All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "She Turns the Page"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from ann marie mazz
the title caught my eye
your words kept my attention
yes the puzzling pieces of aging
I marvel at those who write in this format
it is a beauty for certain
your presentation is marvelous
well done in all areas
thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2013
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the title caught my eye
your words kept my attention
yes the puzzling pieces of aging
I marvel at those who write in this format
it is a beauty for certain
your presentation is marvelous
well done in all areas
thank you for sharing
Comment Written 13-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2013
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That's so sweet of you ann marie - thank you! :)Sharyn
Comment from Realist101
What a beauty! That last line is perfection too. SO true. Time waits for no one. I often get such a feeling of angst, knowing time is passing so quickly. This is lovely work Miss Vision. Well, storm moving in...must unplug! Hug! Susan
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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What a beauty! That last line is perfection too. SO true. Time waits for no one. I often get such a feeling of angst, knowing time is passing so quickly. This is lovely work Miss Vision. Well, storm moving in...must unplug! Hug! Susan
Comment Written 17-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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bless you Susan - and welcome back! So glad you got to this one! :)Sharyn
Comment from Alexmi1984
So, Time is a woman? That must be why they take all of it. :)
This odd pun aside, this excellent poem deserves everything that it received so far (awards, recognition and peer reviews). It flew delicately, as if it took the time to unveil itself to the eyes and the lips of the reader.
Alex :)
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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So, Time is a woman? That must be why they take all of it. :)
This odd pun aside, this excellent poem deserves everything that it received so far (awards, recognition and peer reviews). It flew delicately, as if it took the time to unveil itself to the eyes and the lips of the reader.
Alex :)
Comment Written 16-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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What a lovely six! Thank you so much Alex - so much appreciated - yes, we women are greedy, hmm? :)S
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I will not answer until my lawyer shows up. LOL.
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Comment from mikenbel
Congratulations on having this poem recognized. It is simply beautiful. I am seeing what you speak of not only in my mother...but I am feeling it in myself...I don't like growing old...I don't like time just turning the page.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Congratulations on having this poem recognized. It is simply beautiful. I am seeing what you speak of not only in my mother...but I am feeling it in myself...I don't like growing old...I don't like time just turning the page.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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me neither, dammit! Bless you for reading and enjoying this piece my dear - I so appreciate that as it was a piece I was very happy with.
:)Sharyn
Comment from justatuna
I really wish I could give you a six, but I'm limited by the rules. This is a beautiful poem. A publishable poem. There's nothing more true than these words. And, of course, only your style could make me feel the way I do. Damn, Sharyn...this is really, really good and touched me. Congratulations.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2013
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I really wish I could give you a six, but I'm limited by the rules. This is a beautiful poem. A publishable poem. There's nothing more true than these words. And, of course, only your style could make me feel the way I do. Damn, Sharyn...this is really, really good and touched me. Congratulations.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2013
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Oh Rob - thank you SO much. I really value your opinion - you know that! I'm so glad. I've never really taken the time to write formal poetry, as free verse comes so easily - but I find that I'm enjoying the process. You bring a huge smile to my face - I'm always honored and delighted when someone "gets" my work.
Big, appreciate hugs!
:)Sharyn
Comment from Fluffyhead
like everything about this poem. Just read a blog by this guy a little older than me writing about his indomitable mother getting frail and dying. Love the red that permeates this poem. You should write lots more poems.Thanks peace and happy day.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2013
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like everything about this poem. Just read a blog by this guy a little older than me writing about his indomitable mother getting frail and dying. Love the red that permeates this poem. You should write lots more poems.Thanks peace and happy day.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2013
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Bless you for your wonderful six on this one Fluffyhead! it sounds like your really understood the intent of this piece and I think you so much for that my dear!
:)Sharyn
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day my friend. I am currently inn the Philipines visiting my beautiful wife and baby so i have been a bit tardy with my reviewing. As is always the case with your work I loved this one. You, above all others on this site have the ability to take me to where your poems are heading, with smoothness and ease. Cheers Fez.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2013
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G'day my friend. I am currently inn the Philipines visiting my beautiful wife and baby so i have been a bit tardy with my reviewing. As is always the case with your work I loved this one. You, above all others on this site have the ability to take me to where your poems are heading, with smoothness and ease. Cheers Fez.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2013
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Bless you Fez! wow! you're really getting around! Glad you "got" this one! :)))Sharyn
Comment from Isaac Kavik
What a lovely , yet haunting sonnet. Beautifully crafted with great meter and unforced rhyme. I loved it. To add to its beauty, the truth of what you said is something we should all strive to in our poetry.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2013
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What a lovely , yet haunting sonnet. Beautifully crafted with great meter and unforced rhyme. I loved it. To add to its beauty, the truth of what you said is something we should all strive to in our poetry.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2013
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Isaac, I'm delighted! Thank you so much for your wonderful praise and your award of six stars on this one. Sonnets are not an easy write, and I always find them a challenge - so glad this one came 'home' for you. (Me too, actually - I was happy with how it came out).
Blessings, and again, a huge 'thank you'!
Sharyn
Comment from Cliff Ashpaugh
Very good, Sharyn, as usual. Definitely brings back slice of life moments of memories. Mostly of Mother and father who are gone, and the kids and grandkids who'll be taking our places. Very endearing poem. Cliff
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2013
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Very good, Sharyn, as usual. Definitely brings back slice of life moments of memories. Mostly of Mother and father who are gone, and the kids and grandkids who'll be taking our places. Very endearing poem. Cliff
Comment Written 07-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2013
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Thx so much Cliff! :)S
Comment from Hollyhock
Wonderful sentiments, very appropriate to the sonnet form. I loved the busy movement, the speed of childhood in the first stanza and the fulfilment of adult life, a time when we are still immortal. Your pivot line evokes all the uncertainty which life brings when we recognize the inevitable changes happening around us, and realise we are not immune to Time after all. Great rhyming couplet to complete.
The only thing I disliked was your use of the word "Inexorably" - I find it an ugly word anyway, but I am never sure of its stresses and for me it stumbles rather.
Still, an excellent contest piece.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2013
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Wonderful sentiments, very appropriate to the sonnet form. I loved the busy movement, the speed of childhood in the first stanza and the fulfilment of adult life, a time when we are still immortal. Your pivot line evokes all the uncertainty which life brings when we recognize the inevitable changes happening around us, and realise we are not immune to Time after all. Great rhyming couplet to complete.
The only thing I disliked was your use of the word "Inexorably" - I find it an ugly word anyway, but I am never sure of its stresses and for me it stumbles rather.
Still, an excellent contest piece.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2013
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oh dear - sorry you don't like inexorably ... actually, the pronunciation is inEXorABly (primary stress on 'ex', secondary strong stress on 'ab' which is a perfect scan, but it IS an awkward word, I agree ... To my ear, it sounds like the wheels of time slowly turning (my mother collected clocks, can you tell?) ... but never mind ... still glad you enjoyed it my dear! :)))s
