All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "It Makes Me Happy!"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from alexisleech
And why shouldn't it? Your poem lists so many things we all take for granted, especially when we live amongst them on a daily basis. Thank you for reminding me!
Alexis x
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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And why shouldn't it? Your poem lists so many things we all take for granted, especially when we live amongst them on a daily basis. Thank you for reminding me!
Alexis x
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much Alexis - glad you enjoyed this one too! :)Sharyn
Comment from Jerry Rauhuff
I do feel its good to stop and smell the roses from time to time and the poet gives good reasons to do just that. The poem flows real well and has rythme. I say well done.
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I do feel its good to stop and smell the roses from time to time and the poet gives good reasons to do just that. The poem flows real well and has rythme. I say well done.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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It is indeed - thank you so much Jerry! :)Sharyn
Comment from Bobby Jo
The glowing spotted cows! How funny. I loved it because I live on a farm and ya, they can glow sometimes. Thanks for sharing, this is a beautiful poem.
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The glowing spotted cows! How funny. I loved it because I live on a farm and ya, they can glow sometimes. Thanks for sharing, this is a beautiful poem.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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aah, then you know what I'm talking about Bobby Jo! :)))Sharyn
Comment from asksmile
Hi, this is a kind poem, I mean the rhymes with blues are cool lol. I think its one to be read slowly in the cool of the day maybe under a coconut tree lol. I like the gentility to it. I like the way you capture instances; a lover, nature, activity. Thank you for sharing this I think you just helped me remember that living should involve appreciating our different (every) moments.
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Hi, this is a kind poem, I mean the rhymes with blues are cool lol. I think its one to be read slowly in the cool of the day maybe under a coconut tree lol. I like the gentility to it. I like the way you capture instances; a lover, nature, activity. Thank you for sharing this I think you just helped me remember that living should involve appreciating our different (every) moments.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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I'm so glad you 'vibed' with this one my dear - thank you! :)Sharyn
Comment from hari anand
It makes me happy, glowing spotted cow,your poem with lots of colors, shades of blue, white sky aglore, uplifting.loved it. Great work.
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It makes me happy, glowing spotted cow,your poem with lots of colors, shades of blue, white sky aglore, uplifting.loved it. Great work.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Thx so much my dear! :)Sharyn
Comment from Bender8982
This is great, it make me want to fall in love all over again. The first section telling me to remember I look into her eyes every day. It's beautiful and we should all read this and remember to be grateful for the ones we love every day.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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This is great, it make me want to fall in love all over again. The first section telling me to remember I look into her eyes every day. It's beautiful and we should all read this and remember to be grateful for the ones we love every day.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Bless you Bender - thank you so much! :)Sharyn
Comment from Mike Momba
A good command of words you have there. But am concerned by the paragraphs and the conversation type blending. I would suggest for pattern in the paragraphs and perhaps sentence
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A good command of words you have there. But am concerned by the paragraphs and the conversation type blending. I would suggest for pattern in the paragraphs and perhaps sentence
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Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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helloooo ... free verse! NO PATTERN! or it's not "free"!!!!!!!!!!!!
Comment from vkmack
This really captures the child-like utter joy of love. Your use of tone and style and your choice of words allow for that--just 'cause. The arrangement and wording seem like a child rolling down a hill. This is lovely.
Are they new lovers or just two people who rediscovered each other today?
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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This really captures the child-like utter joy of love. Your use of tone and style and your choice of words allow for that--just 'cause. The arrangement and wording seem like a child rolling down a hill. This is lovely.
Are they new lovers or just two people who rediscovered each other today?
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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bless you vk - I guess that's for you to interpret, hmm? :)))Sharyn
Comment from prayingpoet
Well, it makes me happy to read your poetry! You write such happy poems, always with fun content. Yes, it needs to be read out loud to get the full effect.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Well, it makes me happy to read your poetry! You write such happy poems, always with fun content. Yes, it needs to be read out loud to get the full effect.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Bless you pp - thank you so much! :)Sharyn
Comment from Spitfire
I bet everyone loves you. This poem bubbles with the joy of living. It's always you still see the magic in little things. Images I liked best include:
connect with threads
that run red to red, from heart to heart,
drifting quiet along our beating two-way street
first blast of ocean's blue
rounding wind's curve of highway from rock-tumbled fields
God's whole world is pulsing in sunlight
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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I bet everyone loves you. This poem bubbles with the joy of living. It's always you still see the magic in little things. Images I liked best include:
connect with threads
that run red to red, from heart to heart,
drifting quiet along our beating two-way street
first blast of ocean's blue
rounding wind's curve of highway from rock-tumbled fields
God's whole world is pulsing in sunlight
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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thx so much spits - thank God for the gift, hmm? :)S
