Splendor
Life is all about love.96 total reviews
Comment from GaryCecil
Great job on utilizing the 55 words to your advantage. I don't normally read romance stuff, but your words are well-written, and you competed a story. I am looking into more of your work. If only I had more time haha.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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Great job on utilizing the 55 words to your advantage. I don't normally read romance stuff, but your words are well-written, and you competed a story. I am looking into more of your work. If only I had more time haha.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2013
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Hi, Gary. Welcome aboard Fanstory. I think we have connected previously here. Although I appreciate your review of my poetry. I am basically a prose writer. I currently have a chapter for my book up called "Lewis". I don't think you've read it> It is currently paying over a buck if you are so inclined. I would be grateful. Bob (Mastery)
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I plan on getting to it today
Comment from Apryle Willis
This is very beautiful to be allowed only so few a words. I love Autumn and anything that depicts it. It gives a warmth to the small story of love. Very good job bringing this tiny space to life! Apryle
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2013
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This is very beautiful to be allowed only so few a words. I love Autumn and anything that depicts it. It gives a warmth to the small story of love. Very good job bringing this tiny space to life! Apryle
Comment Written 13-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2013
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Thank you, Apryle. I apprciate your time and the review. Bob
Comment from Kiki12
Aw, my goodness the romantic men on this site, I can't get over it- this is lovely, just a beautifully serene write about finding true love and embracing it while it grows along side the new life budding all around. Well done,
Kiki
reply by the author on 26-May-2013
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Aw, my goodness the romantic men on this site, I can't get over it- this is lovely, just a beautifully serene write about finding true love and embracing it while it grows along side the new life budding all around. Well done,
Kiki
Comment Written 26-May-2013
reply by the author on 26-May-2013
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Thanks so much, Kiki. :) Bob (Mastery)
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Bob,
How did I miss this?
You did a terrific job of moving a "confirmed bachelor" in the Spring to a wedding ceremony by Autumn in just 55 words. Not an easy task. It must have been a sizzling summer!
Nicely penned!
By the way, have you had your novel published yet? It is really a terrific story, Bob. Don't give up sending it until you get a positive reply. It will be published. You just have to keep sending!
you fan,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 25-May-2013
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Hi Bob,
How did I miss this?
You did a terrific job of moving a "confirmed bachelor" in the Spring to a wedding ceremony by Autumn in just 55 words. Not an easy task. It must have been a sizzling summer!
Nicely penned!
By the way, have you had your novel published yet? It is really a terrific story, Bob. Don't give up sending it until you get a positive reply. It will be published. You just have to keep sending!
you fan,
Kimbob
Comment Written 25-May-2013
reply by the author on 25-May-2013
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Awww. Thanks so much, KimBob for your encouraging words. You have always been so supportive. Blessings and thanks for the six stars,my friend. Bob
Comment from samandlancelot
Bob,
Excellent 55-word love story. I like your bit of twist with the confirmed bachelor saying I do to the true love he has found.
I am curious -- did you find a publisher for your book?
Patricia
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Bob,
Excellent 55-word love story. I like your bit of twist with the confirmed bachelor saying I do to the true love he has found.
I am curious -- did you find a publisher for your book?
Patricia
Comment Written 16-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Hi, Patricia. Thank you for your time and review. Good to hear from you again. The book: To tell you the truth....I have done nothing with it....LOL...I just don't want to be disappointed again, I guess. Take care...X0 Bob
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Bob,
Rejection letters are tough, but your story is worth pursuing. Some advice I've read is to send out your writing again as soon as the rejection letter arrives so you're focused on publishing your story instead of the rejection.
Patricia
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Thans, Patricia. Ihave sent so many...(literally hundreds) in the past and some don't even look at the query letters. LOL...Rarely do any ask for sample chapters. And now, with E-books and kindles etc, I am hearing it is harder than ever. My brother works for Associated Press...Editor...and he can't even really help. It is all so discouraging. I keep hoping I will make some sort of contsact with somebody who knows somebody in the business. (sigh) Thans again, Bob
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Bob,
Even with all your connections, that is very discouraging, after sending out hundreds. I wonder if you need a different approach.
It might help if you ask God what to do next with your story.
I'm praying for you and your story.
Patricia
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Another thought I had, Bob -- the apostles were out fishing all night and didn't catch anything, but when Jesus told them to throw the net out again, and they did what He told them to do, they caught so many fish they could barely haul them all in.
Patricia
Comment from Fluffyhead
You did good with writing a cute heartwarming story in 55 words. Always a treasure to read your stuff. Thanks for the fun read.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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You did good with writing a cute heartwarming story in 55 words. Always a treasure to read your stuff. Thanks for the fun read.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Thans somuch. I sincerely appreciate you taking the time to peruse my portfolio and review. Bob
Comment from judiverse
Sometimes love is worth the wait. A friend of mind married for the first time at age 55 to a widower, and they've been very happy. A nice touch in the story that the couple meets in the spring and then get married in the fall. Very fitting for an older man. You make great use of the limited word allotment. Best of luck in the contest. judiverse
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013
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Sometimes love is worth the wait. A friend of mind married for the first time at age 55 to a widower, and they've been very happy. A nice touch in the story that the couple meets in the spring and then get married in the fall. Very fitting for an older man. You make great use of the limited word allotment. Best of luck in the contest. judiverse
Comment Written 22-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013
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Hi, Judi. Thanks so much for the nice review. I see you have been a member since 2011. How is it I've not seen your work before? I will keep an eye out for it from now on if you don't mind. I remember when Terre Haute was the place I always joined the Columbia Record Club. LOL...Bob (Mastery)
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My husband worked for Columbia Records many, many years ago. I write occasional poems and mostly short non-fiction works. judiverse
Comment from alexisleech
What an excellent entry in the 55 word contest. Having entered myself, I know how hard it is to manage a beginning, middle and end to a story in so few words. You have achieved it beautifully here. Good luck!
Alexis x
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013
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What an excellent entry in the 55 word contest. Having entered myself, I know how hard it is to manage a beginning, middle and end to a story in so few words. You have achieved it beautifully here. Good luck!
Alexis x
Comment Written 22-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013
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Thanks so much, Alexis. Goodluck to you also. Bob :)
Comment from writing2inspire
I liked your story. With a limitation of 55 words, it's hard to portray the emotional impact of falling in love. You described spring as producing a sense of serenity which is fine, but when coupled with feeling renewal it doesn't evoke strong images of passionate love. You wrote: "The couple explored and nurtured their love." Why not describe their exploration. For example, "They explored their strengths, weaknesses, and passions." Nevertheless, your writing style was flawless, and including Spring as a theme in your story was an excellent idea for this time of year.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013
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I liked your story. With a limitation of 55 words, it's hard to portray the emotional impact of falling in love. You described spring as producing a sense of serenity which is fine, but when coupled with feeling renewal it doesn't evoke strong images of passionate love. You wrote: "The couple explored and nurtured their love." Why not describe their exploration. For example, "They explored their strengths, weaknesses, and passions." Nevertheless, your writing style was flawless, and including Spring as a theme in your story was an excellent idea for this time of year.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013
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Hi there Writing to inspire. I agree in a way with your analysis and thank you for the review. However, when you only have 55 towork with, one has to be very choosey. (Some things have to be assumed by the reader, don't you agree?) Thanks again...Bob
Comment from misscookie
I found your artwork very interestin it goes well with your poem.
You capture my attention from the first word to the last. You aresuch a great alittle romaic devil that those last lines touch my heart.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013
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I found your artwork very interestin it goes well with your poem.
You capture my attention from the first word to the last. You aresuch a great alittle romaic devil that those last lines touch my heart.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013
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And thanks to you, m'lady. I am so encouraged by your fine words of review. Bob
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Thank you very much for reading my poem , for your comments and kind words.
