All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Butterfly Blue"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from dmt1967
I think you are right trust plays a very big part in it I love that picture its spectacular I like the style used as well thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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I think you are right trust plays a very big part in it I love that picture its spectacular I like the style used as well thank you for sharing
Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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thx so much my dear! :)S
Comment from rama devi
Sure do!
This is a wonderfully whimsical free verse posing the eternal questions of what's next, and why, etc. in a most unique style and with original imagery, tone and phrasing. I enjoyed the upbeat energy and snappy cadences, nicely nuanced with 'harmonics' by the random rhyming and good use of spacing for dramatic pause effect.
Favorite part to contemplate:
life and death
are
one butterfly breath
apart ...
but when my heart
stops beating
do I float like fairy light to heights of blissful limbo
and sit in glory? is that the story?
Favorite part to read aloud:
and what do I do, drifting in space
with a smile on my face, racing to nowhere
for no reason
except that my season
is over,
but I'm not in clover
'cause I'm waiting for answers
to the unanswerable?
what's next?
that's the vexing question
Artistic presentation(nice artwork)!
Good choice to use no caps and minimal punctuation.
Did not notice any nits.
enjoyed the phonetics of poetic devices like rhyme, assonance etc.
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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Sure do!
This is a wonderfully whimsical free verse posing the eternal questions of what's next, and why, etc. in a most unique style and with original imagery, tone and phrasing. I enjoyed the upbeat energy and snappy cadences, nicely nuanced with 'harmonics' by the random rhyming and good use of spacing for dramatic pause effect.
Favorite part to contemplate:
life and death
are
one butterfly breath
apart ...
but when my heart
stops beating
do I float like fairy light to heights of blissful limbo
and sit in glory? is that the story?
Favorite part to read aloud:
and what do I do, drifting in space
with a smile on my face, racing to nowhere
for no reason
except that my season
is over,
but I'm not in clover
'cause I'm waiting for answers
to the unanswerable?
what's next?
that's the vexing question
Artistic presentation(nice artwork)!
Good choice to use no caps and minimal punctuation.
Did not notice any nits.
enjoyed the phonetics of poetic devices like rhyme, assonance etc.
Love,
rd
Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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glad you enjoyed this one rd! :)))S - actually it came from my digging out (finally!) my 2nd play to work on ... I figured I'd incorporate some poetry into it! :)))
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Yay! :)
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hi Sharyn,
As always a work that helps me pause and ponder. Loved the imagery in your poem. Sure makes me think of roller coasters in a whole new way.
I loved this one, and such great alignment, for we must all find that trust.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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Hi Sharyn,
As always a work that helps me pause and ponder. Loved the imagery in your poem. Sure makes me think of roller coasters in a whole new way.
I loved this one, and such great alignment, for we must all find that trust.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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thx maureen! :)S
Comment from words
I love your philosophical ponder on 'what's next".
I do think that the spirit is eternal and that this life is such a glorious adventure that whatever IS next won't be any less interesting.
Hopefully, if we have risen to the challenges here ... we will have gained some abilities than we can take with us on the next leg of the adventure.
Hugs, d
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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I love your philosophical ponder on 'what's next".
I do think that the spirit is eternal and that this life is such a glorious adventure that whatever IS next won't be any less interesting.
Hopefully, if we have risen to the challenges here ... we will have gained some abilities than we can take with us on the next leg of the adventure.
Hugs, d
Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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indeed, d ... we'll all just have to go along for the ride, right? and trust ... :)
Comment from Deniz22
I do know. Not because I'm a man, or because I'm better than others, but because I asked long ago when it seemed death rendered life meaningless. Christ is alive and offers forgiveness and new life in Him to anyone who will believe.
The Apostles were eye witnesses of His resurrection and while it may seem easy to discount that, a comparison of their other writings with this report reveals that lying simply doesn't fit into the tenor of said writings which are of the highest ethical consistency.
You can tell me to "bug off" or "that's good for you" but really, you are left with conjecture if you discount the reality of Christ. Dennis
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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I do know. Not because I'm a man, or because I'm better than others, but because I asked long ago when it seemed death rendered life meaningless. Christ is alive and offers forgiveness and new life in Him to anyone who will believe.
The Apostles were eye witnesses of His resurrection and while it may seem easy to discount that, a comparison of their other writings with this report reveals that lying simply doesn't fit into the tenor of said writings which are of the highest ethical consistency.
You can tell me to "bug off" or "that's good for you" but really, you are left with conjecture if you discount the reality of Christ. Dennis
Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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and do I discount that reality anywhere in this piece, Dennis dear? no, I do not ... precisely the point of my piece ... we're always wondering, yes? :)))
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But emphatically no, if we believe the record. :)
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and there you have "faith" my dear friend, yes? :)))))
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Faith has to be in something or someone. It can't simply exist without an object and truly be faith.
Neither is it supposed to be a "leap of faith" a jump into the dark, merely hoping for the best for no reason.
As I'm sure you are well aware, the Bible has much to say about the faith. Scripture informs us as to what true faith is so that we can confidently say, "I know". Hebrews 11:6
But without faith it is impossible to please Him, for he who comes to God must believe that He is, and that He is a rewarder of those who diligently seek Him.
Here is the faith revealed; Godâ??s Everlasting Love
31 What then shall we say to these things? If God is for us, who can be against us? 32 He who did not spare His own Son, but delivered Him up for us all, how shall He not with Him also freely give us all things? 33 Who shall bring a charge against Godâ??s elect? It is God who justifies. 34 Who is he who condemns? It is Christ who died, and furthermore is also risen, who is even at the right hand of God, who also makes intercession for us. 35 Who shall separate us from the love of Christ? Shall tribulation, or distress, or persecution, or famine, or nakedness, or peril, or sword? 36 As it is written:
â??For Your sake we are killed all day long;
We are accounted as sheep for the slaughter.â??[c]
37 Yet in all these things we are more than conquerors through Him who loved us. 38 For I am persuaded that neither death nor life, nor angels nor principalities nor powers, nor things present nor things to come, 39 nor height nor depth, nor any other created thing, shall be able to separate us from the love of God which is in Christ Jesus our Lord. God bless you, Dennis
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Comment from angelmagnet
If we knew what was next, half of the mystery of life that inspires and drives us might not exist. Still, part of me agrees that it would be fun to know. Smiles, Cindy
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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If we knew what was next, half of the mystery of life that inspires and drives us might not exist. Still, part of me agrees that it would be fun to know. Smiles, Cindy
Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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thx cindy! :)s
Comment from Tina McKala
I knew that even a philosophical poem can be poetic and wonderful! This was really a great poem, perfect flow in your typical style, the visions of butterflies throughout the entire poem were great!
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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I knew that even a philosophical poem can be poetic and wonderful! This was really a great poem, perfect flow in your typical style, the visions of butterflies throughout the entire poem were great!
Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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thx so much Tina! :)Sharyn
Comment from ravenblack
I will never look at a roller-coaster the same way again. so many good lines here, really can't get them all down w/out a re-type. the excitement of a roller coaster is in the not knowing and in not knowing, there is joy in every curve and plunge. I wish I knew, but I will not base my entire life in looking for the answer. just buckle up and enjoy the ride! ( which you obviously do).
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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I will never look at a roller-coaster the same way again. so many good lines here, really can't get them all down w/out a re-type. the excitement of a roller coaster is in the not knowing and in not knowing, there is joy in every curve and plunge. I wish I knew, but I will not base my entire life in looking for the answer. just buckle up and enjoy the ride! ( which you obviously do).
Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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that's exactly as far as my plans go my dear! bless you for your lovely sixer on this one! :))))Sharyn
ps: all quiet on the featured page front today - whew ... O god is good ... and so are platypi! :)S
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hey, there aren't enough !!!!!!! in your reply!
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I figured I'd make it subtle ... see if you caught it ... you did not fail me!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Comment from Gungalo
do we all vanish
into ephemeral
butterfly blue?
If we have to vanish I cannot think of a better place to do it. I don't want to think about it cause it will come soon enough.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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do we all vanish
into ephemeral
butterfly blue?
If we have to vanish I cannot think of a better place to do it. I don't want to think about it cause it will come soon enough.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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aaah, I know you love blue butterflies too gungalo - thank you dear! :)S
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Sighing and smiling
Comment from Glasstruth
Seems as if you're asking what's your purpose in life at the stage you're in now. Is life a roller coaster ride? No, I don't think so. There's a reason, but like you I don't know. My favorite verse:
"life and death
are
one butterfly breath
apart ...
but when my heart
stops beating
do I float like fairy light to heights of blissful limbo
and sit in glory? is that the story?"
Especially like "butterfly breath" So original. A wonderful post! Les
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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Seems as if you're asking what's your purpose in life at the stage you're in now. Is life a roller coaster ride? No, I don't think so. There's a reason, but like you I don't know. My favorite verse:
"life and death
are
one butterfly breath
apart ...
but when my heart
stops beating
do I float like fairy light to heights of blissful limbo
and sit in glory? is that the story?"
Especially like "butterfly breath" So original. A wonderful post! Les
Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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thx so much Les - glad you enjoyed! :))S
