Comment from Hawaiian Mermaid

Excellent

Aloha Treischel,
I like your poem very much, and it is so true and has happened to me.

Why is it that in my bed
All seems to rhyme so well
Get up to write it down
The words I can not tell

Have a great day,
Aloha, Ginger
Hawaiian Mermaid

 Comment Written 01-May-2013

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reply by the author on 01-May-2013

Thank you Ginger. As poets, we can all commiserate,

Comment from Nottoway

Excellent

This poem lets me know that I am not alone!!! Is it our madness or our creativity that we have such magic flow through our minds during alleged restful sleep? Then, come the reality of dawn, "poof", it is gone. Imaginative and real, a wonderful effort.

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013

Thanks Nottoway. Yes, that's exactly how it went. Writers and Poets can relate.

Comment from NicciFaye

Excellent

I like how you took us through this lovely dream you had in such an expressive and metaphoric form. Then gave us the ending of the dream being over with the bubble bursting, hence forth the picture. Excellent.

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013

Thanks NicciFaye. I tried to hold on to it, but poof, gone. So I wrote this instead.

Comment from Robin Gilmor

Excellent

Clear picture is presented of your epic dream. All too often this happens.
Pop and the bubble breaks! Well constructed thought that flows well.
Good picture choice for added presentation. A joyful read. Smiles. Robin :)

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013

Thanks Robin. That's just how it happened last night.

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written, treischel, you did an excellent job writing this beautiful free verse poem about the masterpiece poem crafted in your dreams that was lost when you opened your eyes.

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 Comment Written 30-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013

Thanks sweetwoodjax. That's how it went.

Comment from Indie Skreet

Excellent

happens to me all the time and it is a bugger isn't it ...... you have done a great job here Tom. I now sleep with a torch, pad and pen under my pillow ....... seems to be working but do not get much sleep :) best Indie

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 Comment Written 30-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013

Thanks Indie, good advice. I assume by torch you mean a flashlight.

reply by Indie Skreet on 30-Apr-2013

I do :)