From out of the Grayness
Viewing comments for Chapter 28 "Bolt My Will"Reaching from the gray areas to understand life
9 total reviews
Comment from Curly Girly
Yes, tell me about it! This was a well written and expressive poem about harnessing all those inner desires and struggles which we wrestle against.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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Yes, tell me about it! This was a well written and expressive poem about harnessing all those inner desires and struggles which we wrestle against.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2013
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thanks curly girly...most appreciated and hope to see you back again soon...blessings....Vance
Comment from lancellot
Very original. I have to say the more I read the bigger my smile got. What made it so funny was that they are all so true. I really loved this line:
Money always Emergency
It so is. Ha! Great job.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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Very original. I have to say the more I read the bigger my smile got. What made it so funny was that they are all so true. I really loved this line:
Money always Emergency
It so is. Ha! Great job.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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Thanks so much lancellot I feel we are kindred spirits and almost want to answer you as "vancealot" I appreciate you lovely review and encouraging feedback. Hope to see you again soon.VANCE
Comment from l.raven
OH Vance, This says it all. It's seems like we never have enough or we have to much. I love every word.. Oh so true... Very well written. Luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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OH Vance, This says it all. It's seems like we never have enough or we have to much. I love every word.. Oh so true... Very well written. Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 28-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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Thanks so much for your kind review and positive feedback. I'm really glad this had a positive impact on you. Blessings! Vance
Comment from vkmack
Taunt and throbbing with energy. Each line contains a small gem. Where to start? I wanted to find a line that I could say was the strongest or a favorite, but you've made it impossible with this electric language. I do think that your biggest shot of energy occurs after "Wishing Words." But the whole damn thing is just on fire. I hate to gush, but I see no option. Wow! What a comment on this world--your forte.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Taunt and throbbing with energy. Each line contains a small gem. Where to start? I wanted to find a line that I could say was the strongest or a favorite, but you've made it impossible with this electric language. I do think that your biggest shot of energy occurs after "Wishing Words." But the whole damn thing is just on fire. I hate to gush, but I see no option. Wow! What a comment on this world--your forte.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Wow VKMACK...what a glorious review and I'm deeply appreciative of every word! Thanks so much for your encouragement and wonderful expression. Blessings, Vance
Comment from Glasstruth
The title of this made me wonder. Priorities and work around the house, and everything else seems to creep in as in "Work Set on Day
Passion Set on Night,"as we're multitakers now. Our minds are not set to function on one thing. In some ways life becomes complicated. Also like the lines: "Wishing Love
Was Easy as Water" You magnificently present all this in a unique style. Great stuff!!!!! Les
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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The title of this made me wonder. Priorities and work around the house, and everything else seems to creep in as in "Work Set on Day
Passion Set on Night,"as we're multitakers now. Our minds are not set to function on one thing. In some ways life becomes complicated. Also like the lines: "Wishing Love
Was Easy as Water" You magnificently present all this in a unique style. Great stuff!!!!! Les
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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LES: I'm always pumped to hear from you as I have such Genuine admiration for your talents and your phenomenal work! Glad you liked this one andd wow thankss for the sixer..much appreciated! Hope to see you again soon! Blessings! Vance
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You welcome :) Les
Comment from beccabootie123
all our euphanisms in one place it seemed. puts it into a certain perspective doesn't it. what do we value? well written and formatted for ease in reading. adele
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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all our euphanisms in one place it seemed. puts it into a certain perspective doesn't it. what do we value? well written and formatted for ease in reading. adele
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Thanks Adele; always great to hear from you! Cheers, Vance
Comment from cephira
This poem says so much! You really kinda said it all.
Wishing Words
Could Cause Changes - Powerful lines!
Wishing Love
Was Easy as Water - Yeah, that would be nice!!! But even water can burn, right?? Hmmm...now you've got me thinking on that one.
The imagery was superb and the flow like a lazy river leading to a gushing waterfall. Enjoyed everything about it.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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This poem says so much! You really kinda said it all.
Wishing Words
Could Cause Changes - Powerful lines!
Wishing Love
Was Easy as Water - Yeah, that would be nice!!! But even water can burn, right?? Hmmm...now you've got me thinking on that one.
The imagery was superb and the flow like a lazy river leading to a gushing waterfall. Enjoyed everything about it.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Dear Cephira: I really appreciate your thoughtful and insightful comments. This is obviously an ever-ponderable subject but so far all we know is "choices, acts and consequences" I guess that is God's school. Thanks so much for the six! Very grateful! VAnce
Comment from Pierre Francis
This poem feels like a series of punches, quick and emphatic, each of which makes a point worth pondering. You have efficiently and economically covered so many of the concerns of daily living. The occasion use of rhyme and alliteration (smiles set / wishing words) adds flow to the work. Some of the lines are pure philosophy (Wishing Love Was Easy as Water / Wishing Sleep Was Remedy / Changing Wishes Into Will), which merit poems of their own!
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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This poem feels like a series of punches, quick and emphatic, each of which makes a point worth pondering. You have efficiently and economically covered so many of the concerns of daily living. The occasion use of rhyme and alliteration (smiles set / wishing words) adds flow to the work. Some of the lines are pure philosophy (Wishing Love Was Easy as Water / Wishing Sleep Was Remedy / Changing Wishes Into Will), which merit poems of their own!
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Hi Pierre: So delighted to hear from you and I certainly appreciate your very thoughtful commentary and hope to hear more from you in the future! This one is a really deep subject and I guess all we can learn is the pattern: choices-acts-consequences...emotions follow....learning sometimes does and sometimes does not. Thanks again!!Vance
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, his grayness, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about the strength it takes to overcome our self will. i enjoyed reading it
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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this is very well written, his grayness, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about the strength it takes to overcome our self will. i enjoyed reading it
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Sweetwoodjax:;Really great to hear from you! This one is a really deep subject and I guess all we can learn is the pattern: choices-acts-consequences...emotions follow....learning sometimes does and sometimes does not. Hope to hear more from you in the future: Thanks again! Vance
