don't you! Wonderful metering and flow in this elegant piece and you have chosen such an excellent artwork to accompany it. Your final lines are very uplifting.
Kindest of regards,
Julie :-)
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Sharyn, this is beautiful with some perfect natural imagery. You certainly know how to work a sonnet form, don't you! Wonderful metering and flow in this elegant piece and you have chosen such an excellent artwork to accompany it. Your final lines are very uplifting.
Kindest of regards,
Julie :-)
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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Bless you Julie - this is only the third sonnet I've ever written, do you believe? I'm surprised how easy iambic pentameter is!
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Comment from Righteous Riter
The writer does a good job of sticking to the rhyme scheme of the Shakespearean Sonnet. The rhyming is good and the writer doesn't force the rhyming. The flow is smooth as the writer delivers a clear message.
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The writer does a good job of sticking to the rhyme scheme of the Shakespearean Sonnet. The rhyming is good and the writer doesn't force the rhyming. The flow is smooth as the writer delivers a clear message.
Comment Written 05-May-2013
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thx so much RR!
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Visionary1234,
A very nice Sonnet!
It meets all the parameters of Shakespearean Sonnet. It has 'Love' as its theme. Its structure is perfect: Three Quatrains+One Couplet. The ebb and flow of love is clearly visible. 1st two quatrains depict the Love's rise, the 3rd one as its ebb and the couplet again as rise like ocean's waves in tide- up, down, up and so on.
Its language is simple having spontaneous ebb and flow with nice rhyming scheme, imagery and pictorial quality.
Author Notes is really very educative and worth appreciating.
Marvelous! Superb indeed!!
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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Hello Visionary1234,
A very nice Sonnet!
It meets all the parameters of Shakespearean Sonnet. It has 'Love' as its theme. Its structure is perfect: Three Quatrains+One Couplet. The ebb and flow of love is clearly visible. 1st two quatrains depict the Love's rise, the 3rd one as its ebb and the couplet again as rise like ocean's waves in tide- up, down, up and so on.
Its language is simple having spontaneous ebb and flow with nice rhyming scheme, imagery and pictorial quality.
Author Notes is really very educative and worth appreciating.
Marvelous! Superb indeed!!
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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thx so much RP - I really appreciated your detailed, thoughtful reading.
Blessings,
Sharyn
Comment from Jade Lawson
Really well written and enjoyable to read. Each stanza has an amazing flow, really smooth and elegant. I liked particularly these lines:
as height of sky, with senses more than five,
and every love's dimension so beguiled
The ocean's glory-blues in all their grace
Against a sky of softest peach chiffon.
And are we done with love, no longer new?
Indeed, people used to be loved and things used, now things are loved and people used.
Good structure, imagery and really creative.
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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Really well written and enjoyable to read. Each stanza has an amazing flow, really smooth and elegant. I liked particularly these lines:
as height of sky, with senses more than five,
and every love's dimension so beguiled
The ocean's glory-blues in all their grace
Against a sky of softest peach chiffon.
And are we done with love, no longer new?
Indeed, people used to be loved and things used, now things are loved and people used.
Good structure, imagery and really creative.
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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Bless you angel - thank you so much! :)Sharyn
Comment from cvcopac
This sonnet employes good meter, rhyme, abundant alliteration, lots of good vowel sounds and strong imagery. Strong volta, too, that I particularly like. best of luck in the contest. Kenny
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This sonnet employes good meter, rhyme, abundant alliteration, lots of good vowel sounds and strong imagery. Strong volta, too, that I particularly like. best of luck in the contest. Kenny
Comment Written 05-May-2013
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thx so much Kenny! :)Sharyn
Comment from Galactia
What a gorgeous English sonnet. perfect rhyme scheme of: abab cdcd efef gg, perfect iambic pentameter throughout the poem. lovely pic.
my favourite stanza is definitely the introductory verse.
The world was once so painted, pulsing, live
with roses, rainbows, splashes, colors wild
as height of sky, with senses more than five,
and every love's dimension so beguiled
great job and GL in the contest
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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What a gorgeous English sonnet. perfect rhyme scheme of: abab cdcd efef gg, perfect iambic pentameter throughout the poem. lovely pic.
my favourite stanza is definitely the introductory verse.
The world was once so painted, pulsing, live
with roses, rainbows, splashes, colors wild
as height of sky, with senses more than five,
and every love's dimension so beguiled
great job and GL in the contest
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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bless you Tina - so glad you enjoyed this one - that's my favorite verse too! :)S
Comment from Jendowoz
Really nice, Sharyn. A lovely look at aging couples whose children have flown the coop. My hubby and I started having time away even if it were just for a weekend. Our children were his life and could see that if we didn't stay in touch with each other we may have grown apart.
regards, Jen
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Really nice, Sharyn. A lovely look at aging couples whose children have flown the coop. My hubby and I started having time away even if it were just for a weekend. Our children were his life and could see that if we didn't stay in touch with each other we may have grown apart.
regards, Jen
Comment Written 05-May-2013
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blessings to you Jen - thx so much! :)S
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of alternate-line rhyming in your quatrains followed by a strong closing couplet
excellent use of enjambment to enhance the flow of your poem
and great use of consistent iambic meter
nice alliteration in phrases like painted pulsing and roses rainbows
and others
an effective turn in line 9
beautiful detail, strong message in a well-composed sonnet :-) Brooke
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solid use of alternate-line rhyming in your quatrains followed by a strong closing couplet
excellent use of enjambment to enhance the flow of your poem
and great use of consistent iambic meter
nice alliteration in phrases like painted pulsing and roses rainbows
and others
an effective turn in line 9
beautiful detail, strong message in a well-composed sonnet :-) Brooke
Comment Written 05-May-2013
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thx so much Brooke! :)S
Comment from Mrs Jones
Sadly this is often the case. I wonder what is wrong with us. Well done with this perfectly structured sonnet. A joy to read.
Cheers
Rose
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Sadly this is often the case. I wonder what is wrong with us. Well done with this perfectly structured sonnet. A joy to read.
Cheers
Rose
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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thank you so much Rose! :)s
