Hedgerow Tales
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "A Winter Trip for Hedgerow School "Book 3 in the Hedgerow Series
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Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Verrry cute. I wondered why Penny didn't show up for dinner that day... she's always sneaking out somewhere. At least she had fun with Timmy and Tommy and all your wonderful little critters. It's great how they all help each other despite being different species. Really sends a good message to kids. :)
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Verrry cute. I wondered why Penny didn't show up for dinner that day... she's always sneaking out somewhere. At least she had fun with Timmy and Tommy and all your wonderful little critters. It's great how they all help each other despite being different species. Really sends a good message to kids. :)
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Thank you Phyllis, I think Penny has returned home, now! I must say, I have quite fallen in love with your family of pengins. I hope you will allow them to visit sometimes? Thank you for reading and enjoying it! xsx Sandra. :)
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Penny told me allll about her adventure with your guys. She begged to be allowed to visit them again, so of course I had to say yes. But then Petey got jealous... you know how that is. See what you started? Sigh... I'm ready to toss the both of them into the sea and you can have 'em if they wash up on your shore. :)
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hi Sandra,
This is the first time I've read one of your tales - this one is absolutely delightful - worthy of Beatrix Potter. Reminds me of The Wind In The Willows tales.
I loved the read!
Spags:
How do you do that? (question mark - not exclamation mark)
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Hi Sandra,
This is the first time I've read one of your tales - this one is absolutely delightful - worthy of Beatrix Potter. Reminds me of The Wind In The Willows tales.
I loved the read!
Spags:
How do you do that? (question mark - not exclamation mark)
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Whoops, must change that, thank you! I am so pleased you liked my story, thank you so much for your lovely review! :) Sandra
Comment from Jerry Rauhuff
Perky the Penguin showed them how to glide,
With feet pointed outward, so they wouldn't slide.--Are these picture books? My 3 and 5 year olds would love Perky the Penguin.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Perky the Penguin showed them how to glide,
With feet pointed outward, so they wouldn't slide.--Are these picture books? My 3 and 5 year olds would love Perky the Penguin.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Thank you! This will be a picture book, my first one is already published and on sale on line from Waterstones, WH Smiths, and Amazons. That one is called Hedgerow Capers. The second one is on it's way to be illustrated, and this is the third book. Each one is about the same group of friends doing good deeds for others and meeting different species. Just having fun. If you go into Amazon and bring books up, you can 'look inside' the pages and see the illustrations. (Not pushing you to buy! LOL) Thank you so much for your wonderful review, perhaps you can read it to your children. The first book starts off with them meeting each other and then going on for their first day at school. Again, thank you! xsx Sandra
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
Again I'm delighted. Deserves a 6 but alas none were proffered. The meter and cadence sounds very much like
'T'was the night before Christmas and all through the house...not a creature was stirring not even a mouse.' Each verse being a triplet of couplets carries the flow well and the story. Every line is not strictly metered to 10 beats and thus might suffer but that minor error is buried by the magic the writer has espiused so well. Great stuff indeed.
Regards:
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Again I'm delighted. Deserves a 6 but alas none were proffered. The meter and cadence sounds very much like
'T'was the night before Christmas and all through the house...not a creature was stirring not even a mouse.' Each verse being a triplet of couplets carries the flow well and the story. Every line is not strictly metered to 10 beats and thus might suffer but that minor error is buried by the magic the writer has espiused so well. Great stuff indeed.
Regards:
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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AHAA, you haven't read chapter 7 in this book,
'The Day Before Christmas Eve'
Please have a read, if you have time, it's LONG, but I think you might enjoy it. I will be having it illustrated for Christmas.
I do try to keep the meter exact, sometimes it doesn't work when I do. I am really pleased you enjoyed this story, Thank you! :) Sandra.
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I stand corrected. Will do Sandra.
Cordially: Steve C
Comment from adewpearl
as always, solid rhyming couplets including good proximate rhymes like clothes/toes
nice use of alliteration like in stop slipping and snow sticks and soggy slush
great detail of setting
I really like the penguin characters
good consonance in phrases like laughing and squealing
These stories are all SO much fun :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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as always, solid rhyming couplets including good proximate rhymes like clothes/toes
nice use of alliteration like in stop slipping and snow sticks and soggy slush
great detail of setting
I really like the penguin characters
good consonance in phrases like laughing and squealing
These stories are all SO much fun :-) Brooke
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much, Brooke, I'm really pleased you enjoyed it! I loved your one! xsx Sandra
Comment from Shadow Pahn
As always your work is sublime. Although it is a bit on the long side, i think a patient parent will have no trouble reading this to their kid!
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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As always your work is sublime. Although it is a bit on the long side, i think a patient parent will have no trouble reading this to their kid!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Thank you, Shadow Pahn! I'm really pleased you enjoyed it! :) Sandra
Comment from c_lucas
Snow become ice when it become colder.
Walking on ice is for those wha are bolder.
**********unedited.
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a fun-filled read.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Snow become ice when it become colder.
Walking on ice is for those wha are bolder.
**********unedited.
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a fun-filled read.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much for your lovely review, Charles, I'm so pleased you enjoyed it! xsx
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You're welcome, Sandra. Charlie
Comment from misscookie
I enjoyed reading your prose/poem
And found it was a delight to read
They all had fun playing in the snow. I'm sure chil;dren would love this story.
Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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I enjoyed reading your prose/poem
And found it was a delight to read
They all had fun playing in the snow. I'm sure chil;dren would love this story.
Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Thank you so very much for this lovely review, miss cookie!:) Sandra.
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
What a delightful tale in poetic form. The rhyming scheme created a wonderful flow. The characters are darling and most amusing. Enjoyed this very much!
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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What a delightful tale in poetic form. The rhyming scheme created a wonderful flow. The characters are darling and most amusing. Enjoyed this very much!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much for your lovely review, I am really pleased you enjoyed it! :) Sandra
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You are welcome. MN :)
Comment from Hollyhock
Great story again, I loved the way Mummy Mouse was so worried, it's hard to let your little treasures go off on their own!
Good underlying theme of "differences" being a bonus, not a problem.
Glad to see the teaching staff are sensible and have good rules too.
One or two little blips - Maybe try,
"Today was the day THEY'D been waitign for"
"Miss Freda the Frog called them and said" (no "to")
"Some creatures they'd never clapped eyes on before"
"And Cyril called out,'We LIKE TO PLAY GAMES'"
"I think you had better calm down,' she said" (no 'all')
"As back to the top they went one by one" (no 'all')
Charming and entertaining read.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Great story again, I loved the way Mummy Mouse was so worried, it's hard to let your little treasures go off on their own!
Good underlying theme of "differences" being a bonus, not a problem.
Glad to see the teaching staff are sensible and have good rules too.
One or two little blips - Maybe try,
"Today was the day THEY'D been waitign for"
"Miss Freda the Frog called them and said" (no "to")
"Some creatures they'd never clapped eyes on before"
"And Cyril called out,'We LIKE TO PLAY GAMES'"
"I think you had better calm down,' she said" (no 'all')
"As back to the top they went one by one" (no 'all')
Charming and entertaining read.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much for your lovely thoughtful review! As always, you always manage to help me improve, and as always, I will go and make some changes. I am really pleased you enjoyed this one. xsx Sandra
