All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Butterfly Blue"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Sharyn,
This was a unique premise for a poem. Although it is about a serious subject, I love that you wrote it in a very light-hearted way .... 'just wondering' type of a write. My fave line "what lies at the top of the roller coaster" .... a good way of putting it.
A very entertaining read. It captured and held my interest. Love the artwork, and the light blue background with dark blue print pops off of the page at the reader to help draw them int.
Very nice Sharyn!
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
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Sharyn,
This was a unique premise for a poem. Although it is about a serious subject, I love that you wrote it in a very light-hearted way .... 'just wondering' type of a write. My fave line "what lies at the top of the roller coaster" .... a good way of putting it.
A very entertaining read. It captured and held my interest. Love the artwork, and the light blue background with dark blue print pops off of the page at the reader to help draw them int.
Very nice Sharyn!
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
Comment Written 06-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
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Bless you Connie - thank you so much - so glad you caught this one. :)Sharyn
Comment from allborn66
This is a wonderful poem. I love the theme, and how you express it. The tone is appropriate. I love the butterfly analogy. The picture is great.
Barbara
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
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This is a wonderful poem. I love the theme, and how you express it. The tone is appropriate. I love the butterfly analogy. The picture is great.
Barbara
Comment Written 06-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
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thx so much Barbara! :)Sharyn
Comment from Deborah Marie
Lovely poem, photo choice and questions asked. Your poem is "food for thought..." Set-up, progression, rhythm and flow make it an excellent read. Thanks for sharing, Deb
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
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Lovely poem, photo choice and questions asked. Your poem is "food for thought..." Set-up, progression, rhythm and flow make it an excellent read. Thanks for sharing, Deb
Comment Written 06-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
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thx so much Deb! :)Sharyn
Comment from Tonulak
Yes, or maybe just faith. I'm OK with mystery, I guess I'll find out when i get there. Like Theodore Rothke's vilanelle: "I wake to sleep and take my waking slow/ I learn by going where I have to go":) HNice poem, my dear--Ted
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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Yes, or maybe just faith. I'm OK with mystery, I guess I'll find out when i get there. Like Theodore Rothke's vilanelle: "I wake to sleep and take my waking slow/ I learn by going where I have to go":) HNice poem, my dear--Ted
Comment Written 05-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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thx Ted - see you there! :)))S
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Sharyn. Sorry about my tardiness in reviewing, I have been out having fun and creating adventures for a few days and now I am way behind. I loved this piece as much as I love all of your work. You often leave me pondering about many things. I enjoyed the twist in this one, you made me hold my breat. Cheers Fez.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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G'day Sharyn. Sorry about my tardiness in reviewing, I have been out having fun and creating adventures for a few days and now I am way behind. I loved this piece as much as I love all of your work. You often leave me pondering about many things. I enjoyed the twist in this one, you made me hold my breat. Cheers Fez.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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You just keep spinning those yarns Fez - you've really hit your stride! :)S
Comment from JM daSilva
This is a poem that brings together religion and philosophy. And a bit of sadness since nobody can prove anything since that's not a scientific issue. Great feat, huh?
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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This is a poem that brings together religion and philosophy. And a bit of sadness since nobody can prove anything since that's not a scientific issue. Great feat, huh?
Comment Written 05-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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not bad, not bad ... :)))
Comment from GeraldS
This is a well written, well constructed piece. The narrative seemed dark to me, probably due to the uncertainty at the end. Of course, none of us really know what awaits us. People have ideas and expectations, some of which are confounding to others, but it all boils down to a person's beliefs. The message of this poem is thought provoking. It does a good job of stirring the reader's imagination.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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This is a well written, well constructed piece. The narrative seemed dark to me, probably due to the uncertainty at the end. Of course, none of us really know what awaits us. People have ideas and expectations, some of which are confounding to others, but it all boils down to a person's beliefs. The message of this poem is thought provoking. It does a good job of stirring the reader's imagination.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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then it does the job Gerald - thx so much my dear! :)Sharyn
Comment from fairydancer
Hi Sharyn,
Some very thought-provoking questions here. Love your free style!! Great rhythm and occasional rhymes. Just flows so well. Excellent - Cally :)
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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Hi Sharyn,
Some very thought-provoking questions here. Love your free style!! Great rhythm and occasional rhymes. Just flows so well. Excellent - Cally :)
Comment Written 05-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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thx so much Cally - I think my son pounds me with rap music, which is full of assonance and internal rhyming (as well as DISSONANCE of course!)
:))Sharyn
Comment from Starlit Ink
It does come down to dust in the end, and that is a good reason to live with a wisdom of what is important. Your use of touches of rhyme in the free verse is very effective. I also like the questions that you ask, which make the reader think about destiny. It's a profound write that sees beyond the surfaces.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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It does come down to dust in the end, and that is a good reason to live with a wisdom of what is important. Your use of touches of rhyme in the free verse is very effective. I also like the questions that you ask, which make the reader think about destiny. It's a profound write that sees beyond the surfaces.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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thx so much starlit! :))Sharyn
Comment from Taffspride
Such beautiful expressive writing Sharyn. You ask something that of late I have been thinking about. If only we could know.
This beautiful poem certainly deserves the highest rating. My only question is the use of "floating like fairy light" somehow it seems out of place. Perhaps "floating feather like" or some such wording would have more impact. JMHO.
Thank you for sharing.
Iechyd da
Ann
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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Such beautiful expressive writing Sharyn. You ask something that of late I have been thinking about. If only we could know.
This beautiful poem certainly deserves the highest rating. My only question is the use of "floating like fairy light" somehow it seems out of place. Perhaps "floating feather like" or some such wording would have more impact. JMHO.
Thank you for sharing.
Iechyd da
Ann
Comment Written 05-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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bless you for your lovely six on this one Ann - I changed that line as Ed Baldwin had suggested something different too - just made it "feather light" and I like it. Thank you for the suggestion (as well as that lovely sixer of course!)
:)Sharyn
