senryu (advice for the young)
Contest Entry32 total reviews
Comment from country ranch writer
YOU ARE ONLY AS OLD AS YOU FEEL SOME DAYS MORE THAN OTHERS BUT WE ARE HAPPY JUST TO BE ON THIS EARTH TO ANNOY THE YOUNGER GENERATION
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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YOU ARE ONLY AS OLD AS YOU FEEL SOME DAYS MORE THAN OTHERS BUT WE ARE HAPPY JUST TO BE ON THIS EARTH TO ANNOY THE YOUNGER GENERATION
Comment Written 27-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Thank you my friend for your great review, I appreciate it. Have a nice Sunday. Bill
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WELCOME
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WELCOME
Comment from ravenblack
Oh, yes it does. Depending on the quality of life, it can seem to last forever. Just have to truly live when we still can. Not looking forward to being an old fart.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Oh, yes it does. Depending on the quality of life, it can seem to last forever. Just have to truly live when we still can. Not looking forward to being an old fart.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Thanks for your comments my friend. Have a great Sunday. Bill
Comment from Npenny
Very clever! Quite true. Light hearted piece and good 5-7-5. The artwork pulls it all in. The advice we often get from our elders makes a whole lot of sense, and is usually short and to the point!
Good lesson. And great work!
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Very clever! Quite true. Light hearted piece and good 5-7-5. The artwork pulls it all in. The advice we often get from our elders makes a whole lot of sense, and is usually short and to the point!
Good lesson. And great work!
Comment Written 27-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Thank you for your review my friend, I appreciate your comments. Have a real nice day. Bill
Comment from Curtis Hatch
Cedar,
Your 5/7/5 selection of words and seventeen syllables strike close to home with me as I am in the golden years. Each year seems to pass a little faster than the one before. My ninety-one-year-old father would not agree that it does not last long. It gives one much to think about.
Curtis
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2013
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Cedar,
Your 5/7/5 selection of words and seventeen syllables strike close to home with me as I am in the golden years. Each year seems to pass a little faster than the one before. My ninety-one-year-old father would not agree that it does not last long. It gives one much to think about.
Curtis
Comment Written 27-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2013
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Thank you Curtis. I too am in my golden years, nearly 70. My mother lived to be 90. Have a nice weekend my friend and take care of yourself. Bill
Comment from Black_Oxygen
With very few words, this poetry speaks an undeniable
truth. The attached illustration is a befitting accent
that enhances the message. Thank You for your creation.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2013
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With very few words, this poetry speaks an undeniable
truth. The attached illustration is a befitting accent
that enhances the message. Thank You for your creation.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2013
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Thank you for your nice comments. Have a great weekend. Bill
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
An excellent Senryu, human sense and sentiment, feeling and emotion well expressed, a nice advice from an old man to a young about old age about keeping attitude and living old age, I enjoyed the eternal lesson. 3/274
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2013
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An excellent Senryu, human sense and sentiment, feeling and emotion well expressed, a nice advice from an old man to a young about old age about keeping attitude and living old age, I enjoyed the eternal lesson. 3/274
Comment Written 27-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2013
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Thank you my friend for your nice comments. Have a great day. Bill
Comment from mermaids
Congrats on winning the contest. Love the last line it don't last that long, humerous and so true. Excellent senryu form that captures emotion and feeling.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2013
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Congrats on winning the contest. Love the last line it don't last that long, humerous and so true. Excellent senryu form that captures emotion and feeling.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2013
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Thank you my friend for your great review, I appreciate it. Have a nice weekend. Bill
Comment from mauial
Very good and witty senryu and it is also an inescapable truth :( Besides worry has been known to shorten life, so why do it.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2013
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Very good and witty senryu and it is also an inescapable truth :( Besides worry has been known to shorten life, so why do it.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2013
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Thanks for your review and you're right. Worry just speeds up the process. Have a good weekend my friend.
Comment from MAMONIA
Okay, you said it. Got a real kick out of this one.
The youth of today have other things to worry about,
so why should they worry about getting older.
But they do. That's why they run for the Botox.
Everyone wants to stay young, but it only lasts for
so long.
Great advice. Hope they take it.
Best of luck in the contest.
Marie
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2013
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Okay, you said it. Got a real kick out of this one.
The youth of today have other things to worry about,
so why should they worry about getting older.
But they do. That's why they run for the Botox.
Everyone wants to stay young, but it only lasts for
so long.
Great advice. Hope they take it.
Best of luck in the contest.
Marie
Comment Written 27-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2013
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Thanks Marie for your great review and good luck wishes. Good luck to you also. Have a great weekend my friend.
Comment from adewpearl
Great pairing of poem and art
Your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 form and I just love the nature of your "reassurance" LOL
Brooke
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2013
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Great pairing of poem and art
Your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 form and I just love the nature of your "reassurance" LOL
Brooke
Comment Written 26-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2013
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Thanks Brooke. The "golden years" can be a wonderful thing for some, but a constant struggle for others. Have a nice weekend.
