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The Hawaiian Humpback Whale

that moment of connection ...

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Comment from GE Parson
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very interesting facts about whales that I had not known before. What I would like to know is for what purpose or need does man need whales?

As I read this information, I did not see any typos or other wise.The info was arranged cvery logical.
-G.E. Parson

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013


reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
    Thx GE. Let's talk about bio-diversity ... and also about humanity. Also, let's talk about just plain commonsense - whenever we upset the balance of nature, she comes back in fury. Man attempts to know better and fails miserably eg: in Hawaii, the mongoose was introduced to control rats. Duh - rats are nocturnal, mongoose diurnal. Now we have mongoose galore, and they've virtually wiped out Hawaii's ground-laying bird population because they feed on eggs!

    Thx for your questions - much appreciated! :)S
Comment from GeraldS
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This narrative is nicely written. The prose is at a professional level, which makes it a pleasure to read. The essay is interesting; it engages the reader and holds him through to the end. The length is also perfect. And, the summation in the final sentence brings closure to the piece. This should be a strong entry. Good luck in the judging!

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013


reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
    Thx so much Gerald! :)Sharyn
Comment from Taffspride
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You captured my attention, and kept it throughout.

Your writing style flowed, taking your reader on the journey with the whales. Your essay was informative and clear cut, but the added bit of humor meant it was not dry or boring.

Great read, thanks for sharing.

Iechyd da

Ann

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013


reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
    Bless you Ann! :)S
Comment from robina1978
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You know such a lot about these whales. I think we saw them in Mexico. But with screaming people they tended to disappear. Your story held my attention all the way.

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013


reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
    Usually, when you get up really close, Ine ... the boat will fall quiet ... people really DO get that "commune" message, I find - but yes, the screaming has to be done first! :)S
reply by robina1978 on 19-Mar-2013
    pity and most welcome to the review, Ine
Comment from Tina McKala
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Very good write, you passed a few different styles here - the first part was more like an extract from encyclopedia, than the almost poetic description of these majestic animals and at the end the call and a raised finger to protect them more than we do now. Excellent!

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013


reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
    thx so much Tina! :)S
Comment from barkingdog
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I've only seen pictures and videos of these marvelous whales.
You put it's size and feeding capacity in perspective for me by using your son a comparison.
Norway and Japan still hunt them? Without restriction?

We do need to balance our ocean's again. We lose our oceans. We die.

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013


reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
    they do bd - and it's disgusting. If you want to see what Japan's attitude is to cetaceans, see a documentary called "The Cove". It will horrify you and rock your world. This one's about dolphins and how they hunt them. I'm not a bleeding-heart kind of person, but I was shaking my head in incredulity at the end of this one.
    Blessings,
    Sharyn
reply by barkingdog on 19-Mar-2013
    Where do I see the documentary?
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
    Just do a search under "The Cove documentary" - it won an academy award in 2009 - there's a tab that says "how you can see this film" - should be very easy to find bd! I got it from my local video store. It's an amazing piece of filmwork which will not leave you untouched. Thanks for asking!
    :)Sharyn
reply by barkingdog on 19-Mar-2013
    Thank you!
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
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This line cracked me up: "Just visualize my sixteen-year-old opening the double doors of my large refrigerator and inhaling everything in sight, and you'll get the idea of the feeding capacity of these gentle giants."

They are beautiful creatures. This is a most informative write about our gentle giants of the sea. I wish more could be done to stop Japan from literally wiping this magnificent creature off the planet.

Note:
I have a sixteen-year (-) old son who is six feet tall.

I really enjoyed this read. And, the artwork is great!


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 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013


reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
    thx for that catch dear - I'll whip in and fix it. Americans have this "thing" for hyphenating age descriptions - we don't do that in Oz, so I sometimes to forget to do it properly! :)S
reply by MidnightWriter4U on 19-Mar-2013
    LOL! Somewhere over the rainbow punctuation doesn't exist....

    MN
    :)
Comment from Jean Lutz
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What a wonderful way to start my day. The sun isn't even up. The eastern sky is still dark, but your well penned words shed light on a part of creation that lives in the deep. Well done. I wish you well in the contest.

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 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013


reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
    bless you Jean - thank you so much! :)Sharyn