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Comment from NicciFaye
Creepy, nice poem. Yes those sharp teeth can do some serious damage.
Question: For free verse, when starting a new line, is the begining word always captialized or not. Just asking because I get a few critics that review my work and critique everyline for grammar, etc. Anyhoo
Your talents are used everyday. Great poem.
reply by the author on 03-May-2013
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Creepy, nice poem. Yes those sharp teeth can do some serious damage.
Question: For free verse, when starting a new line, is the begining word always captialized or not. Just asking because I get a few critics that review my work and critique everyline for grammar, etc. Anyhoo
Your talents are used everyday. Great poem.
Comment Written 03-May-2013
reply by the author on 03-May-2013
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Thanks Nicci, you can go. Either way with free verse. There are no real rules. Whatever you feel comfortable with. I would say that if you choose not to capitalize, put in special capitalization, or leave off punctuation, state it in your Author's notes as intentional.
Comment from twinklepoems
Horror and thriller poetry is not my thing but c'e live. Interesting putting it in triolet form which I usually imagine as more soft and lyrical (you've proven me wrong). Good rhyme scheme with tender, surrender and defender. (also drools and fools)I also like your opening line which pulls the reader in: "sharp teeth meant to rend the tender".
Maybe horror will grow on me. :)
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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Horror and thriller poetry is not my thing but c'e live. Interesting putting it in triolet form which I usually imagine as more soft and lyrical (you've proven me wrong). Good rhyme scheme with tender, surrender and defender. (also drools and fools)I also like your opening line which pulls the reader in: "sharp teeth meant to rend the tender".
Maybe horror will grow on me. :)
Comment Written 01-May-2013
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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Thanks twinklepoems, occasionally I experiment, I generally like nature and beauty, but sometimes my muse takes a different course.
Comment from Robin Gilmor
I love it Tom. You do manage to try all forms. Love the picture and the visual you present with the colors as well as the verse. Really good. Line three has an extra count. Maybe something like ( If encountered no surrender) would work.
Smiles. to you. Robin :)
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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I love it Tom. You do manage to try all forms. Love the picture and the visual you present with the colors as well as the verse. Really good. Line three has an extra count. Maybe something like ( If encountered no surrender) would work.
Smiles. to you. Robin :)
Comment Written 01-May-2013
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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Thanks Robin. You are right, I fixed it.
Comment from Sararb
Very cleverly written. I enjoyed reading your poem about the sharp teeth. I can just imagine the sharp teeth of the dinosaur. Sararb :)
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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Very cleverly written. I enjoyed reading your poem about the sharp teeth. I can just imagine the sharp teeth of the dinosaur. Sararb :)
Comment Written 01-May-2013
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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Thanks Sara.
Comment from Tina McKala
interesting triolet, but if I count well, you have one more syllable in the third line, you should rewrite it a little bit ;)
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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interesting triolet, but if I count well, you have one more syllable in the third line, you should rewrite it a little bit ;)
Comment Written 01-May-2013
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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Thank you Tina. Yes, you are right. I fixed it.
