All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Butterfly Blue"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from DALLAS01
If I had a six you would have it. Love the poetic musing over a question, I am sure we all ponder from time to time. Your metaphor is intriguing. And as usual you slip that unique rhyme scheme in there to distinguish it.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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If I had a six you would have it. Love the poetic musing over a question, I am sure we all ponder from time to time. Your metaphor is intriguing. And as usual you slip that unique rhyme scheme in there to distinguish it.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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and again on this one! I do like playing with internal rhyming, I must admit! Should have been born a rapper, hmm? :)Sharyn
Comment from isurp
I liked this poem! The roller coaster analogy is strong and I love the two butterfly references with breath and blue. My favorite line was "float like fairy lights to heights of blissful limbo." Sign me up; I'm in. Nicely written! -Steve
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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I liked this poem! The roller coaster analogy is strong and I love the two butterfly references with breath and blue. My favorite line was "float like fairy lights to heights of blissful limbo." Sign me up; I'm in. Nicely written! -Steve
Comment Written 05-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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Thx so much Steve! :)S
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem flows so well that one is tempted to put it to music. It would probably have to be jazz. It would fit in there well, I think.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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This poem flows so well that one is tempted to put it to music. It would probably have to be jazz. It would fit in there well, I think.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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You don't happen to WRITE music, do you Bill? I'm actually looking at this one as part of a one-woman show and I would LOVE to find someone who could do it and yes, "jazzy" is exactly the sound I'm looking for!!! Be still my heart!
:)Sharyn
Comment from CR Delport
You express yourself in your own way. Your words carry your message and it is well delivered. I was fascinated with the art work though. Its fantastic.
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You express yourself in your own way. Your words carry your message and it is well delivered. I was fascinated with the art work though. Its fantastic.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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thx so much CR! :)Sharyn
Comment from richardwarfe
The big question is tackled so often and like how you have embraced that at it's core. It is a question, posed over and over, by our own minds as we contemplate the butterfly blue, and by you with your prose that demands we engage with that question over and over. I believe writing is a journey with you and not a destination and I appreciate that.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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The big question is tackled so often and like how you have embraced that at it's core. It is a question, posed over and over, by our own minds as we contemplate the butterfly blue, and by you with your prose that demands we engage with that question over and over. I believe writing is a journey with you and not a destination and I appreciate that.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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absolutely - I don't believe in presenting neat solutions Richard! :)Sharyn
Comment from G.B. Smith
Aloha sweet Sharyn
I loved this reminds me of the poem I just published (Now it's just an empty bench remembering my Mother), and wondering why she left me. I have a lot of questions of my own. I guess I'll just have to ask God when I get there
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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Aloha sweet Sharyn
I loved this reminds me of the poem I just published (Now it's just an empty bench remembering my Mother), and wondering why she left me. I have a lot of questions of my own. I guess I'll just have to ask God when I get there
Comment Written 05-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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If you get there before I do, let me know, Glen, ok? :)Sharyn
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I'll be sure to email you
Comment from Neil A Morrow
Hi visionary, this poem that you have written and thankfully conceived is so beautiful to read. Such a great use of words and so masterfully crafted in your style it carries me away in reverie. Thank you so much for your creation.
Neil
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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Hi visionary, this poem that you have written and thankfully conceived is so beautiful to read. Such a great use of words and so masterfully crafted in your style it carries me away in reverie. Thank you so much for your creation.
Neil
Comment Written 05-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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Neil, what a delightful review! Thank you so much!
Best wishes,
Sharyn
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Sharyn,
Beautiful expressive writing and a fair question to end. As an engineer myself, I never went on roller coasters or anything that involved rapid acceleration, falling great heights etc, trusting that the engineer who did the maths was competent. As to the BIG question? Just keep hoping, I guess.
Great poem.
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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Dear Sharyn,
Beautiful expressive writing and a fair question to end. As an engineer myself, I never went on roller coasters or anything that involved rapid acceleration, falling great heights etc, trusting that the engineer who did the maths was competent. As to the BIG question? Just keep hoping, I guess.
Great poem.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 05-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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Fingers crossed, Reg! Lovely to hear from you, my dear :)))Sharyn
Comment from Michael Wayne
Great free verse poem! The use of rhyme was perfectly placed and allowed for a magnificent rhythm. The theme of the unknown was wonderfully explored before slimming it down to the essence of simply wishing to know. Very well done. This is a piece in which you should be quite proud.
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Great free verse poem! The use of rhyme was perfectly placed and allowed for a magnificent rhythm. The theme of the unknown was wonderfully explored before slimming it down to the essence of simply wishing to know. Very well done. This is a piece in which you should be quite proud.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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Bless you Michael, and a huge THANK YOU for your lovely six on this one. I just reviewed one of your pieces and I can see that, like me, you are a lover of beautiful language!
:)Sharyn
Comment from JMRoland
Hi visionary1234,
This sprightly poem poses intriguing questions about the hereafter in a delightful, butterfly-fluttery way. Very nicely done.
It is only natural that we humans should wonder what happens when we die.
This reader wonders too...
Because when we dream, our spirit beings move about in a dream world and we are very much in the dream world yet all the while our corporeal bodies lie sleeping. They say that in their dreams, the blind see, the lame walk...missing limbs are whole and perfect again...
God is good.
So perhaps we rehearse death every night.
Like little lessons to lessen fright.
And you are right. It does come down to trust after all.
JMR
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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Hi visionary1234,
This sprightly poem poses intriguing questions about the hereafter in a delightful, butterfly-fluttery way. Very nicely done.
It is only natural that we humans should wonder what happens when we die.
This reader wonders too...
Because when we dream, our spirit beings move about in a dream world and we are very much in the dream world yet all the while our corporeal bodies lie sleeping. They say that in their dreams, the blind see, the lame walk...missing limbs are whole and perfect again...
God is good.
So perhaps we rehearse death every night.
Like little lessons to lessen fright.
And you are right. It does come down to trust after all.
JMR
Comment Written 05-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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Bless you JMR! :) Sharyn
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Blessings to you also. You have hit upon such an interesting subject- I hope to compose some verses about it to try and understand things better. Poetry tends to distill thoughts into a more mentally digestible form. Keep at it- you have a gift for writing. :)
JMR
