All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 45 "Wildest Rainbows"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from MizKat
Sharyn - This is a lovely sonnet poem. I've never attempted to write one and doubt that I ever will. It sounds difficult to do although your poem didn't sound like it. Great job. Did you know that you have a lot of
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Sharyn - This is a lovely sonnet poem. I've never attempted to write one and doubt that I ever will. It sounds difficult to do although your poem didn't sound like it. Great job. Did you know that you have a lot of
Comment Written 05-May-2013
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Thank you so much Kat! It's not hard, once you've "got" iambic pentameter into your brain. Try one!
:)S
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I doubt if I'd ever get the iambic pentameter in my brain. I write simple poetry from my heart. Not ones with all kinds of rules and regulations. ( ; Kat
Comment from Vampires kiss
This was a very god poem, hopefully the pele can reignite their love once again. It's hard to love your partner when the children are gone, they loose the focal point of their relationships. Great job! Keep up the good work!
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This was a very god poem, hopefully the pele can reignite their love once again. It's hard to love your partner when the children are gone, they loose the focal point of their relationships. Great job! Keep up the good work!
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Thx so much Vk! :)Sharyn
Comment from rjuselius
my parents have been married for 40 years and they are as love as can be. they found their love again.
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
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my parents have been married for 40 years and they are as love as can be. they found their love again.
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
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that's wonderful to have such inspiration rebekka! :)S
Comment from Cornelius2000
I am so impressed with your knowledge of poetry. I really like your Sonnet with its mid-life crisis revelation. Yes, we do tend to grow out of the love with all the fireworks going off.....and into a quieter love, with respect being a large part of it, and shared joy of children and grandchildren and their accomplishments. Not quite as sexy a "the fireworks" but very satisfying. You put it beautifully.
By the way, I just won my first contest, the Senryu entitled "Cat Scan." What a nice surprise. Dave
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I am so impressed with your knowledge of poetry. I really like your Sonnet with its mid-life crisis revelation. Yes, we do tend to grow out of the love with all the fireworks going off.....and into a quieter love, with respect being a large part of it, and shared joy of children and grandchildren and their accomplishments. Not quite as sexy a "the fireworks" but very satisfying. You put it beautifully.
By the way, I just won my first contest, the Senryu entitled "Cat Scan." What a nice surprise. Dave
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you DID!!??? How did I miss it!!! ok! I'm going to make sure I take a peek Dave - congratulations! I KNEW you were a natural! :)S
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Hi Sharyn: While you're at it please take a look at "Quite a Guy" and let me know what you think. It's an ABABAB contest entry. Dave
Comment from Just2Write
I liked this Sonnet very much. It has a beautiful flow to it and is so well expressed.
The only critique I have is on the enjambment on line 4 and 5. 'and every love's dimension so beguiled' brings the reader's mind to a close for the line. To start line 5 with 'us that the earth revolved in time and space' doesn't have the right 'feel' to it, and as it is the first line of a quatrain, (which is how this Sonnet is spaced) it should stand alone.
Nice turn on the Volta line, lovely rhymes throughout and a beautiful closing couplet. Rose
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I liked this Sonnet very much. It has a beautiful flow to it and is so well expressed.
The only critique I have is on the enjambment on line 4 and 5. 'and every love's dimension so beguiled' brings the reader's mind to a close for the line. To start line 5 with 'us that the earth revolved in time and space' doesn't have the right 'feel' to it, and as it is the first line of a quatrain, (which is how this Sonnet is spaced) it should stand alone.
Nice turn on the Volta line, lovely rhymes throughout and a beautiful closing couplet. Rose
Comment Written 05-May-2013
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I know what you mean ... it took me a while to get used to the idea of enjambment running between quatrains too dear - weird, hmm? But once you keep reading, you'll realize that even good old Shakespeare did it apparently. Thx so much for your comment - believe me, I vibe with it!
Blessings, Rose!
Sharyn
Comment from Bayberry
This is a beautiful sonnet that prompts readers to do some deep thinking about life and those we are personally connected to in close ways. The lines flow striking imagery and conclude strongly with a positive tone.
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This is a beautiful sonnet that prompts readers to do some deep thinking about life and those we are personally connected to in close ways. The lines flow striking imagery and conclude strongly with a positive tone.
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ooooh thank you for that lovely sixer on this one rhymster! :)Sharyn
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You're very welcome. :> Josie
Comment from mermaids
You take my breath away with your words. I like the flow you have, almost like a circle of words here. The theme of renewing love after the children have left the nest comes through clearly and I love the line about the dolphins.
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You take my breath away with your words. I like the flow you have, almost like a circle of words here. The theme of renewing love after the children have left the nest comes through clearly and I love the line about the dolphins.
Comment Written 05-May-2013
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well with a name like yours, of COURSE you'd love my dolphins, hmm? thx so much mermaids! :)Sharyn
Comment from NHazelwood
Beautiful sonnet and how you captured the themes of nature and emotion and then tied them into personal experiences in your life! The words and the construction of them makes the reader feel like your poem lives because of it's intensity!
Well penned!
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Beautiful sonnet and how you captured the themes of nature and emotion and then tied them into personal experiences in your life! The words and the construction of them makes the reader feel like your poem lives because of it's intensity!
Well penned!
Comment Written 05-May-2013
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Thx so much NH! :)S
Comment from lorijean
Beautifully written, with a life message, how things change over the years and feelings that get lost along the way, as we try to regain it or lose it for good.
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Beautifully written, with a life message, how things change over the years and feelings that get lost along the way, as we try to regain it or lose it for good.
Comment Written 05-May-2013
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Bless you lj! :)Sharyn
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, visionary, you did an excellent job writing this beautiful sonnet of losing yourself in the process of love and trying to find that spark again. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.
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this is very well written, visionary, you did an excellent job writing this beautiful sonnet of losing yourself in the process of love and trying to find that spark again. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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thx so much sweets! :)Sharyn
