Comment from AnonymousWisdom

Average

Place riding hand, under rope.
There shouldn't be a comma there.

Personally, I found the structure of this distracting and disjointed. It was kind of difficult to understand the story you were trying to convey.
Also, this was classified as humorous, but I didn't think it was funny.
Just my opinion and thoughts on this--others may have different things to say.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest :)



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 Comment Written 25-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014

Thanks I corrected the comma

Comment from CR Delport

Excellent

I have never ridden a bull and dont plan on doing it anytime soon either. It looks way to scary and dangerous. I do admire the people who do. Nice poem.

 Comment Written 04-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013

well it's not that scary... is it?...
it's only a little cow with horns, the same on a kids bicycle....

I mean there are a few things different... size, weight,one's made out of metal... oh... and other other can bend metal... never-mind... you are 100% correct...be afraid

Thanks for the review and rating and enjoy your day.... bill

Comment from Gypsy Starchild

Excellent

It did bring a smile and I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. I used to be a barrel racer and I always enjoyed laughter at the expense of bull riders. lol Thank you for sharing. :)

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013

Hi there I had a lot of enjoyment writing this silly thing... Thanks for reviewing and ratings... Have a good Sunday... Bill

ps... i will later this evening respond to other poem, and thank you Heaps for rating

Comment from Jmmercer

Excellent

Fantastically funny. Brought a smile to my face. Written well with good stanza breaks. I've only seen one rodeo in Calgary, but it was an amazing sight. Thanks so much for sharing your work and good luck in the contest. =)

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013

Thank you for reading this crazy thing... the layout was question many times by myself...

I wanted to build it like a novel, after each chapter then on to the next... or something like that...
I am not the best for laying things out... but I try...

If you are ever going to ride of of those Crazy Things... I figured you either'make a will or give it candy..

and figure if you touch/kick him with your spurs... you might as well just end it, you are about ready to get smashed by a pissed bull...

It now has 2 reasons to stomp you--- you gave candy, and trusted you.. then to have that trust fade by the kick

Thanks for the nice review and rating... take good care... Bill

Comment from country ranch writer

Excellent

BET HE THOUGHT OH!S--T asHe was bouncing across the arenas he knew that bull was going to make mince meat out of him for doing that to him. Accidentally or not believe it or not they do not forget!

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013

Yes the bouncing bull ... exactly right mince meat... thanks for reviewing and rating... take good care... Bill

reply by country ranch writer on 03-Mar-2013

welcome

Comment from elliejean

Excellent

I love the picture. I love the poem. Rider's usually know when Ia ride will end badly. They can sense it the moment they out of the gate.It is a shoot myself moment as soon as they are flying in the air. Great work.

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2013

You know Ellie Jean, your name reminds me of Alanna Jean, my dearest friend ever, from Anita...

2nd time this week I've cried in writing a reply to you... keep it up...

You know I never thought of it this way as you wrote "It is a shoot myself moment as soon as they are flying in the air," but I guess that's true I just thought it was a funny line, but I see now how that fits.... Thanks for the nice review and don't let the tears scare you away... thanks...

William Hager .............................. c

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written, hager, you did an excellent job writing this story about the pain of being a bullrider, i enjoyed reading it, good luck in the contest...

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013

Thanks so much for reviewing and rating... and your comments are much appreciated... thank you... Bill

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Your piece is huge hoot! Enjoyed it so much. Great concept and told well. A dangerous "sport" described in a playful, humorous way.

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2013

Dear BeasPeas, thank you so much B, for this really nice review...

I figured the first thing you give to a Beast like that is candy, a friendship token, at 1st I wrote, "Make a Will," then changed it to candy and I too had a hoot...

This whole thing was fun to write, and it brings a smile as it seems to be well received..

The 1st piece I wrote was about gardening and thought 'what profession has action, and Rodeo came into play, so I changed it.

Thanks so much for reading and rating... you take good care, and enjoy... thanks... Bill

reply by BeasPeas on 02-Mar-2013

Gonna read something else of yours because Brahma was so much fun. Keep on writing. BeasPeas/Marilyn

Comment from Treischel

Excellent

Great economical use of 50 words. Your really brought to life that bull ride. Had me tense, then laughing. Good read.

Love this line:
Absolutely, never kick Tombstone's testicles with spurs.
Oops!

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2013

Gee thanks for this great review as too I am smiling... Had a writer on site tell me "Bill you need to get rid of unneeded words, especially in poetry and so I applied that here... in my other stuff I am too wordy and tend to overwrite... I stopped writing for a number of years [joined in 2004] and felt discouraged...

Now back I have a different take on writing and I am understanding more though the site members suggestions and encouragement, such as what you wrote,

Great economical use of 50 words. Your really brought to life that bull ride. Had me tense.... it was suppose to... Thanks so much for reviewing and rating... take good care... bill

Comment from sgalletti

Excellent

It did bring a smile for sure! I am always in awe of the bull kriders in rodeos and am amazed at their "balls" so to speak! Best of luck in this fun contest. Sue

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2013

Thanks so much for your review and rating... and it seemed to do the trick of bringing a smile as intended... I too was laughing when I wrote this Sue... Best of luck as well... bill