History and Myth
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Firebird"Poems that tell stories of long ago
17 total reviews
Comment from Ekim777
Well you have certainly mastered the demands of the sonnet verse and your rhyme scheme is effective enough. As you mention in your copious notes, The phoenix has become an international symbol for rebirth and resurrection. You milk the image for all it is worth and your final couplet leaves us intrigued. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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Well you have certainly mastered the demands of the sonnet verse and your rhyme scheme is effective enough. As you mention in your copious notes, The phoenix has become an international symbol for rebirth and resurrection. You milk the image for all it is worth and your final couplet leaves us intrigued. -Ekim777
Comment Written 11-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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Thank you Ekim. I appreciate the review.
Comment from Ridley Williams
What a fascinating piece of work. The mythical Phoenix has always been one of my favorites, and the authors notes made for great informative reading. Your meter was solid and I enjoyed the alliterative phrasing in the line,..."Phoenix, formed from fires force". Very well done, Ridley
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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What a fascinating piece of work. The mythical Phoenix has always been one of my favorites, and the authors notes made for great informative reading. Your meter was solid and I enjoyed the alliterative phrasing in the line,..."Phoenix, formed from fires force". Very well done, Ridley
Comment Written 11-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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Thank you Ridley for reading and commenting.
Comment from TiffanyLeeBaldwin
Thank you for the notes on this write. Wow, very deep and uniquely written. I enjoyed this and it really made my mind spin in many different ways. Got me thinking. Your vocabulary is amazing.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the notes on this write. Wow, very deep and uniquely written. I enjoyed this and it really made my mind spin in many different ways. Got me thinking. Your vocabulary is amazing.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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Tha k you Tiffany. What a nice compliment.
Comment from 9999pool
A tribute to the bird of rebirth, resurrection and renewal - the Firebird of Myth and Legend. The purple color representing the phoenix is nice but the dark background makes the poem very hard to read and to enjoy the poem. As with the other works, the very dark background color is a dampener. If dark background are use, shouldn't the lettering be WHITE?
Good write again but quite hard to concentrate my reading.
By the way, the Phoenix and the Dragon goes as a pair and are auspicious symbols for the Chinese and New Year too.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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A tribute to the bird of rebirth, resurrection and renewal - the Firebird of Myth and Legend. The purple color representing the phoenix is nice but the dark background makes the poem very hard to read and to enjoy the poem. As with the other works, the very dark background color is a dampener. If dark background are use, shouldn't the lettering be WHITE?
Good write again but quite hard to concentrate my reading.
By the way, the Phoenix and the Dragon goes as a pair and are auspicious symbols for the Chinese and New Year too.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
Comment Written 04-May-2013
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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Thanks Ritchie. The dragon would be an interesting topic.
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Yes, the dragon is very auspicious to the Chinese. The Dragon and Phoenix are used during Chinese weddings to bless the newly married couple.
Good write and thanks for sharing Tom.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
Comment from Capricorn30
A unique gnarled tree stump indeed, which is a great introduction to a well-penned poem;
I so like the rich alliterative line "purpled plumes";
Good alliteration also in "formed from fire's force"--powerful words;
Interesting, informative sonnet--well done!
reply by the author on 02-May-2013
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A unique gnarled tree stump indeed, which is a great introduction to a well-penned poem;
I so like the rich alliterative line "purpled plumes";
Good alliteration also in "formed from fire's force"--powerful words;
Interesting, informative sonnet--well done!
Comment Written 02-May-2013
reply by the author on 02-May-2013
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Thank you so much Capricorn for this wonderful review.
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You're very welcome:)
Comment from adewpearl
Good abcb rhyming in your quatrains followed by a strong closing couplet
good use of iambic tetrameter to create good flow, enhanced more by good use of enjambment
nice alliteration in purple plumes
you depict this mythic bird in its various cultural manifestations well :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 02-May-2013
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Good abcb rhyming in your quatrains followed by a strong closing couplet
good use of iambic tetrameter to create good flow, enhanced more by good use of enjambment
nice alliteration in purple plumes
you depict this mythic bird in its various cultural manifestations well :-) Brooke
Comment Written 02-May-2013
reply by the author on 02-May-2013
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Thank you Brooke. A wonderful review that lifts the soul.
Comment from richardwarfe
A brilliant piece of writing, so rich in imagery and language, and with a perfect rhyming structure. It reminded me of some of William Blake's work, very passionate and elemental. Great work
reply by the author on 02-May-2013
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A brilliant piece of writing, so rich in imagery and language, and with a perfect rhyming structure. It reminded me of some of William Blake's work, very passionate and elemental. Great work
Comment Written 02-May-2013
reply by the author on 02-May-2013
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Thank you for that wonderful review Richard.
Comment from arsinBW
Damn this really quite awesome! Very original and thought provoking. Also the picture suited it very nicely. Great job with this.
reply by the author on 02-May-2013
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Damn this really quite awesome! Very original and thought provoking. Also the picture suited it very nicely. Great job with this.
Comment Written 02-May-2013
reply by the author on 02-May-2013
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Thank you so much arsinBW.
Comment from Callyope
My Goodness Gracious! What a beautiful Sonnet!!! It grabbed me by the pit of my stomach, burned in my eyes, and made my heart exercise... This spoke to me on so many levels that I cannot begin to tell you the emotion this piece stirs. Beautiful subject and wonderfully written. Especially the final two stanzas. In fact, this is my "reader's pick." Bravo, loved it!!!
Namaste,
Callyope
reply by the author on 02-May-2013
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My Goodness Gracious! What a beautiful Sonnet!!! It grabbed me by the pit of my stomach, burned in my eyes, and made my heart exercise... This spoke to me on so many levels that I cannot begin to tell you the emotion this piece stirs. Beautiful subject and wonderfully written. Especially the final two stanzas. In fact, this is my "reader's pick." Bravo, loved it!!!
Namaste,
Callyope
Comment Written 02-May-2013
reply by the author on 02-May-2013
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Thank you Callyope. Wow! I am moved by your wonderful review.
Comment from emjaihammond
You have penned an interesting poem to be paired with a really great picture. It seems they are well put together. I don't know a lot about the Phoenix, except that it rises up from the ashes, a strong impression just as your poem brings.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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You have penned an interesting poem to be paired with a really great picture. It seems they are well put together. I don't know a lot about the Phoenix, except that it rises up from the ashes, a strong impression just as your poem brings.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Thank you emjailmond, glad you visited and enjoyed my work.
