Blood Covenant
Resurrected love has soul wrenching consequences27 total reviews
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi amahra,
This is a creepy story to say the least. It is obvious to me that you are a master story teller and I enjoyed this from the begging to the very end. One needs to be careful when taking a blood covenant. Well done and good luck in the contest....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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Hi amahra,
This is a creepy story to say the least. It is obvious to me that you are a master story teller and I enjoyed this from the begging to the very end. One needs to be careful when taking a blood covenant. Well done and good luck in the contest....blessings, chey
Comment Written 30-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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Thank you chey so much for taking the time to read and review my little story. I'm glad you liked it and thanks for the stars.
Comment from Luna Darkwaters
A very intriguing and spine tingling tale containing a perfect blend of love, loss and terror. It does well to remind us why we should let the dead stay dead, well done! I wish you luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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A very intriguing and spine tingling tale containing a perfect blend of love, loss and terror. It does well to remind us why we should let the dead stay dead, well done! I wish you luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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Oh thank you so much Darkwaters. I really do appreciate all the stars and particularly the fact that you like it.
Comment from mprsflame
No suggestions, no helpful hints for improvement. The story was chilling straight to the bone. Black arts are nothing to play around with. This is a wonderful example of why that is true.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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No suggestions, no helpful hints for improvement. The story was chilling straight to the bone. Black arts are nothing to play around with. This is a wonderful example of why that is true.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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Thank you so much mprsflame for reading and reviewing my little story. I was just told that the ending was a bit too abrupt. so I'll work on that after the contest to resent it elsewhere. Thank you again my dear.
Comment from marijmd
You had me at rain falling like hot pee. Seriously though - your story is nice and gritty, filled with intense emotions. You really feel sorry for those kids.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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You had me at rain falling like hot pee. Seriously though - your story is nice and gritty, filled with intense emotions. You really feel sorry for those kids.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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Thank you marijmd. I appreciate it much.
Comment from Spitfire
Wow! This was spell binding. (no pun intended) I couldn't stop reading. The part about Maus-- is that all your imagination or ancient folklore? The opening made me think of the short story "The Monkey's Paw". Interesting spell you dreams up-- the urine and blood clots. Yucky. One phrase caught me up short: the joyful silence. For me, the word choice of "joyful" broke the mood. A short wrap up at the end:As it turned out, Matilda wasn't a witch at...
It's like you tired of writing this and wanted a quick finish. Even so, the dialogue and descriptions are great. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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Wow! This was spell binding. (no pun intended) I couldn't stop reading. The part about Maus-- is that all your imagination or ancient folklore? The opening made me think of the short story "The Monkey's Paw". Interesting spell you dreams up-- the urine and blood clots. Yucky. One phrase caught me up short: the joyful silence. For me, the word choice of "joyful" broke the mood. A short wrap up at the end:As it turned out, Matilda wasn't a witch at...
It's like you tired of writing this and wanted a quick finish. Even so, the dialogue and descriptions are great. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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Thank you so much for all the stars but mostly for reading and giving me your honest opinion. I'll read over those parts that bothered you "joyful" and see. But I had to quickly wrap it up because of the contest. They suggested no less than 2000 and no more than 7000 words but recommend 3500 so I had to wrap it up because it's 4750 already. But since you said that, I'll make the ending longer and more convincing after the contest. Again, thank you my dear.
Comment from EmberSnowcat
That was freaky! Extremely freaky! I love how this mother went from someone who was wonderful, to someone you despised because she took her pain out on the poor children, to liking her once again because she realized it was time to be a mother to her children again. Your story was very easy to read, the dialogue was smooth,and you held my attention from start to finish! Excellent job!
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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That was freaky! Extremely freaky! I love how this mother went from someone who was wonderful, to someone you despised because she took her pain out on the poor children, to liking her once again because she realized it was time to be a mother to her children again. Your story was very easy to read, the dialogue was smooth,and you held my attention from start to finish! Excellent job!
Comment Written 30-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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Thank you so much Snowcat for reading, reviewing and enjoying my short story. I really do appreciate you taking the time, my dear.
Comment from Enrique28
I am not into horror stories, but I appreciate a well written, and imaginative tale. It's all about good narrative and dialogue, and character descriptions...
"He possessed beastly eyes that glittered from beneath ash rubbery skin that drew back in a hideous demonic grin."
I rest my case! Enrique
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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I am not into horror stories, but I appreciate a well written, and imaginative tale. It's all about good narrative and dialogue, and character descriptions...
"He possessed beastly eyes that glittered from beneath ash rubbery skin that drew back in a hideous demonic grin."
I rest my case! Enrique
Comment Written 30-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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Thank you sweetie, I always appreciate Your review.
Comment from God's Writer
A very interesting story. A blood covenant is a very serious thing. One had better be willing to stick to his word. I enjoyed this story very much.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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A very interesting story. A blood covenant is a very serious thing. One had better be willing to stick to his word. I enjoyed this story very much.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Thank you for reading, Poet.
Comment from robina1978
The picture is scary for a start. I read it very carefully but still don't know which woman was against her and the children. I think the last one. But at the end the are all safe, I think...
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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The picture is scary for a start. I read it very carefully but still don't know which woman was against her and the children. I think the last one. But at the end the are all safe, I think...
Comment Written 29-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Thank you for your review.
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most welcome, Ine
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, amahra, you did an excellent job writing this story about the woman that got what she asked for but didn't like the consequences of dealing in black magic. excellent imagery provided throughout. one error i spotted--she hated their whining, not wining. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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this is very well written, amahra, you did an excellent job writing this story about the woman that got what she asked for but didn't like the consequences of dealing in black magic. excellent imagery provided throughout. one error i spotted--she hated their whining, not wining. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Thank you. I'll correct that.
