Plant Matters
Conversational Plant Matter Lamenting Over...31 total reviews
Comment from gazzagodbod
Can see why this one's top of the tree had me out watering the flowers lol now they look kinda drowned thanks fabulous little poem xxgazzagodbodxx
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Can see why this one's top of the tree had me out watering the flowers lol now they look kinda drowned thanks fabulous little poem xxgazzagodbodxx
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Haha, thanks Gazza. Much appreciated your appreciation of my plants very DRY wit.
Cheers P
xo
Comment from steevie
A very curious write, (insert your first name here, as I have forgotten it, my apologies). You have taken a subject that would be otherwise boring, and turned it into a masterpiece of literature.
There are many favorite lines in this well constructed poem.
There's ne'er a "hi"
but stamens stand aquiver
in excitement.
Rigid, in
anticipated floral delightment...
Gone, are the risk takers
the new frontiers, the ground breakers
Gone, are those
rotting in earthen pots
Now, just rotten earth in pots
Our Lord. The Tap.
Transparent blood we crave to sap
from his connection
The forty foot
half-firm erection
The water snake, hissing
The funny thing is that I remember the botany references
sited in your poem so it would appear that high school has paid off. LOL
All the best in the contest
(Again, I apologize for forgetting your first name)
smiles
steve
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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A very curious write, (insert your first name here, as I have forgotten it, my apologies). You have taken a subject that would be otherwise boring, and turned it into a masterpiece of literature.
There are many favorite lines in this well constructed poem.
There's ne'er a "hi"
but stamens stand aquiver
in excitement.
Rigid, in
anticipated floral delightment...
Gone, are the risk takers
the new frontiers, the ground breakers
Gone, are those
rotting in earthen pots
Now, just rotten earth in pots
Our Lord. The Tap.
Transparent blood we crave to sap
from his connection
The forty foot
half-firm erection
The water snake, hissing
The funny thing is that I remember the botany references
sited in your poem so it would appear that high school has paid off. LOL
All the best in the contest
(Again, I apologize for forgetting your first name)
smiles
steve
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Wow what a wonderful response, more than I could ask for and thanks for the encouragement Stevo.
Free verse NOT a strong point and I knew I was on a shaky branch or two. I'll forgive you for forgetting my name...I'm not big on names either...Kevin? was it? *smirk*
Just shittin' ya.
Cheers P
Thanks again, have a great Sunday.
xo
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I love a good aggro! I have to admit that I got that word from a guide to Aussie Slang that my daughter sent me when she lived in Australia with her mom.
I'm glad you forgive me, cause when I wrote this review, you never told me your name, (again for about the three time LOL)
You enjoy Monday, which it probably is already where you are, Phillippa. :o)
I do belive I spelled your name correctly ... Stevo for the win!
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Nope...still Sunday mate...1pm in arvo.
Thanks for spelling it right.
Thats MOST important...plenty try, but fail.
Thanks for your wonderful observance skills that there are infuct two P's at the end and not one as so many like to assooooome.
I'm shitful with names to be honest so I can't very well go you too hard Stevo.
Chow for now
Phillippa
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You are a naughty girl, I just caught those Phillippa-isms I saw in your reply ... LOL
I like the Stevo but I suppose that an Aussie thing, loys of Y's and O's on the ned of your words.
hugs
smiles
stevo
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Too roite (RIGHT) Stevo...
Comment from despiser
We are talking of plants here riiiight Wabbs? Now i know how a plant would sound if they weren't getting enough LOL. You are crazy with these little wordlings you invent. No wonder I'm always laughing before I get to the actual poem.
Perhaps if you tried mating with your plants they might grow cause i think that's where this is going LMAO. twy cawwots.
Very unique, even by your standards
-DEE xx
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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We are talking of plants here riiiight Wabbs? Now i know how a plant would sound if they weren't getting enough LOL. You are crazy with these little wordlings you invent. No wonder I'm always laughing before I get to the actual poem.
Perhaps if you tried mating with your plants they might grow cause i think that's where this is going LMAO. twy cawwots.
Very unique, even by your standards
-DEE xx
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Of course we is talking plants...now whats this about wordlings? Oooh too cute and in them too....
Why are you laughing at me BEFORE you read...what if the poem is NOT a funny one moite? Bet you'd slip on your freckle then roite?
Now forget the lovemaking with the vegges...Wabby would much rather EAT dem...mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm...swallow dem whole!
Cheers and thanks for some DEEsixspiser today...always a pleasure.
cpJfBWW
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Dat would be bewy sad den if somefing bad happn to da cute widdo Bunny Wabby :(
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WTF?
Comment from adewpearl
excellent personification of the plants
good alliteration in stamens stand
great shiver/quiver/deliver rhyme
good assonance in blooms doomed
more excellent alliteration throughout
shitter's ditch - add apostrophe for possessive
I just love the attitude of the plants toward the neglectful woman LOL
In summery - summary
I love the internal rhyme of floral editorial memorial
This is hysterically funny :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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excellent personification of the plants
good alliteration in stamens stand
great shiver/quiver/deliver rhyme
good assonance in blooms doomed
more excellent alliteration throughout
shitter's ditch - add apostrophe for possessive
I just love the attitude of the plants toward the neglectful woman LOL
In summery - summary
I love the internal rhyme of floral editorial memorial
This is hysterically funny :-) Brooke
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Haha...NO in "summery" is intentional Brookers. Thanks so much for a superb review. Free versing NOT a strong point for me and I lack confidence but I gotta print what comes out and this is what they said for sure! LOL
I'll fix "shitter's" though...thanks for enjoying my plants slow and rather timely demise and rant to go with it.
Cheers P
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Comment from ravenblack
so many lines evident of sharp wit. i'm the same way w/plants - can't seem to keep them alive. love how you give them a voice, " our lord the tap", the sexual innuendo in the second stanza and the following line. and great structure. in less capable hands, the personification of plants would come off silly. great job! and you know how I solved my plant problem? just got a cactus.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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so many lines evident of sharp wit. i'm the same way w/plants - can't seem to keep them alive. love how you give them a voice, " our lord the tap", the sexual innuendo in the second stanza and the following line. and great structure. in less capable hands, the personification of plants would come off silly. great job! and you know how I solved my plant problem? just got a cactus.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Haha...I think the sharp wit was in your closing statement.
To be honest I AM a bad gardener but I have got lucky and kept a few alive...they ARE mainly the succulents though (the cactii) haha
So I am on your page my friend...
Not a big free verser and tend to run into the rhyming problem with it so thanks for the encouragemnt...I always feel like I'm on a bloody shaky branch with these types of writes.
Most appreciate your extensive review and your appreciation of my personification and minor sexual gratification on behalf of the plantation, albeit not far off dead.
Probably completely dead by the time you read this. Haha
Cheers and have a nice day RB
Closet
Comment from robina1978
I could see you wrote about plants that can flower etc. It sounds like a free verse and has some poetic devices. I just wondered what the judges will make out of this. It is so weird.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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I could see you wrote about plants that can flower etc. It sounds like a free verse and has some poetic devices. I just wondered what the judges will make out of this. It is so weird.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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You're telling me robina? LOL
I didn't know what to make of it...and nearly DIDN'T enter it.
I have a feeling there is probably too much rhyme for it to be a free verse but I'll take my chances.
Thanks for your input.
Cheers C
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OK, I gave you my review anyway, Ine
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And I appreciate it.
Many thanks Ine.
Cheers P
PS. I'm compelled to post, even though I know I'm out on a ledge and completely wasting my time. LOL
Have a nice day.
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You never know, Ine
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Oh I know honey!
This is just TOO weird.
You WERE right...LOL But thanks anyways.
Cheers
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hi Closet, I loved this one - no more plants for you though, you certainly don't have a green finger more brown since you plants are dead, toast, gone, nothing left.
You always amaze me with the rhythm and rhyme girl. You make it look so bloody easy - and I have such a hard time with it. - Hey but my plants are green and thriving.
Thanks for sharing an exceptional write my friend and good luck in the contest.
Maureen
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Hi Closet, I loved this one - no more plants for you though, you certainly don't have a green finger more brown since you plants are dead, toast, gone, nothing left.
You always amaze me with the rhythm and rhyme girl. You make it look so bloody easy - and I have such a hard time with it. - Hey but my plants are green and thriving.
Thanks for sharing an exceptional write my friend and good luck in the contest.
Maureen
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Hey there Maureen, thanks so much for the delightful review and sixer to match. I DO find the free verse my biggest obstacle and never know where to put the line endings so that the rhymes thrown in appear more random...but I gave it my best shot and more liked it than didn't so I'm happy.
I appreciate the compliment about the rhyme, but NOT the fact you rubbed in you have a much better garden than me! LMAO
I must admit I DO have a few that grow but they are mainly succulents or self sowers...What can I say but as a gardener I make a f**king fine poet. LOL
Cheers P and thanks for an awesome review. Glad at least YOU don't lack the green thumb...mine is positively charcoaled.
xo
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LMAO - choked on my coffee reading this girl!!
Happy St. Patrick's Day:)
Hugs
Maureen
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
Deserves a 6 for the stream of consciousness alone but alas none was proffered. Wonderful transposition of human attributes into plants and the allegorical theme of being deprived, wanting revenge and the ultimate resignation. Ah our society personified in a pot...what next. Excellent use of the vertical and the occasional expletive.
Regards:
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Deserves a 6 for the stream of consciousness alone but alas none was proffered. Wonderful transposition of human attributes into plants and the allegorical theme of being deprived, wanting revenge and the ultimate resignation. Ah our society personified in a pot...what next. Excellent use of the vertical and the occasional expletive.
Regards:
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Oooh the "stream of consciousness"...I like that terminology.
I much appreciate your thoughtful response to my plant eulogy and of course (the plants, not mine LOL) occasional expletive.
If you were where they were you would be cussing too I'm sure! LMAO
Cheers and thanks a bunch
Closet
Comment from words
I love your personification of plant life.
And, I can see why your plants hate you. LOL
Love your ending:In Summery:
From whence
we're standing, to leaning
to sitting, we see
quite befittingly, this
floral editorial
will be
with lamenting sighs
so unwittingly of course, our demise
and one choking memorial...
Your personification held throughout.
Well done.
Hugs, d
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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I love your personification of plant life.
And, I can see why your plants hate you. LOL
Love your ending:In Summery:
From whence
we're standing, to leaning
to sitting, we see
quite befittingly, this
floral editorial
will be
with lamenting sighs
so unwittingly of course, our demise
and one choking memorial...
Your personification held throughout.
Well done.
Hugs, d
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Hey d, thanks so much...yep, they are quite right to hate me...it's inevitable I feel.
Like I said to someone else, as a gardener I make a fine poet!
Not sure about free verse though. LOL
Cheers and thanks again.
P
Comment from Righteous Riter
The photo chosen compliments this piece well. The writer does a good job of getting the message across. This is a free verse but the period rhyming helped this piece tremendously. I like this.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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The photo chosen compliments this piece well. The writer does a good job of getting the message across. This is a free verse but the period rhyming helped this piece tremendously. I like this.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Thanks so much...I'm not sure my free verse WITHOUT rhyme would have worked at all...I would have to be too gosh darn clever.
I find rhyme makes its way into pretty much everything I write so this unstructured form I did tend to struggle with.
Cheers and thanks again.
Closet
