fairytale/reality
love poem7 total reviews
Comment from Rmocruz
A well written and rhymed romance poem.
Easily understood by its reader.
Two things, FYI.
The description indicates a 5-7-5 poem.
I should be capitalized if you wish to
Be consistent, unless this was a free verse.
Good effort.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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A well written and rhymed romance poem.
Easily understood by its reader.
Two things, FYI.
The description indicates a 5-7-5 poem.
I should be capitalized if you wish to
Be consistent, unless this was a free verse.
Good effort.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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It was supposed to be but idk what happened lol but thanks for the advice.
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You're welcome.
Comment from kad175
Lovely thoughts. Lovely words. Did you mean to not capitalize "i"? Personally, I think poems read better with punctuation so that the reader is sure to get the message but this is still nice work.
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Lovely thoughts. Lovely words. Did you mean to not capitalize "i"? Personally, I think poems read better with punctuation so that the reader is sure to get the message but this is still nice work.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from angelmagnet
A precious find captured with poetic words. Lovely, all around. He seems like a dream come true for you. Blessings, thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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A precious find captured with poetic words. Lovely, all around. He seems like a dream come true for you. Blessings, thank you for sharing
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Thank you for taking the time to read it i'm very appreciative.
Comment from mumsyone
Oops! I'm not sure where you read the rules for this contest, but your poem is not a 5-7-5. The 5-7-5 calls for 3 lines only, of 5, 7, and 5 syllables, so your poem doesn't qualify for this contest.
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Oops! I'm not sure where you read the rules for this contest, but your poem is not a 5-7-5. The 5-7-5 calls for 3 lines only, of 5, 7, and 5 syllables, so your poem doesn't qualify for this contest.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from Allison78
This is a very lovely poem and so very sweet and you do a wonderful job of conveying your love but unfortunately it's not a 5-7-5. A 5-7-5 only has 3 lines. The first line has 5 syllables, the second 7 syllables and the third 5 syllables.
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This is a very lovely poem and so very sweet and you do a wonderful job of conveying your love but unfortunately it's not a 5-7-5. A 5-7-5 only has 3 lines. The first line has 5 syllables, the second 7 syllables and the third 5 syllables.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from Karen B. Huck
Cute, simple and... nice. Not much research in terms of vocabulary or vivid imagery. Does give an impression of innocence and youth.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Cute, simple and... nice. Not much research in terms of vocabulary or vivid imagery. Does give an impression of innocence and youth.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Love is supposed to be innocent its supposed to be simple not complicated and that's what i was goin for.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
hey puffmonkey, you did a great job writing this poem but it is not a 5 7 5 poem. a 5 7 5 poem is 5 syllables 7 syllables 5 syllables. you can disable this and write a true 5 7 5 poem
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hey puffmonkey, you did a great job writing this poem but it is not a 5 7 5 poem. a 5 7 5 poem is 5 syllables 7 syllables 5 syllables. you can disable this and write a true 5 7 5 poem
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
