All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 45 "Wildest Rainbows"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Opal H.
Ooh... Nice, lovely romantic poem. Isn't everlasting love such a beautiful concept? Perfect of a Shakespearen sonnet. Hey, I have seen in different authors' notes a reference to Evil Eddie, including yours now. Who, or what is that?
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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Ooh... Nice, lovely romantic poem. Isn't everlasting love such a beautiful concept? Perfect of a Shakespearen sonnet. Hey, I have seen in different authors' notes a reference to Evil Eddie, including yours now. Who, or what is that?
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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Evil Eddie is the "Advanced Edit" program on FS Opal - sometimes it seems to have a mind of its own, and really muck up your setting out/ formatting of a piece! :)S
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Oh. Wow talk about intelligent technology. LOL. :)
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unfortunately Eddie is highly NON intelligent on occasions Opal! GRR!
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Truly love rhythms-note-pulse changes, life is to move on with love in changeable state for nothing but change is truth, this Shakespearean sonnet has nice catch of love lost and promise to revive love, nice rhyme couplets vows, I enjoyed. 12/505
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Truly love rhythms-note-pulse changes, life is to move on with love in changeable state for nothing but change is truth, this Shakespearean sonnet has nice catch of love lost and promise to revive love, nice rhyme couplets vows, I enjoyed. 12/505
Comment Written 05-May-2013
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Thx Al!
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Sharyn,
You have written a fine sonnet for the contest. Your rhyme is spot on as is the syllable count. I like the theme and the descriptive words and each line has been composed with care. Well done and good luck in the contest....blessings, chey
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Hi Sharyn,
You have written a fine sonnet for the contest. Your rhyme is spot on as is the syllable count. I like the theme and the descriptive words and each line has been composed with care. Well done and good luck in the contest....blessings, chey
Comment Written 05-May-2013
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Thx so much chey! :)Sharyn
Comment from Glasstruth
A very upbeat sonnet. Wondering if the flame's still there? At least, you're wondering. Some have even given up on that. Nice alliteration here, there, and the rhyming is as smooth as "a sky of softest peach chiffon." Some very original metaphors throughout. Great stuff!!! Les
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A very upbeat sonnet. Wondering if the flame's still there? At least, you're wondering. Some have even given up on that. Nice alliteration here, there, and the rhyming is as smooth as "a sky of softest peach chiffon." Some very original metaphors throughout. Great stuff!!! Les
Comment Written 05-May-2013
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thx so much Les - thought it was time to exercise a few formal poetry muscles again. Sloth has set in lately! :))S
Comment from vapros
This is a great lyrical creation, apparently following all the requirements of the genre. The rhyme scheme, to such an artistic ignoramus as I am, is traditional, and very neatly done in this effort. The theme is also as prescribed. Almost like 'whereas' twice and then 'therefore.'
Good fun to read. You and Willie have done well.
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This is a great lyrical creation, apparently following all the requirements of the genre. The rhyme scheme, to such an artistic ignoramus as I am, is traditional, and very neatly done in this effort. The theme is also as prescribed. Almost like 'whereas' twice and then 'therefore.'
Good fun to read. You and Willie have done well.
Comment Written 05-May-2013
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Bless you vapros - Willie is at my side constantly, having a jolly good laugh! :)S
Comment from Cristina DS
Great sonnet!
I love the rhythm and cadence.
Your choice of words is impeccable
It puts a smile in my face, when I read it!
Thanks so much for sharing, great work!
Cristina
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Great sonnet!
I love the rhythm and cadence.
Your choice of words is impeccable
It puts a smile in my face, when I read it!
Thanks so much for sharing, great work!
Cristina
Comment Written 05-May-2013
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thx so much Christina - always glad to put a smile on someone's face! :)Sharyn
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello and smiles to you visionary1234
I like sonnets like your of what happens when it seems like when the spark of love dies and you want to
find our hearts again, with joyous breath,
and ride those wildest rainbows ... unto death.
NOTE
Check out your authors Noe
Evil Eddie had a good time
Good luck to you in the soonet contest..
Gert
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Hello and smiles to you visionary1234
I like sonnets like your of what happens when it seems like when the spark of love dies and you want to
find our hearts again, with joyous breath,
and ride those wildest rainbows ... unto death.
NOTE
Check out your authors Noe
Evil Eddie had a good time
Good luck to you in the soonet contest..
Gert
Comment Written 05-May-2013
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thx so much for the Evil Eddie thumbs down Gert - I already deleted and re-posted that bit and he STILL gets me! Got rid of it and put it in my own words. :))S
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smiles and you are welcome
Gert
Comment from allborn66
This is a wonderful poem. I really love the word choice, and the theme. I really liked:
Let's find our hearts again, with joyous breath,
and ride those wildest rainbows ... unto death.
I think that this a wonderful final couplet.
Barbara
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This is a wonderful poem. I really love the word choice, and the theme. I really liked:
Let's find our hearts again, with joyous breath,
and ride those wildest rainbows ... unto death.
I think that this a wonderful final couplet.
Barbara
Comment Written 05-May-2013
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Bless you Barbara - thank you so much! :)Sharyn
Comment from MM lives on :)
this was a lovely sonnet...I feel some pain for the loss of having the kids around and needing that flame to rekindle and turning it all around, great job!
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this was a lovely sonnet...I feel some pain for the loss of having the kids around and needing that flame to rekindle and turning it all around, great job!
Comment Written 05-May-2013
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You've got the message on this one Chris - thank you so much! :)Sharyn
Comment from Louise Michelle
Oh, Sharyn, this was such a joy to read. You have taken an age old theme and presented it with refreshing and surprising words. The style you chose suits the subject matter perfectly. Nicely done, Lou
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Oh, Sharyn, this was such a joy to read. You have taken an age old theme and presented it with refreshing and surprising words. The style you chose suits the subject matter perfectly. Nicely done, Lou
Comment Written 05-May-2013
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Bless you Lou! :)S
