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What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?

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Comment from ~Dovey
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I love this! Funny story in your poem, and so, so true! I work retail, so, of course, it is my job to greet the customers. You can't imagine how many times I will speak to someone only to get really weird looks from them, because they are either plugged in to their earbuds or have a blue tooth (that I can't see) and be having their own conversation. How odd that I feel like I'm the one being rude and interrupting lol Awesome poem! :)

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
    You would know EXACTLY what I'm talking about! :)))Thank you my dear!
    Sharyn
Comment from donaldww
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The poet is alone in a world that needs to unplug. The crap that zaps, will leave the us flat.

Of course, people are never satisfied. The girl that skips to her own music, in my youth was called someone that marches to the beat of their own drum. A kind of soft put down.

I suppose the iPhone generation would see her in the same light.

Cheers,
DW

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
    thank God for non-conformists, DW - a pity their numbers seem to be shrinking, dammit! :)S
Comment from RodG
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The Speaker has grown tired of the video watching,audio-obsessed generation and is pleasantly surprised when she sees a girl sucking on a blade of grass. Hosannah! The form,the language, and the images all fit the subject. Different kind of commentary. RodG

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
    thank you Rod - you know EXACTLY where I'm coming from dear!
    :)Sharyn
Comment from Spitfire
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Oh, technology has robbed us of so much. Users drown out the calming sounds of nature and human conversation. Nice build-up of details of this sweet bird of youth who skips to her own inner music.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
    I knew I was in trouble, spits, when I moved in with my husband in San Francisco ... beautiful picture window with fog rolling in, quiet ... he immediately turned on the TV so we could have "movie background music". OMG! Why didn't I run while I had the chance!!!????
Comment from JM daSilva
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Oh, you are so against technology now, huh? Great poem to a way of life without the gizmos we've grown so used to. I love them actually, but I also love nature. I guess you figured that out. My dream is to live in the jungle writing.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013


reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
    not against technology - just against it when people "turn off" to other people because of it eg: I go to the gym, which now has treadmills with TV, so everyone stares at their TV sets, plugged in with earphones, and no one talks. Before the advent of the all singing-all dancing-TV treadmills, people would chat to each other as they walked. Same thing with my son - he now gets in the car when I pick him up from school, grunts, puts on his headset, reclines his seat and goes to sleep. Wow, that was a fun conversation about your day. If I go down to the B&B to talk to my cleaning lady, she first has to say 'goodbye' to whoever she's chatting with on the cellphone (with hands-free attachment of course). Personally I rather enjoy getting into my car and NOT having a cell phone with me - it's almost as good as a vacation! BUT I do love my computer - when it works! :))
reply by JM daSilva on 10-Apr-2013
    I actually turn off my cell phone when I'm driving. I don't like anything to distract me. I ride motorcycles too, and it's not a good idea. When I go to the gym, I don't take any technology. I mean, I have them, but I turn everything off. I think I know what you mean: Obsession.
Comment from vapros
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Double-good effort today, as you make an impassioned complaint against this age of non-communication and worship of noise. Well done again.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013


reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
    I'm so delighted that you loved my pieces my dear! What a thrill for me, personally, to have your lovely sixes!!!
    Blessings, and much appreciation!
    Sharyn
Comment from Gungalo
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and the music
she skips to
is
her
own

What a wonderful write this is. I can tell that you had had it and were ready for anything good. Mmmmm this did it, didn't it girl?

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013


reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
    well it needed SOMETHING to give me a kick up the ass, Gungalo - funny how those little things can put you back on track.
    :)S
reply by Gungalo on 10-Apr-2013
    Yep and keep you there too girl.
Comment from Opal H.
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Sounds like some anti-technology poem. Written and posted through technology. But I get your point. We shut ourselves off with technology instead of opening ourselves up.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013


reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
    you've GOT the point, Opal, exactly dear! :)))S
Comment from October21
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Is anybody there?

... I think not Sharyn! You're right, we're all too busy on our phones and laptops, on social-networking and not what. Sometimes we need a break. In response to your poem I am switching my phone off for the day tomorrow. Great idea you have given me:-)

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013


reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
    yeah!! inspiration strikes! Good for you Shenel! :)S
reply by October21 on 10-Apr-2013
    Hehe:-) xx
Comment from nancyjam
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Oh I love this. It's so true - every one is either texting,
talking or web searching no matter where they are.
I was at a wedding once when one of the bridesmaids cell phone
went off!! On the altar!!!
the lovely girl with the smile, skipping along to her own music gives us hope.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013


reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
    OMG Nancy - how funny re the bridesmaid - and how AWFUL!!!! tHX SO MUCH - GLAD YOU ENJOYED THIS ONE:
    :)SHARYN