Minnesota Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Lover's Leap"Poems About and Around Minnesota
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Comment from Walu Feral
great work my friend! The picture compliments the piece perfectly. I have read a little on this subject and it is indeed touching. Cheers Fez.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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great work my friend! The picture compliments the piece perfectly. I have read a little on this subject and it is indeed touching. Cheers Fez.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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Thank you Fez. Forbidden love between warring tribes is a very common theme in Native American cultures.
Comment from Child of the King
I guess I need to brush up on my history. I do not recall that story. You presented it beautifully and it truly moved me. Thank you for your Author's notes. Peace
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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I guess I need to brush up on my history. I do not recall that story. You presented it beautifully and it truly moved me. Thank you for your Author's notes. Peace
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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Thank you Child of the King,
Comment from Galactia
What a wonderful educational poem you haver created. I really enjoyed this one. fancy that normally anything memorable and made statue icons of has to do with wars, yet this expressed love. Hope in this worls yet LOL
Great job
Regards
tia
Great job
regards
tia
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2013
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What a wonderful educational poem you haver created. I really enjoyed this one. fancy that normally anything memorable and made statue icons of has to do with wars, yet this expressed love. Hope in this worls yet LOL
Great job
Regards
tia
Great job
regards
tia
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2013
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Thank you Tia for your expressive insight.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes you have told a sad story in this short poem you have done very well and the presentation enhances the poem well I enjoyed regards Jill
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2013
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Yes you have told a sad story in this short poem you have done very well and the presentation enhances the poem well I enjoyed regards Jill
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2013
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Thank you Jill. I appreciate the visit and review.
Comment from yonashalom
Oh I thought this was the one in Tennessee. Evidently, there are lovers everywhere with the same idea? :) Nice flow and rhyme to this poem. Great job. ~Yona
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Oh I thought this was the one in Tennessee. Evidently, there are lovers everywhere with the same idea? :) Nice flow and rhyme to this poem. Great job. ~Yona
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Thanks Yona. Yes there are several.
Comment from Sally Carter
A neat little poem celebrating what looks like a beautiful statue. And of course, such a romantic story.
Good strong meter, which makes the poem easy to read.
Just a discussion point - I wonder if you considered lopping off the opening syllables on lines 2 and 6, which would, I believe, have echoed the meter in Longfellow's famous poem? You might have to modify the last line to -
lovers' leap off (something) falls
but it might be fun to try.
Simply airing thoughts on that one.
Very enjoyable.
Sally
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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A neat little poem celebrating what looks like a beautiful statue. And of course, such a romantic story.
Good strong meter, which makes the poem easy to read.
Just a discussion point - I wonder if you considered lopping off the opening syllables on lines 2 and 6, which would, I believe, have echoed the meter in Longfellow's famous poem? You might have to modify the last line to -
lovers' leap off (something) falls
but it might be fun to try.
Simply airing thoughts on that one.
Very enjoyable.
Sally
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Thank Sally I'll give it a look.
Comment from Caressa_08
A legendary, though clever poem with a the statue's photograph that so enhances this poem & the nature it surrounds & seems to bring beauty, as this poem does also, to this event that is told by the native Indians who lived their so long ago..
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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A legendary, though clever poem with a the statue's photograph that so enhances this poem & the nature it surrounds & seems to bring beauty, as this poem does also, to this event that is told by the native Indians who lived their so long ago..
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Yes, an ancient tale. Thank you.
Comment from FayK89
Very enjoyable take on an old tale. I would replace the first full stop with a comma though, made the end stand out a bit more. And maybe change the 'found' to 'that' to give it mroe of a sense of urgency to the phrasing. Like the photo too.
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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Very enjoyable take on an old tale. I would replace the first full stop with a comma though, made the end stand out a bit more. And maybe change the 'found' to 'that' to give it mroe of a sense of urgency to the phrasing. Like the photo too.
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Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Thank you. I'll look at that.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
The legend of Minnehaha and Hiawatha is softly and truthfully viewed reminding the incident of lover's leap, well retold and narrated the essence briefly and vividly, I enjoyed the read.
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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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The legend of Minnehaha and Hiawatha is softly and truthfully viewed reminding the incident of lover's leap, well retold and narrated the essence briefly and vividly, I enjoyed the read.
21-44855-R written-Saturday 16 March 2013-Ex Reviewer Rank # 1
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much. Glad you like it.
Comment from Rmocruz
This a well constructed story in a poem.
Brief and to the point with accurate
depiction of this historical event.
Nice work.
Rich.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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This a well constructed story in a poem.
Brief and to the point with accurate
depiction of this historical event.
Nice work.
Rich.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Thank you Rich, it was a fun read.
