All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "The Music She Skips To"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from J. Dark
This is awesome, Sharyn, and please know that it is exceptional and I am only not rating it so because I have run out.
Love the zest of the internal rhyme and you have some brilliant phrasing. It is the concept of this piece that truly stands out. Yes, you are so right to highlight and capture this moment. Wonderful writing, Sharyn.
Kindest of regards,
Julie :-)
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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This is awesome, Sharyn, and please know that it is exceptional and I am only not rating it so because I have run out.
Love the zest of the internal rhyme and you have some brilliant phrasing. It is the concept of this piece that truly stands out. Yes, you are so right to highlight and capture this moment. Wonderful writing, Sharyn.
Kindest of regards,
Julie :-)
Comment Written 10-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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Bless you Julie - so glad you enjoyed this one dear! :)))
Comment from Patti R.
And I bet you gave her a knock-out high wattage smile! I can just see her ... now that's refreshing.
Starts off almost ranting, loved that, then slows, like the traffic, then hey, what's this?
This is cool, pinkish-orange melon cool!
Patti
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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And I bet you gave her a knock-out high wattage smile! I can just see her ... now that's refreshing.
Starts off almost ranting, loved that, then slows, like the traffic, then hey, what's this?
This is cool, pinkish-orange melon cool!
Patti
Comment Written 10-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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just for you Patti! :)S
Comment from angelmagnet
So true. No one dances to their own music anymore, because everyone else's music is so darn loud. We have to concentrate in order to hear ourselves think and find their own tune. Lovely, Cindy
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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So true. No one dances to their own music anymore, because everyone else's music is so darn loud. We have to concentrate in order to hear ourselves think and find their own tune. Lovely, Cindy
Comment Written 10-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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oh yeah - thanks Cindy! :)S
Comment from Gregory K Shipman
I can do naught but pull the 'six' from the firmament and lay it at your feet... for though engineer be I, some technology scares the 'hellacious' outta me. A year or so I'm back visiting my kids and we're all sitting in the den watching a movie and grooving on the 'all-together-again'. Both son and daughter are tapping keys on cell phones vigorously. 'Who you guys texting, oh children of divorced parents?' Both look up at me and each points to the other. I don't know if I should make the sign of the cross or go into strangle mode! They're texting each other in the same room? They got it from their mother's side of the family. My side stands on street corners with pagers and 'nines'.
Since you knows me, dear Sharyn, you knows everything after, 'And here she is...' put joy into the heart I hope to someday have again...
You are more than writer, more than gem... you be Sharyn
greg
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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I can do naught but pull the 'six' from the firmament and lay it at your feet... for though engineer be I, some technology scares the 'hellacious' outta me. A year or so I'm back visiting my kids and we're all sitting in the den watching a movie and grooving on the 'all-together-again'. Both son and daughter are tapping keys on cell phones vigorously. 'Who you guys texting, oh children of divorced parents?' Both look up at me and each points to the other. I don't know if I should make the sign of the cross or go into strangle mode! They're texting each other in the same room? They got it from their mother's side of the family. My side stands on street corners with pagers and 'nines'.
Since you knows me, dear Sharyn, you knows everything after, 'And here she is...' put joy into the heart I hope to someday have again...
You are more than writer, more than gem... you be Sharyn
greg
Comment Written 10-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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oh you gorgeous man you - your review had me laughing out loud at the vision of your 2 kids TEXTING each other at that time!! OMG - GOOD WE BOTH HAVE QUIRKINESS, OTHERWISE WE'D MURDER 'EM! :)s
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I keep wondering, Sharyn, if 'quirkiness' is a defense in an assault trial... 'cause I have been thinking.
Comment from Deniz22
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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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I love this! I love this! I love this! I love this!
I love this! I love this! I love this! I love this!I love this! I love this! I love this! I love this! I love this! I love this! I love this! I love this! I love this! I love this! I love this! I love this! I love this! I love this! I love this! I love this! And you're not bad either!
Comment Written 10-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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Bless you too dear! On occasons, I can be very good! :))))
Comment from words
How delightful.
It seems that we do all go around "plugged" in at all times.
Last night I was watching television with a friend. At one point I realized that she was on her Ipad, I was "checking my emails on my phone, the television was on and nether of us had said a word to each other in an hour. LOL
Yup, I like your take on things:and she holds up to her mouth - nothing
but a sweet stalk
of
fresh
juicy
spring grass
and the music
she skips to
is
her
own
Hugs ,d
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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How delightful.
It seems that we do all go around "plugged" in at all times.
Last night I was watching television with a friend. At one point I realized that she was on her Ipad, I was "checking my emails on my phone, the television was on and nether of us had said a word to each other in an hour. LOL
Yup, I like your take on things:and she holds up to her mouth - nothing
but a sweet stalk
of
fresh
juicy
spring grass
and the music
she skips to
is
her
own
Hugs ,d
Comment Written 10-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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so funny d. - so many people tell me stories just like this one - you should read Greg Shipman's review - I burst out laughing! :)Sharyn
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That is a rarity, Phyllis. Every youngster these days, can't cope without some electronic gadget on there body. Such a sad word these days, what on earth would this generation do if the electric was switched of for a week or two?? That would be an interesting thought! LOL, We would have a world of morons walking around wondering what had happened to their world, they wouldn't recognise it any more. Great poem and a great read! xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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That is a rarity, Phyllis. Every youngster these days, can't cope without some electronic gadget on there body. Such a sad word these days, what on earth would this generation do if the electric was switched of for a week or two?? That would be an interesting thought! LOL, We would have a world of morons walking around wondering what had happened to their world, they wouldn't recognise it any more. Great poem and a great read! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 10-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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oh darlin' I'm not Phyllis, remember ... bless you!
Sharyn
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Oh Sharyn! I am an idiot, I had just been 'talking' to Phyllis, and my brain didn't switch over quick enough! So sorry dear, the review was right, just have trouble putting all in the right place! LOL! :( xsx
Comment from ravenblack
love it! " it'll crap-zap the brainwaves flat". who says technology means advancement? iphones/ipods just encourage a flat-world journey inward. got our kids ipod touches and it has become virtually all they do. had to take them away a few times already. can really relate to this. love your playfulness w/words and the last image you leave us with.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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love it! " it'll crap-zap the brainwaves flat". who says technology means advancement? iphones/ipods just encourage a flat-world journey inward. got our kids ipod touches and it has become virtually all they do. had to take them away a few times already. can really relate to this. love your playfulness w/words and the last image you leave us with.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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I enjoyed that line myself - it made me smile, can you tell? Thx so much for your lovely six my dear! :)
Comment from justatuna
I'm glad I was able to give you a 6 for this. This is a wonderful poem which again seems more like a story. One that only your mind can create. I really enjoy glimpsing into your world. Seems like fun. Thanks for this, Sharyn. Made me happy.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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I'm glad I was able to give you a 6 for this. This is a wonderful poem which again seems more like a story. One that only your mind can create. I really enjoy glimpsing into your world. Seems like fun. Thanks for this, Sharyn. Made me happy.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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hey Rob - thank you so much - another six! wow! :)))S
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I don't give them to you because it's you. It's because you really are a great writer. You have such a unique style that no one else on this site can match. I'm not being nice.
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I know that, silly! I don't give sixes to be 'nice' to anyone either - only if the work deserves it. So when I get TWO sixes from you, I give myself a special ego stroke, because I know the pieces must have been good!
:)))S
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As long as we're on the same page we're cool. That way you know you can't be wrong:)
Comment from amada
Your work caught my attention because there are days i feel exactly like that "Am I alone in this drone of a world that needs to unplug? Well done.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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Your work caught my attention because there are days i feel exactly like that "Am I alone in this drone of a world that needs to unplug? Well done.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
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thx so much amada! :)Sharyn
