Along the Jericho Road
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Comment from God's Writer
A very beautiful story Bev.. I found this mystery around an Indian reservation to be thrilling and very interesting. You painted beautiful images except for one. The black being with the red eyes. I have seen him before.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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A very beautiful story Bev.. I found this mystery around an Indian reservation to be thrilling and very interesting. You painted beautiful images except for one. The black being with the red eyes. I have seen him before.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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Thank you so much, Erick. This being takes many forms doesn't it? I really appreciate your sharing your insights. Means a lot to me, my friend.
xx Bev
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I have seen him in many forms. Usually the black creature with ruby eyes It is nothing other than satan himself. He will flee when you start talking about and praying to God. I will also pray for you.
Love in Jesus Christ,
Erick
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Thank you, Erick. I've done a fair amount of educating myself on the ritual of exorcism. As a Catholic, I find the rosary to be a very powerful deflective device. Satan hates the rosary! But any prayers are welcome, my friend.
Xx Bev
Comment from emjaihammond
The story is has a good steady flow of information. Just enough knowledge to keep the reader looking for more, but not too much as to spoil it. I enjoyed reading this. I think your characters are well developed and interesting.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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The story is has a good steady flow of information. Just enough knowledge to keep the reader looking for more, but not too much as to spoil it. I enjoyed reading this. I think your characters are well developed and interesting.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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Thank you much for your gracious review. I really appreciate you taking time tor read my chapter, emjaihammond. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from donkeyoatey
To create characters that the reader cares about is not an easy task, you have done that well! I also think that creating a world that is different and educates people at the same time is a HUGE thing..you have done that too. I really like the way you can make the reader feel as if they are right there, great descriptions! I am honored you chose my art. Donkeyoatey
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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To create characters that the reader cares about is not an easy task, you have done that well! I also think that creating a world that is different and educates people at the same time is a HUGE thing..you have done that too. I really like the way you can make the reader feel as if they are right there, great descriptions! I am honored you chose my art. Donkeyoatey
Comment Written 30-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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Thank YOU, D. Your artwork is the perfect complement to my chapter. I really appreciate you taking time to read this installment and send along such a gracious review. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Such an intriguing chapter, Bev -
I find Jana rather short with Rick
at times. Such a great mystery.
when my uncle found it.(") - add
findings as soon as possible[.](,)" Jana added. - comma
uncle was talking about?["] - lose
Margaret
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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Such an intriguing chapter, Bev -
I find Jana rather short with Rick
at times. Such a great mystery.
when my uncle found it.(") - add
findings as soon as possible[.](,)" Jana added. - comma
uncle was talking about?["] - lose
Margaret
Comment Written 30-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much, Margaret. Things are building to a crisis point and Jana, being the intuitive she is, is especially feeling the pressure. I really appreciate your support, my friend.
Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Writingfundimension,
Whew, face to face with the spirit of evil ... not a pleasant encounter I should think. I suspect Morales needs to get a better understanding of how the Indians think and 'see' the world. PDQ as well.
Once again, you generate tension to hold the reader's interest, and provide a lot of interesting cultural information in the interplay between the characters.
Nicely done
Patrick
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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Hi Writingfundimension,
Whew, face to face with the spirit of evil ... not a pleasant encounter I should think. I suspect Morales needs to get a better understanding of how the Indians think and 'see' the world. PDQ as well.
Once again, you generate tension to hold the reader's interest, and provide a lot of interesting cultural information in the interplay between the characters.
Nicely done
Patrick
Comment Written 30-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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You are on the money with this review, Patrick. They all need to get up to speed in order to catch this killer. Serials are always a lesson in the capricious ways evil manifests.
Thanks for the great review!
Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from robina1978
I don't get yet what Jana's uncle meant by his words. But he must know some thing but does not get completely clear about it. Jana's partner suggested earlier that it can't be coincidence everything circling around her family.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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I don't get yet what Jana's uncle meant by his words. But he must know some thing but does not get completely clear about it. Jana's partner suggested earlier that it can't be coincidence everything circling around her family.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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Thank you so much, Ine. I really appreciate you taking time out to read and support my chapter. Warmest regards, Bev
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so welcome Bev, Ine
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for reminding us of the story line and adding the artwork of the "red" pines to establish the mood for this chapter. Your opening sentence and it simile places us in the landscape! I appreciated the Sioux glossary as well (especially after my recent travels in Oklahoma with their 39 tribes/nations). Your "inert steel monster" metaphor is also quite vivid. Your dialog among all the characters is quite natural and compelling. Tony's description of the "visible representation of evil" is intriguing. To be continued... well crafted, as usual. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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Thank you for reminding us of the story line and adding the artwork of the "red" pines to establish the mood for this chapter. Your opening sentence and it simile places us in the landscape! I appreciated the Sioux glossary as well (especially after my recent travels in Oklahoma with their 39 tribes/nations). Your "inert steel monster" metaphor is also quite vivid. Your dialog among all the characters is quite natural and compelling. Tony's description of the "visible representation of evil" is intriguing. To be continued... well crafted, as usual. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 29-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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Thank you so much, Joan. I appreciate very much that you felt the chapter was 'well crafted'. That's great to know. Your support is very much appreciated, as well.
Hugs, Bev
Comment from Connie C
Great opening sentence with some wonderful imagery, Bev.
As always, your use of dialogue is superb, and I like how we are able to get into the heads of the characters.
Good element of suspense once again, this time wondering what Tony might know about Father Brian DeShano.
Your use of plot and dialogue add such a wonderful element of suspense here, Bev. I'm still thinking that Father Brian is up to something, but I guess I shall just have to wait and see. And I am such an impatient person too!
As always, a superb job, my friend.
Hugs,
Connie xo
Hugs,
Connie
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Great opening sentence with some wonderful imagery, Bev.
As always, your use of dialogue is superb, and I like how we are able to get into the heads of the characters.
Good element of suspense once again, this time wondering what Tony might know about Father Brian DeShano.
Your use of plot and dialogue add such a wonderful element of suspense here, Bev. I'm still thinking that Father Brian is up to something, but I guess I shall just have to wait and see. And I am such an impatient person too!
As always, a superb job, my friend.
Hugs,
Connie xo
Hugs,
Connie
Comment Written 29-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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I'm very honored by your very gracious review, Connie. You are so good to me! It's one of the reasons I keep trying to improve with each chapter. Thanks so much for letting me know what worked for you, as I find that especially helpful. Hugs, Bev
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You are more than welcome, Bev. I wish sometimes, though, that I could give you some constructive criticism, but I truly can't find anything to criticize. The only thing that I find occasionally is that I tend to forget what has happened so far if there is some time between chapters, but this is a great work in progress, and good writing takes time.
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Connie, I'm really touched by your understanding about my writing process. I feel bad that I don't write faster, but I do tend to feel good about my chapters knowing I've done my best and taken my time to re-write.
A Big Hug for getting it!
Bev
Comment from chasennov
Along The Jericho Road. 'Kresto moon.' Another good chapter in the ongoing saga of your story which I found very interesting to read. Well done.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Along The Jericho Road. 'Kresto moon.' Another good chapter in the ongoing saga of your story which I found very interesting to read. Well done.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much for taking time to read, c. I really appreciate the support. Warm regards, Bev
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My pleasure, Bev.
Comment from wordsfromsue
Poor Rick, I think it was inevitable he was going to put his foot in his mouth with this interview. I love the description of him wanting to hightail it out of the house upon the creepy description of what was standing over the body! At least he's honest with himself. :-)
Letting death guide them, that's an interesting concept. I don't quite understand it, but I'm supposing I will as time goes on.
Great chapter!
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Poor Rick, I think it was inevitable he was going to put his foot in his mouth with this interview. I love the description of him wanting to hightail it out of the house upon the creepy description of what was standing over the body! At least he's honest with himself. :-)
Letting death guide them, that's an interesting concept. I don't quite understand it, but I'm supposing I will as time goes on.
Great chapter!
Comment Written 29-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much, Sue. I appreciate your generosity and shared insights. Glad you like, Rick, as I do too! Hugs, Bev
