All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Butterfly Blue"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Gregory K Shipman
This should be a 'six' I'm laying on you... or even a 'ten'.
You have, Sharyn, very poetically and beautifully posed the oft repeated question... Is there or isn't there?... are we or aren't we?... will we or won't we?... is life after death, life... or not?
'life and death
are
one butterfly breath
apart ...'
The above seven words are the meat of this poem... you have phrased it so well that it says almost everything. The questions and descriptors in this poem have such deep meaning and is this not one of man's ongoing great questions... Is it life we'll see or the great void which we won't?
You surely script, my dear, with the best of them.
greg
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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This should be a 'six' I'm laying on you... or even a 'ten'.
You have, Sharyn, very poetically and beautifully posed the oft repeated question... Is there or isn't there?... are we or aren't we?... will we or won't we?... is life after death, life... or not?
'life and death
are
one butterfly breath
apart ...'
The above seven words are the meat of this poem... you have phrased it so well that it says almost everything. The questions and descriptors in this poem have such deep meaning and is this not one of man's ongoing great questions... Is it life we'll see or the great void which we won't?
You surely script, my dear, with the best of them.
greg
Comment Written 04-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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bless you greg - glad you "got" this one! so ... butterfly blue, or butterfly stew, hmm? :))))))))))))))
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You wrote it... I read it... if I don't get it, I have to sharpen my brain... 'cause your 'writes' are always tremendous... it's why I 'blank' you... ahem!
greg
Comment from Charlene0513
To visionary1234
An after thought as you wonder one of life's little mystery's.
A good simile and metaphor in one noted with:
"do I float like fairy light to heights of blissful limbo".
Just a suggestion but I thought "that's the vexing question" to say the perpetual or perplexing question.
Charlene
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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To visionary1234
An after thought as you wonder one of life's little mystery's.
A good simile and metaphor in one noted with:
"do I float like fairy light to heights of blissful limbo".
Just a suggestion but I thought "that's the vexing question" to say the perpetual or perplexing question.
Charlene
Comment Written 04-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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interesting suggestion Charlene ... I guess the reason I chose "vexing" was that the word has a rhythm of its own that fits better, makes a smooth trochaic meter ... ? hmmm ... a perpetually perplexing question in itself, hmm?
:)Sharyn
Comment from Galactia
This is an excellent poem, very well presented. I think we all ponder on the question on what really happens after we gone, we know we have electricity running through our bodies, so we know or presume it will create an energy flow even after we have passed, does it slowly in time die out, we just return to the abyss or is their another learning curve for us to travel in the spiritual world. Don't know.
Only the universal creator knows.
LOVED IT
Regards
tia
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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This is an excellent poem, very well presented. I think we all ponder on the question on what really happens after we gone, we know we have electricity running through our bodies, so we know or presume it will create an energy flow even after we have passed, does it slowly in time die out, we just return to the abyss or is their another learning curve for us to travel in the spiritual world. Don't know.
Only the universal creator knows.
LOVED IT
Regards
tia
Comment Written 04-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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Don't know ... that's what it always comes down to, doesn't it Tia? thx! :)Sharyn
Comment from mizzkris20
I love the poem. I love butterflies. You chose the perfect photo for your poem and your choice of words are amazing. As always, a lovely poem. And yes I do wish I knew.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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I love the poem. I love butterflies. You chose the perfect photo for your poem and your choice of words are amazing. As always, a lovely poem. And yes I do wish I knew.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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thx so much mizzkris! :)S
Comment from Selina Stambi
You found a stunning picture to offset another fizzin' piece of verse.
Frothing, foaming, bouncing, bursting .... this is your usual enchanting fare
with flair you write - deep or trite ... you make it a delight!
did you mean fairy light or lights (just checking because of the internal rhyme you have going)
Fab job, dear girl!! Virtual six - site rules, alas ....
Hugs xxx :)
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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You found a stunning picture to offset another fizzin' piece of verse.
Frothing, foaming, bouncing, bursting .... this is your usual enchanting fare
with flair you write - deep or trite ... you make it a delight!
did you mean fairy light or lights (just checking because of the internal rhyme you have going)
Fab job, dear girl!! Virtual six - site rules, alas ....
Hugs xxx :)
Comment Written 04-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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thx so much my dear - no, I actually chose "light" in the singular as it's just "me" - much as I would like to have gone for the 'perfect' rhyme ...
:)S
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Yes! I do wish I knew. No one has come back to tell us, have they! Blind faith, that is what we have to have, and I for one dare not leave this mortal body thinking that was it!! If I go before you, I'll try to let you know!! LOL Love the way you wrote this, it is a rhyming poem, and it's not, work that out. I am sharp today. LOL. xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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Yes! I do wish I knew. No one has come back to tell us, have they! Blind faith, that is what we have to have, and I for one dare not leave this mortal body thinking that was it!! If I go before you, I'll try to let you know!! LOL Love the way you wrote this, it is a rhyming poem, and it's not, work that out. I am sharp today. LOL. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 04-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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a lovely six!! wow! thank you so much sandra - yes, blind faith is exactly what it comes down to, yes???
:)Sharyn
Comment from God's Writer
A beautiful poem my friend. As fresh as a mountain brook. As sweet as honey fresh off the comb. Thank you for this fabulous work.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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A beautiful poem my friend. As fresh as a mountain brook. As sweet as honey fresh off the comb. Thank you for this fabulous work.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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bless you Eric - I hope you are feeling less in pain?
:)Sharyn
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I slept wrong. So it is back to square one again. It will be 6-8 weeks before I am most of the way through it.
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Thank you my dear friend.
Comment from robina1978
This is a long poem with serious questions. A lovely picture to complement it. I considered it a free verse. I loved life and death are one butterfly breath apart best.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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This is a long poem with serious questions. A lovely picture to complement it. I considered it a free verse. I loved life and death are one butterfly breath apart best.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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It is free verse Ine - lots of thoughts, hmm? :)S
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Is ir not? What is it then?
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yes my dear, it was just confusing when you said "I considered it a free verse" - yes, my dear, what else could it be? I thought YOU were suggesting it might be something else! how funny! :)))
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no, I did not mean it like that:)
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I know, dear, I know. :)))
Comment from Indie Skreet
well Sharyn, I am keeping score and sorry I have no sixes but ever overly generous, they have been spent. this is another beauty which I very much enjoyed reading. best as always Indie :)
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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well Sharyn, I am keeping score and sorry I have no sixes but ever overly generous, they have been spent. this is another beauty which I very much enjoyed reading. best as always Indie :)
Comment Written 04-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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thx Indie! :)S
Comment from emjaihammond
This is a nicely written piece with a lot to ponder. I guess we all think about this at one time or another. I liked the rhythm of the poetry you have written, as it flows easily and the verse is easy to follow. You have used a lovely picture, adding to the overall beauty of your poem. Nicely done!
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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This is a nicely written piece with a lot to ponder. I guess we all think about this at one time or another. I liked the rhythm of the poetry you have written, as it flows easily and the verse is easy to follow. You have used a lovely picture, adding to the overall beauty of your poem. Nicely done!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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thx so much MJ! :)Sharyn
