A Book of Songs
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Marag Dhubh"Metre ... Ballads & Slant Rhyme
14 total reviews
Comment from Reese Turner
Well, a good tale and certainly worthy of a Scotsman's wit. I did not understand it all, but was a good read nonetheless. Do not worry about taking some license in places, I myself used some license when I played St. Andrews to score an 89. I looked for relatives while there in every pub, but I had no luck... Happy Easter.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2019
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Well, a good tale and certainly worthy of a Scotsman's wit. I did not understand it all, but was a good read nonetheless. Do not worry about taking some license in places, I myself used some license when I played St. Andrews to score an 89. I looked for relatives while there in every pub, but I had no luck... Happy Easter.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2019
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Much obliged ...
Comment from Randa Dayle
Thanks for the pronunciation guide. What tune is your song too? Interesting writing, I wish you luck in all you do. Please continue to share with us! :):)
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2019
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Thanks for the pronunciation guide. What tune is your song too? Interesting writing, I wish you luck in all you do. Please continue to share with us! :):)
Comment Written 19-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2019
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I haven't set them to to tunes just the poetic ballad formulae though I dare say they could be set to tunes ...
Comment from Henry King
This poem has the Gaelic lilt needed to be accompanied by a bodhran and fiddle. This is an ode to black pudding eaten at a malt house. The cant so thick, it couldn't be understood by the Yanks seeking their roots that died in the potato famines. Well done.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2019
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This poem has the Gaelic lilt needed to be accompanied by a bodhran and fiddle. This is an ode to black pudding eaten at a malt house. The cant so thick, it couldn't be understood by the Yanks seeking their roots that died in the potato famines. Well done.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2019
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Excellent ... that wasn't the only one they had trouble with believe you me lol. Excellent much appreciate glad you enjoyed.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello
Interesting poem about black pudding. It is very unique piece and it has a humorous tone. Good rhyme and rhythm.
~gypsy
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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Hello
Interesting poem about black pudding. It is very unique piece and it has a humorous tone. Good rhyme and rhythm.
~gypsy
Comment Written 06-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2015
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... much appreciated glad you could enjoy ...
Comment from TPAC
Writer selection of items makes this work interesting free expressions indeed and what a thought. I certainly found this read different.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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Writer selection of items makes this work interesting free expressions indeed and what a thought. I certainly found this read different.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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Excellent ... glad you could enjoy!
Comment from Naxsc
BICPEN, what a way to write out the fate of a pudding. I loved the quirkiness in the poem all through. Six stars any day for me. The out of box thinking and the names you had adopted for the knife and peer, some wonderful thoughts you had put in there.
Lovely to see your flow unmarred by the restrictions of the modern day literature.
Keep writing more!
All the best!
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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BICPEN, what a way to write out the fate of a pudding. I loved the quirkiness in the poem all through. Six stars any day for me. The out of box thinking and the names you had adopted for the knife and peer, some wonderful thoughts you had put in there.
Lovely to see your flow unmarred by the restrictions of the modern day literature.
Keep writing more!
All the best!
Comment Written 04-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2015
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been a bit blank the last long while I have revived myself with two new poems already released Ed ... you should check him out ... and where`s my mammary glands you might like that one ... LOL.
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hhaha sure Bicpen, I will check them out. ^_^
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... cool ... If you feel like it you can roam around my portfolio see if you like anything.
Comment from J. Dark
This is an interesting humour piece, Bicpen. You've got some fine rhyming and great rhythm in this witty piece. How wonderful to write a poem about black pudding. I will have to show this one to Mr D - he loves black pudding.
Kindest of regard,
Julie :-)
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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This is an interesting humour piece, Bicpen. You've got some fine rhyming and great rhythm in this witty piece. How wonderful to write a poem about black pudding. I will have to show this one to Mr D - he loves black pudding.
Kindest of regard,
Julie :-)
Comment Written 10-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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Excellent Mrs D. much appreciate the read and review kind regards to all ... !
Comment from Just Alyx
Black pudding must have an interesting taste, but I haven't ventured in to try it. I've seen what it's made of and how (watched my paternal Scottish grandma make it once) and it's never appealed.
I enjoyed "His sgian dubh cuts to the bone" for the wordplay. My cousin wore his with his kilt when he married. The tradition of placing one at the entrance to a house prior to entering as a guest is still observed sometimes; mainly for family get-togethers.
"Marag Dhubh, ingredients pure;/Fry: taste the island sure!"; yep, my uncles would enter into that debate with heart and vigour, ha. Never pays to piss off a Scottie: "A strong power comes over Jock/Marag Dhubh did glisten./Seven o` clock the "light" talked,/Marag Dhubh positions". Especially if they're called Jock. Enjoyed the black or white pud theme and all the playoffs. The reference to the seer Brahan was probably the highlight: what would he say?
"Jock reels with laughter at his call,/Marag Dhubh`s for cooking." So good; wisdom reigns. Choice poem that I could express loads about. Enough already. Cheers, Bic. Loved the challenging, thought provoking read and poetics. Cheers. JA.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2013
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Black pudding must have an interesting taste, but I haven't ventured in to try it. I've seen what it's made of and how (watched my paternal Scottish grandma make it once) and it's never appealed.
I enjoyed "His sgian dubh cuts to the bone" for the wordplay. My cousin wore his with his kilt when he married. The tradition of placing one at the entrance to a house prior to entering as a guest is still observed sometimes; mainly for family get-togethers.
"Marag Dhubh, ingredients pure;/Fry: taste the island sure!"; yep, my uncles would enter into that debate with heart and vigour, ha. Never pays to piss off a Scottie: "A strong power comes over Jock/Marag Dhubh did glisten./Seven o` clock the "light" talked,/Marag Dhubh positions". Especially if they're called Jock. Enjoyed the black or white pud theme and all the playoffs. The reference to the seer Brahan was probably the highlight: what would he say?
"Jock reels with laughter at his call,/Marag Dhubh`s for cooking." So good; wisdom reigns. Choice poem that I could express loads about. Enough already. Cheers, Bic. Loved the challenging, thought provoking read and poetics. Cheers. JA.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2013
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Excellent JA glad you could appreciate this one a I valued it so much I gave it as a gift to my local butcher refered to in the poem, Willie John. Glad you could see the humour and smell the flavour. The Haggis already has its poem I was not sure whether anyone had done one for the black pud so I put pen to paper. Glad you could enjoy. That's what its all about ... right !
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You bet :)
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Excellent, anytime JA ! :)
Comment from catch22
Well, this is a very interesting homage to blood pudding. Can't say I've ever had it because I'm a vegetarian, although I saw vegan haggis when I visited Scotland (lol). I like the way you've broken up the story of marag dubh into verses with historical (I am guessing) quotes surrounding the lore of this dish. I also really liked the beat of the lines you've used in the quatrains as you tell the story of the blood pudding--this poem's meant to be read aloud (IMO). Although I am not a big fan of extensive author's notes, but I think it would help a bit to have a little bit of explanation of the backstory to this poem. For instance, who is Jock? I did enjoy the read though and felt like I was transported to another time for a brief moment.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2013
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Well, this is a very interesting homage to blood pudding. Can't say I've ever had it because I'm a vegetarian, although I saw vegan haggis when I visited Scotland (lol). I like the way you've broken up the story of marag dubh into verses with historical (I am guessing) quotes surrounding the lore of this dish. I also really liked the beat of the lines you've used in the quatrains as you tell the story of the blood pudding--this poem's meant to be read aloud (IMO). Although I am not a big fan of extensive author's notes, but I think it would help a bit to have a little bit of explanation of the backstory to this poem. For instance, who is Jock? I did enjoy the read though and felt like I was transported to another time for a brief moment.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2013
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Well, it looks like the poem has done its job ... Jock is a generic term for someone from Scotland and as it happens an old nickname of mine, something I used to be known by. The Butchers shop Willie Johns is one of the oldest here on the island and as they have a petition at the moment to keep the Stornoway black pudding title to black pudding only made in Stornoway going through the European Court at the moment I thought it was a topical poem to gift them.
The seer adds the ancient and mystical to the piece with a spiritual element to Jock's visit to the butchers. There is a famous ancient Seer called the Brahan Seer worth investigating as some of his prophesy is still believed though written centuaries ago.
Its an ode to the pudding as Rabbi Burns has already written his ode to the chief of the pudding race the Haggis, this is mine to the lesser pudding.
Its tongue and cheek and was intended to give a little poke of fun at the debate over the pudding and if you look up the butchers shop on the internet it has been the source of the pudding in the Royal Household or served to the Queen. The ingredients used to be kept secret hence all the mystery.
Comment from Righteous Riter
The rhyme scheme is effective as the rhyming is good. This piece flows well as the harmony is where it should be. The passion of the writer is felt as my attention is captured from the beginning and held to the end. Nice job.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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The rhyme scheme is effective as the rhyming is good. This piece flows well as the harmony is where it should be. The passion of the writer is felt as my attention is captured from the beginning and held to the end. Nice job.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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Thank you much Righteous one ... much blessings and have a nice day ! Glad you could enjoy and appreciate.
