Splendor
Life is all about love.96 total reviews
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
This is very short and sweet and amazing things can happen when two nurture true love. It's great when it goes the way God intended. Good job.God loves you and so do I.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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This is very short and sweet and amazing things can happen when two nurture true love. It's great when it goes the way God intended. Good job.God loves you and so do I.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Thanks so much, Evelyn. I appreciqat eyour review and your time as well..God bless. Bob
Comment from sgalletti
Ahhhh...my kind of love story! It's not easy to write a complete story with all the story elements in only 55 words. You set a scene, have characters, a beginning, middle, climax and end. Did you consider naming your characters? I'd love to see John vs. He. Also, what about a dash as opposed to elipses after serenity? I believe it is more accepted. Finally, take out the spaces to have the piece beside the art work, or add more speaces to put it below the art work LOL! Good luck! Hugs, Sue
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Ahhhh...my kind of love story! It's not easy to write a complete story with all the story elements in only 55 words. You set a scene, have characters, a beginning, middle, climax and end. Did you consider naming your characters? I'd love to see John vs. He. Also, what about a dash as opposed to elipses after serenity? I believe it is more accepted. Finally, take out the spaces to have the piece beside the art work, or add more speaces to put it below the art work LOL! Good luck! Hugs, Sue
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Hi, Sue. I cannot thank you enough for your review and help. (I made all the changes you suggested....If you have time...see what you thnk will ya? Thanks again...X0 Bob
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Ahh, I feel honored that my thoughts were helpful and you implemented them. I really love what you now have here. Best of luck! It's always great to hear from you. Hugs, Sue
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And thanks to you sincerely, Sue. X0 Bob
Comment from elliejean
I love the picture. I love the story. It didn't take him long to find he had the right woman. Love works like that some times.He explored growth in the spring. Taking a chance on love and saying I do in the fall. Great work. I love romance.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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I love the picture. I love the story. It didn't take him long to find he had the right woman. Love works like that some times.He explored growth in the spring. Taking a chance on love and saying I do in the fall. Great work. I love romance.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Hi, ellie. So glad you liked this one. Romance is hard to pull off in 55 words. It was a challenge alright. LOL..Thanks so much. Bob
Comment from closetpoetjester
Wow, true love...AND in 55 words or less...she sure was a fast mover! Or I sense this maybe love at first sight.
So lemme get this right...SHE proposed and HE said I DO??
At least thats what I'm getting.
This was rather lovely Bob...she sure made that bachelor FALL for her...Clever little autumn leaf huh? LOL
well done and good luck with your entry
Pip
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Wow, true love...AND in 55 words or less...she sure was a fast mover! Or I sense this maybe love at first sight.
So lemme get this right...SHE proposed and HE said I DO??
At least thats what I'm getting.
This was rather lovely Bob...she sure made that bachelor FALL for her...Clever little autumn leaf huh? LOL
well done and good luck with your entry
Pip
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Hi, Pip...No....she didn't propose...she was just sure of her feelings...He, being a confirmed bachelor....took a little longer. I dohope I made that clear. Yikes! Thanks so much Pip. Bob
Comment from Bellringer
Bob, very nice work here. You used the 55 words well to create a resplendent scene of youth and demonstrated the power of love which transcends age. It was also great to see that the confident woman did the proposing. Blessings, Hector
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Bob, very nice work here. You used the 55 words well to create a resplendent scene of youth and demonstrated the power of love which transcends age. It was also great to see that the confident woman did the proposing. Blessings, Hector
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Thanks so much, Hector. I appreciate your review as always. Bob
Comment from sweetwoodjax
thiis is very well written, mastery, you did an excellent job writing this 55 word story about the love that can be found no matter what time is happens. i enjoyed reading it, good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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thiis is very well written, mastery, you did an excellent job writing this 55 word story about the love that can be found no matter what time is happens. i enjoyed reading it, good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Thank you, Pam. I always appreciate your input. Bob
Comment from hager
In a few words you have taken me through a couple of season, a courtship. You brought life into the scenery you have created, by flowers coming alive along with his heart... in such a mellow and peaceful way, but you have travelled with this 55 words write like a jet in under 3 seconds... across the horizon... Nice.... Great word choice.... Bill
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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In a few words you have taken me through a couple of season, a courtship. You brought life into the scenery you have created, by flowers coming alive along with his heart... in such a mellow and peaceful way, but you have travelled with this 55 words write like a jet in under 3 seconds... across the horizon... Nice.... Great word choice.... Bill
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Hi, Bill. Thanks so much for the six stars and your thorough understanding of the work...Blessings, my friend. Bob
Comment from Spiritual Echo
Drling man, may I repeat, how good it is so good to have you back. I'll look forward to may more posts and will enjoy every single one.
This is a budget contest, restricting words, but expecting brilliace in the economy.
You don't fail to deliver on the creativeness of the challenge. I do hope you have room for another word in this one sentence.
'She cherished confidence of her heart.'
I believe it should be THE confidence, and should there be no room for another wod, I'd change it to heart's confidence. Hugs, ingrid
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Drling man, may I repeat, how good it is so good to have you back. I'll look forward to may more posts and will enjoy every single one.
This is a budget contest, restricting words, but expecting brilliace in the economy.
You don't fail to deliver on the creativeness of the challenge. I do hope you have room for another word in this one sentence.
'She cherished confidence of her heart.'
I believe it should be THE confidence, and should there be no room for another wod, I'd change it to heart's confidence. Hugs, ingrid
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Ahhhh..Ingrid...Ingrid. How very sweet you are. I didn't think I would be missed amongst all the members here. You made my day with your comments...especially The nice review. I did add a couple of words...now Fifty-five exactly. :) Bob
Comment from c_lucas
Love can happen in any season. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. A complete story in exactly fifty five words.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Love can happen in any season. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. A complete story in exactly fifty five words.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Thanks, Charlie. You should try it some time. It's quite a challenge. Bob
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I have an entry in it, Bob. Charlie
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Sorry Charlie...I just read it...Good job. Bob
Comment from Soledadpaz
Well, that was fast.
The line: "She cherished confidence of her heart" makes me wonder.
Is she calling him her heart?
Or does she cherish confidence in her heart?
It works either way.
Beautiful story, Bob.
Sol
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Well, that was fast.
The line: "She cherished confidence of her heart" makes me wonder.
Is she calling him her heart?
Or does she cherish confidence in her heart?
It works either way.
Beautiful story, Bob.
Sol
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Hi, Sol. Thanks so much for the kind review. I changed that line to "in her heart" Thanks again...Bob
