All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Second Cup of Coffee"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from 9999pool
There could have been a third cuppa of coffee but this bunch of home stay guest had greedily gulped down all the free coffee. LOL.
Everyone is hoping to find someone nice to talk to and to spend time especially those looking for more.
With so many of them in the room, there might be a need to open all the windows and take a breath of fresh air outside. Oh yes, leave another pot of coffee away from the hungry guest.
Good write and quite a hoot too.
Ritchie.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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There could have been a third cuppa of coffee but this bunch of home stay guest had greedily gulped down all the free coffee. LOL.
Everyone is hoping to find someone nice to talk to and to spend time especially those looking for more.
With so many of them in the room, there might be a need to open all the windows and take a breath of fresh air outside. Oh yes, leave another pot of coffee away from the hungry guest.
Good write and quite a hoot too.
Ritchie.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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a third cup!! good idea!! I'm off right now!! :)))S
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Good and I will join you for the 4th. Just make sure you have not forgotten the coffee beans dear. LOL. Cheers, Ritchie :)))).
Comment from adewpearl
love the internal rhyme and humor in kissed and dismissed
good internal rhyme and alliteration in bustled-hustled-harried
staring balefully beside - excellent assonance and alliteration
I'm laughing my head off at the mateless dateless mismatched socks :-)
love the description of them
and the witty observation about Noah has me laughing out loud - you are one funny poet :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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love the internal rhyme and humor in kissed and dismissed
good internal rhyme and alliteration in bustled-hustled-harried
staring balefully beside - excellent assonance and alliteration
I'm laughing my head off at the mateless dateless mismatched socks :-)
love the description of them
and the witty observation about Noah has me laughing out loud - you are one funny poet :-) Brooke
Comment Written 08-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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thx Brooke - swear to God these things have a life of their own! :)))S
Comment from angelmagnet
Who knew that muses live-in coffee and mismatched socks. An adorable poem matched with the perfect picture. Good luck in your search for the perfect mate. :-) Smiling, Cindy
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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Who knew that muses live-in coffee and mismatched socks. An adorable poem matched with the perfect picture. Good luck in your search for the perfect mate. :-) Smiling, Cindy
Comment Written 08-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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:) right back to you Cindy!
hugs
Sharyn
Comment from Hawaiian Mermaid
Aloha Sharyn,
You really socked it to us with this one. What a fun poem, about mismatched socks. I'll let you get back to finding that perfect match. Have a blessed day
Aloha, Ginger Hawaiian Mermaid
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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Aloha Sharyn,
You really socked it to us with this one. What a fun poem, about mismatched socks. I'll let you get back to finding that perfect match. Have a blessed day
Aloha, Ginger Hawaiian Mermaid
Comment Written 08-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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should say searching for the perfect sole, hmm? Bless you Ginger! :)S
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
Lol, I like the style in which you write. It is lively and humorous and enjoyable to read. I'm sure my washing machine eats socks as the same pair that goes in never comes back out.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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Lol, I like the style in which you write. It is lively and humorous and enjoyable to read. I'm sure my washing machine eats socks as the same pair that goes in never comes back out.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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thx so much Sarah! :)Sharyn
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
OMG laughter again and this is the absolute cat's meow. My daughter and I were just discussing where the socks go. Like down the drain oir where. This could't come at a better time. She will absloutely howl tonight. It was great
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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OMG laughter again and this is the absolute cat's meow. My daughter and I were just discussing where the socks go. Like down the drain oir where. This could't come at a better time. She will absloutely howl tonight. It was great
Comment Written 08-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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thx Barb - so glad you enjoyed this one! :)Sharyn
Comment from RodG
This poem made my day! I read it while sipping MY second cup of coffee. It's fun to share a few moments with this speaker: a wife, mother, and housewife. It's amusing that she can compare these 8 mismatched socks to "last night's unwanted dinner guests." She can reflect on their size, color, vintage, and social life. There is an undertone of sorrow we discern only at the end when we discover what she herself is missing. Subtle use of rhyme throughout. Just a fun read! RodG
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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This poem made my day! I read it while sipping MY second cup of coffee. It's fun to share a few moments with this speaker: a wife, mother, and housewife. It's amusing that she can compare these 8 mismatched socks to "last night's unwanted dinner guests." She can reflect on their size, color, vintage, and social life. There is an undertone of sorrow we discern only at the end when we discover what she herself is missing. Subtle use of rhyme throughout. Just a fun read! RodG
Comment Written 08-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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glad you enjoyed it Rod - thx! :)Sharyn
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
The little things in married life take on new meaning over a cup of coffee enjoyed in the embrace of the morning light. Left alone, the importance of being loved yet not taken for granted imposes thoughts, some welcome to a housewife beset with maternal duties (the wash) and others portraying images of freedom from drudgery. Correct me if I have run aground on these idioms of reality VS. fantasy. A good piece,well constructed in a vertical fashion meant to direct one's eye ever downward to 'the perfect mate'... a play on words or a subliminal meaning? We'll never know will we?
Regards:
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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The little things in married life take on new meaning over a cup of coffee enjoyed in the embrace of the morning light. Left alone, the importance of being loved yet not taken for granted imposes thoughts, some welcome to a housewife beset with maternal duties (the wash) and others portraying images of freedom from drudgery. Correct me if I have run aground on these idioms of reality VS. fantasy. A good piece,well constructed in a vertical fashion meant to direct one's eye ever downward to 'the perfect mate'... a play on words or a subliminal meaning? We'll never know will we?
Regards:
Comment Written 08-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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You have it exactly Stephen. Thank you ... and no, you'll never know, will you? :))Sharyn
Comment from Karen B. Huck
Fun poem on a trivial yet recurring housewife ordeal : the poor lonesome sock... Treated with lots of humor. Flows well. Enjoyed the read !
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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Fun poem on a trivial yet recurring housewife ordeal : the poor lonesome sock... Treated with lots of humor. Flows well. Enjoyed the read !
Comment Written 08-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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Thx so much Karen - :)Sharyn
Comment from chandra1
Thank you for a witty and philosophical perspective on the relative importance of what only appears to be apparently trivial in every day life, and on the connections to be made in the temporary peace of a second cup in a harried day!
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Thank you for a witty and philosophical perspective on the relative importance of what only appears to be apparently trivial in every day life, and on the connections to be made in the temporary peace of a second cup in a harried day!
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Comment Written 08-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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thx Chandra - please note that if you give a "four" you are meant to also suggest what needs improvement - please see review guidelines (below) - otherwise, please do re-rate, ok? :)Sharyn
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