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All Those Puzzling Pieces

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What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?

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Comment from Perp Ihebom
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This is cool. The tone of the poem makes even the reader happy. It describes a joyous and fulfilled life as the persona basks in the glow of love and the beauty all around. very well done

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2013


reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
    thx so much Perp! :)S
Comment from Black_Oxygen
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This is very happy and appreciative poetry. I like the
way that the words are arranged on the page. It guides
the eye, challenges the mind, and warms the heart.
Thank You for your creation.

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2013


reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
    thx so much Ron! :)S
Comment from Tina McKala
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A profound poem about enjoying the moment and forget about the stress of everyday. Really great write!

Just one note: you have some formatting trouble here - there are some question marks in all wrong places

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2013


reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
    Thx Tina - would you mind taking another peek please? The damned editing program is doing strange things - I re-entered everything - let me know if they STILL show up, would you please? thx! Sharyn
reply by Tina McKala on 11-Mar-2013
    It's all right now :)
Comment from poesyapprentice
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Caffeine again, my dear, or just your internal happy glow? Either way, it is wonderful! Great sentiment here! Great writing! Lovely flow and imagery! Sweet and beautiful from beginning to end : ) Love the flava of you, girl!

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2013


reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
    thx heaps poesy! :))S
Comment from Peter Mansson
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Hi Sharyn your poem makes me happy! It is such a joyous celebration of life you have created with your delightful words,(just wonder what's in the water with "glowing spotted cows,LOL). The visual effect is also beautiful. Technically, it appears that you are a master of internal rhyme, alliteration and assonance, and enjoy using these tools. Warm wishes, Peter



 Comment Written 11-Mar-2013


reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
    oh you do make me laugh Peter - the water drops from the RAINBOW descend on to my skin and on to t he "glowing spotted cows' dear - you know, the way the sun illuminates cows in a meadow during a sunshower? Bless you for your magic six on this one - and yes - I love internal rhyme/alliteration/assonance etc - I always write to perform a piece aloud - loved Gerard Manley Hopkins as a kid. Glad to share some "happy" with this one - and I and my glowing cows thank you so much for your lovely six on this one! :)Sharyn
reply by Peter Mansson on 11-Mar-2013
    Most welcome Sharyn, just wondering if the cows were spotted before the shower, and were there any mushrooms in the meadow?
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
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O.K., forgive the cliche--Life is what you make it. By the end of this poem, the reader is filled with a sense of the wonderment of life and God's beautiful creation. The ending line is perfect!

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2013


reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
    Cliches are cliches because they tend to be true my dear, right? I'm so glad you got this one my dear! :)Sharyn
reply by MidnightWriter4U on 11-Mar-2013
    Right! :)
Comment from Allison78
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What a wonderful poem you have written! There is such energy and fun in this poem. I loved the imagery, so beautiful! Well done!

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2013


reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
    blessings to you Allison - always fun to write "happy", yes? :)))Sharyn
Comment from fairy77
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Aww how beautiful was that!I love your free verses and your an excellent poetess:) Good luck in the contest. You friend make us happy. Congrats! beth fairy77

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2013


reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
    Bless you, Beth - this actually wasn't for the contest as I didn't feel like writing rhymes - but I liked the prompt. Thanks so much!
    :) Sharyn
Comment from sweetwoodjax
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this is very well written, visionary, you did an excellent job writing this beautiful free verse about the simple things that can make you happy. i enjoyed reading it.

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2013


reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
    thx sweets! :)S
Comment from Robert Lee Brown
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It makes me happy to read what makes you happy. For me, it is the little things, a pleasant memory, a greeting, a new blossom on my flower bushes. I enjoyed the read and thank you for sharing. I like the way you write your thoughts and feelings. Your friend, Bob

 Comment Written 10-Mar-2013


reply by the author on 10-Mar-2013
    Those little things ARE essential, aren't they Bob? Bless you my dear! :)Sharyn