All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 42 "Midnight Blue"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
39 total reviews
Comment from DALLAS01
This one is superb. The imagery is off the charts. I especially like the use of short strong verbs that are formatted to stand alone. They give the rest of your verse a punch effect, kind of like a quick jab, if that makes any sense.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2013
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This one is superb. The imagery is off the charts. I especially like the use of short strong verbs that are formatted to stand alone. They give the rest of your verse a punch effect, kind of like a quick jab, if that makes any sense.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2013
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Bless you Dallas! I'm so delighted that you loved this one!! Thank you so much for your wonderful six, my dear! :)Sharyn
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You're welcome. :.)
Comment from poesyapprentice
You took me on a journey with this one girlie! First a cool oceanside evening, then to the farm, and next to the bedroom you share with your lover. Interesting mix there! Lovely imagery and pacing on the trip : ) Enjoyed your second and fourth verses, and great finish with the ending line. xx
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2013
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You took me on a journey with this one girlie! First a cool oceanside evening, then to the farm, and next to the bedroom you share with your lover. Interesting mix there! Lovely imagery and pacing on the trip : ) Enjoyed your second and fourth verses, and great finish with the ending line. xx
Comment Written 25-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2013
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thx poesy! :)S
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Mmmm, you do the ocean scene so darn well. Netting blue phosphorescence, dogs, owls, crickets. Even an errant rooster!
And...hot chocolate.
I'm sighing with envy.
Nice work, Sharyn.
Av
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2013
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Mmmm, you do the ocean scene so darn well. Netting blue phosphorescence, dogs, owls, crickets. Even an errant rooster!
And...hot chocolate.
I'm sighing with envy.
Nice work, Sharyn.
Av
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2013
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Bless you Av! :)
Comment from 3boysrule
Wonderful poem ... nicely done. It flows great and love the word choice. I love the picture and color choice, too. As always, your poetry doesn't let me down.
Dee
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2013
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Wonderful poem ... nicely done. It flows great and love the word choice. I love the picture and color choice, too. As always, your poetry doesn't let me down.
Dee
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2013
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bless you my dear! :)S
Comment from Gregory K Shipman
And thank you, Sharyn, for introducing me to 'Midnight Blue'... how sweet it is to be transported to a culmination of sights, scenes and details that only you, my dear friend, can put together for viewing by those of us less fortunate...
This poem is like a basketful of wonderment... a field of fresh flowers without the field or the fresh flowers but surely filled with the wonders from another place... one that you've taken me to... and I've gone willingly... oh so willingly!
As for this:
I sip
sweet 'n soothing
hot chocolate
and
wait
for you
to slip
in beside me
hip to hip
and breathe my breath
in midnight blue
A very, very lucky man!... he is!
greg
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2013
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And thank you, Sharyn, for introducing me to 'Midnight Blue'... how sweet it is to be transported to a culmination of sights, scenes and details that only you, my dear friend, can put together for viewing by those of us less fortunate...
This poem is like a basketful of wonderment... a field of fresh flowers without the field or the fresh flowers but surely filled with the wonders from another place... one that you've taken me to... and I've gone willingly... oh so willingly!
As for this:
I sip
sweet 'n soothing
hot chocolate
and
wait
for you
to slip
in beside me
hip to hip
and breathe my breath
in midnight blue
A very, very lucky man!... he is!
greg
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2013
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What a sweetheart review my dear! You could charm the blarney-stone from Ireland itself, to be shurrah!! :)))
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You deserve stellar reviews because you are stellar... and oh so... you know... oh so 'all that'!
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You deserve stellar reviews because you are stellar... and oh so... you know... oh so 'all that'!
Comment from Cornelius2000
What a lovely poem. The line, "palm fronds rustle," reminds me of my one trip to Hawaii, in November of 1972. We were in a hotel in Honolulu and I must have been on about the third floor. The windows were left open during the night and I remember hearing the palm fronds in the light breeze. Well done.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2013
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What a lovely poem. The line, "palm fronds rustle," reminds me of my one trip to Hawaii, in November of 1972. We were in a hotel in Honolulu and I must have been on about the third floor. The windows were left open during the night and I remember hearing the palm fronds in the light breeze. Well done.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2013
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thx so much Dave - that's exactly the sound! :)))
Comment from GarthL
Great image of the moon, can't tell if it's been digitally manipulated or not and you don't mention it? Excellent imagery throughout and nice alliteration telling the story of the stillness, sounds and sensations of the night as you wait for your lover's company. You're good at these different layout poems Sharyn. Well done, Garth
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2013
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Great image of the moon, can't tell if it's been digitally manipulated or not and you don't mention it? Excellent imagery throughout and nice alliteration telling the story of the stillness, sounds and sensations of the night as you wait for your lover's company. You're good at these different layout poems Sharyn. Well done, Garth
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2013
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just a google image Garth - I really should look more closely! :)S
Comment from Jendowoz
Very poetic and touching piece, Sharyn. love the way you describe the animals stirring in the moonlight and going about their business. It's really lovely. As always, it reads well aloud too.
regards, Jen
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2013
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Very poetic and touching piece, Sharyn. love the way you describe the animals stirring in the moonlight and going about their business. It's really lovely. As always, it reads well aloud too.
regards, Jen
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2013
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Thanks so much Jen - glad you enjoyed this! :)S
Comment from Opal H.
Ooh... What an attractive description of this place. Filled with sounds and sights and what not. And a lovely hint of romance :)
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2013
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Ooh... What an attractive description of this place. Filled with sounds and sights and what not. And a lovely hint of romance :)
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2013
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Come on over Opal! :)S
Comment from Black_Oxygen
Well Done ~ Sharyn
You sure do know how to set a scene. The emotions
jump off of the page and grab the imagination. The
attached photo is a befitting accent. Thank You
for your creation.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2013
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Well Done ~ Sharyn
You sure do know how to set a scene. The emotions
jump off of the page and grab the imagination. The
attached photo is a befitting accent. Thank You
for your creation.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2013
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Glad you enjoyed it Ron! :)Sharyn
