Leo
a young boy and his dog42 total reviews
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hey there Al
Back in January, I posted a story about my dog Butch. I fully understand your bond. This is a superb Share A Story In A Poem contest entry, and I am sure you'll do very well
Bear
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2013
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Hey there Al
Back in January, I posted a story about my dog Butch. I fully understand your bond. This is a superb Share A Story In A Poem contest entry, and I am sure you'll do very well
Bear
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the excellent review and your kind words.
Comment from Bryana
Oh my friend, dogs are such faithful companions. I've had several dogs, never bought one always gave a home to homeless animals. Thanks to you and your father Leo had a caring family.
The story of Leo is beautifully written my dear friend, I smiled while I read it.
I wish you good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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Oh my friend, dogs are such faithful companions. I've had several dogs, never bought one always gave a home to homeless animals. Thanks to you and your father Leo had a caring family.
The story of Leo is beautifully written my dear friend, I smiled while I read it.
I wish you good luck in the contest
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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Thanks for an excellent review and your good wishes.
Comment from Righteous Riter
The writer uses the abab rhyme scheme effectively. The rhyming is good. This piece has a nice flow as the rhymes are not forced. This piece has nice harmony and a message that is clear.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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The writer uses the abab rhyme scheme effectively. The rhyming is good. This piece has a nice flow as the rhymes are not forced. This piece has nice harmony and a message that is clear.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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Thanks for an excellent review.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
I really enjoyed reading this one. I have a dog who has been comforting me ever since my accident-woman's best friend, LOL. A lovely story told with good rhyme and proximate rhyme.~Debbie
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2013
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I really enjoyed reading this one. I have a dog who has been comforting me ever since my accident-woman's best friend, LOL. A lovely story told with good rhyme and proximate rhyme.~Debbie
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2013
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Thanks for an excellent review; I am quite grateful.
Comment from lorijean
This is so touching, the love of any animal is so rewarding, does'nt matter what you look like they just adore you and will always be there by your side.......
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2013
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This is so touching, the love of any animal is so rewarding, does'nt matter what you look like they just adore you and will always be there by your side.......
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2013
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Thanks for an excellent review.
Comment from MelissaBickel
I love proximate rhymes myself.
Wow, this is a to the heart story/poem. That saying "A boy and his dog"...this is true but even more than that, he brought comfort and love and belief..
That is something you'll find in most dogs, their ability to love so freely and completely.. I've seen it to often, even when abused and battered, they want to love..
*sniffle*..... you made the mother in me want to hug and stroke the boys hair. Good thing I get to visit my son soon. I need to give my boy a hug.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2013
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I love proximate rhymes myself.
Wow, this is a to the heart story/poem. That saying "A boy and his dog"...this is true but even more than that, he brought comfort and love and belief..
That is something you'll find in most dogs, their ability to love so freely and completely.. I've seen it to often, even when abused and battered, they want to love..
*sniffle*..... you made the mother in me want to hug and stroke the boys hair. Good thing I get to visit my son soon. I need to give my boy a hug.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2013
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Thanks for the exceptional review. Yes, I think Leo had some parental instincts. You are quite right about a dog's ability to love unconditionally. Thanks again. (I sent you a PM.)
Comment from Child of the King
A story resounding with the happiness of a boy and his dog. It is so true that animals take our problems off of ourselves and are there to console us. They are finding that a lot of Seniors are living longer if they have a pet to tend to.
Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2013
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A story resounding with the happiness of a boy and his dog. It is so true that animals take our problems off of ourselves and are there to console us. They are finding that a lot of Seniors are living longer if they have a pet to tend to.
Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2013
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Yes, I have seen references to those studies. Dogs, I think, also, are more capable of unconditional love than are humans. Thanks for an excellent review and your good wishes.
Comment from IndianaIrish
Very nice story in a poem, Alvin. I'm glad you had Leo help you through the hard times, and what a lovely man your dad was to allow him to stay. Best wishes in the contest.
Indty
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2013
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Very nice story in a poem, Alvin. I'm glad you had Leo help you through the hard times, and what a lovely man your dad was to allow him to stay. Best wishes in the contest.
Indty
Comment Written 25-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2013
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Thanks for an excellent review. I am very pleased.
Comment from Robert Lee Brown
Hi Teach,
I found this to be a very good story in a poem and I wouldn't expect less coming from you. I found it to be a good read with a first person POV, down to the 1st line of the 8th stanza where I tripped over the introduction of a fourth character: "I saw how much the dog loved this young boy."
I don't know why you would use passed tense and not keep the POW on yourself, which you switched back to in the next line. Maybe it is a over sight since this entry has been modified from the initial posting. This is the only thing I see that would stand in the way of your winning. Your friend, Bob
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2013
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Hi Teach,
I found this to be a very good story in a poem and I wouldn't expect less coming from you. I found it to be a good read with a first person POV, down to the 1st line of the 8th stanza where I tripped over the introduction of a fourth character: "I saw how much the dog loved this young boy."
I don't know why you would use passed tense and not keep the POW on yourself, which you switched back to in the next line. Maybe it is a over sight since this entry has been modified from the initial posting. This is the only thing I see that would stand in the way of your winning. Your friend, Bob
Comment Written 25-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2013
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I tired of referring to myself in the first person, so I referred to myself in the third person. We're both old enough to remember Jimmy Carter used that literary device in his speeches, but I think I shall re-think it, because you aren't the first person to mention it. Thanks for an excellent review.
Comment from donaldww
This endearing narrative poem pairs a dog and boy, a winning combination.
I saw how much the dog loved this young boy,
(In this line, are 'I' and 'this young boy' the same person? At first I thought the narrator was giving the dog to another boy that the dog loved.)
Parents were pretty strict about dog naming. I'd let my son name a dog anything as long as it wasn't disgusting. LOL
Very enjoyable read.
Cheers,
DW
GL with the voters.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2013
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This endearing narrative poem pairs a dog and boy, a winning combination.
I saw how much the dog loved this young boy,
(In this line, are 'I' and 'this young boy' the same person? At first I thought the narrator was giving the dog to another boy that the dog loved.)
Parents were pretty strict about dog naming. I'd let my son name a dog anything as long as it wasn't disgusting. LOL
Very enjoyable read.
Cheers,
DW
GL with the voters.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2013
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Yes, I am going to have to change that line. I meant to refer to myself in the third person, but it fell flat. I'll go work on it. My parents took their faith very seriously and I think they though it would be rather sacrilegious to name a dog "Christian." Thanks for an excellent review.
