Hands of Man
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Comment from royowen
I journeyed to Cambodia on a mission trip last year, helping out a ministry that rescues kids from the sex industry, I wrote a poem called "Wombs of paste", ( it's in my portfolio) the S21 prison were all bur a few survived, out of 14,000 prisoners tortured and killed. Then to the killing fields. Well done with this articulate and well rhymed work, beautifully written with strong language as its fortress. Well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017
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I journeyed to Cambodia on a mission trip last year, helping out a ministry that rescues kids from the sex industry, I wrote a poem called "Wombs of paste", ( it's in my portfolio) the S21 prison were all bur a few survived, out of 14,000 prisoners tortured and killed. Then to the killing fields. Well done with this articulate and well rhymed work, beautifully written with strong language as its fortress. Well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 12-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Roy, your thoughts are appreciated.
Curt
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Most welcome
Comment from Joy Graham
This is an intense poem. It reminds me of the song, "One Tin Soldier". The Valley fought the Mountain people to win the treasure buried beneath the stone. Peace on Earth was all it said. "Go ahead and hate your neighbors, go ahead and cheat a friend. Do it in the name of heaven, you can justify it in the end. There won't be any trumpets blowing, come the judgement day. On the bloody morning after, one tin soldier rides away."
Wow, I didn't realize how much of that song I could remember lol!
Anyway, sorry to go on with that song. I just think the message is similar. Fighting wars won't solve much except let off a little steam.
I wish you well in the poem of the month contest.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017
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This is an intense poem. It reminds me of the song, "One Tin Soldier". The Valley fought the Mountain people to win the treasure buried beneath the stone. Peace on Earth was all it said. "Go ahead and hate your neighbors, go ahead and cheat a friend. Do it in the name of heaven, you can justify it in the end. There won't be any trumpets blowing, come the judgement day. On the bloody morning after, one tin soldier rides away."
Wow, I didn't realize how much of that song I could remember lol!
Anyway, sorry to go on with that song. I just think the message is similar. Fighting wars won't solve much except let off a little steam.
I wish you well in the poem of the month contest.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017
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Wasn't that the theme song of a movie also? I want to say "Walking Tall," but don't quote me. I like George Carlin's take on what war is. But in the end, we never learn. After thousands of years, we're still just only half a step ahead of cavemen.
Thanks for the thoughts Joy!
Curt
Comment from Hamiel
A very interesting poem. Very well written. Congratulations too for the recognized work and as poem of the month. Really beautiful and interesting. Keep up
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017
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A very interesting poem. Very well written. Congratulations too for the recognized work and as poem of the month. Really beautiful and interesting. Keep up
Comment Written 12-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017
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Thank you so much,
Curt
Comment from donforclearn
This poem is well written. It gives a view of life from several aspects. The imagery is excellent. Good Luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing your work.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017
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This poem is well written. It gives a view of life from several aspects. The imagery is excellent. Good Luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing your work.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017
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Thank you,
Curt
Comment from mizzkris20
Thanks for Sharing this piece. I didn't know what to think of it at first but I reread it and realized it have a significant amount I meaning to it. The reader can use his/her imagination and tKe it from there.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017
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Thanks for Sharing this piece. I didn't know what to think of it at first but I reread it and realized it have a significant amount I meaning to it. The reader can use his/her imagination and tKe it from there.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017
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Yes, that's true.
Thank you,
Curt
Comment from RebelRose
I love the smooth way you injected rhymes into the body of the poem as well as studying the end of the lines. Very well written. I enjoyed the opportunity to read and review.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017
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I love the smooth way you injected rhymes into the body of the poem as well as studying the end of the lines. Very well written. I enjoyed the opportunity to read and review.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017
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Thank you for your thoughts,
Curt
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That was supposed to read, as well as at the end of the lines...don't where 'studying' came from. I hate autocorrect.
Comment from Florrie
A very well written poem with the 14 syllable lines and rhyme. The last stanza is excellent and the whole read is thought provoking. florrie
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2013
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A very well written poem with the 14 syllable lines and rhyme. The last stanza is excellent and the whole read is thought provoking. florrie
Comment Written 22-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much Florrie,
Curt
Comment from notdeadyet
I was not sure what to make of it until the last line. To me, it is a reference to Christ. So the rest must be all the evil of men. I liked your images and especially the grass growing in spilt blood. Very meaningful.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
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I was not sure what to make of it until the last line. To me, it is a reference to Christ. So the rest must be all the evil of men. I liked your images and especially the grass growing in spilt blood. Very meaningful.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
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Thank you my friend,
This piece had a mind of its own, and yes, you have it right. I feel as though I was just an instrument, and a greater hand than mind was doing the actual writing.
Thanks again,
Curt
Comment from elliejean
I love the poem. I like to thank you for leaving the message up to the reader. I read and first thought of all the useless wars man fought. I also thought of all the nature destroyed by man. Great work.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
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I love the poem. I like to thank you for leaving the message up to the reader. I read and first thought of all the useless wars man fought. I also thought of all the nature destroyed by man. Great work.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
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Thank you,
I like to leave the meaning to the reader, but when pressed, I do give my reasons for writing them. This one, however, took on a life of its own, and actually was intended to have other meanings. That is why I left it to the reader to decide.
Thank you again,
Curt
Comment from Kit Parker
Yep, yep, I thought it might be and . . . YES! It is a wonderful rendition of Revelations, of Christ's story, a warning for those with ears to hear and, sadly, simply just one hell of a poem for those who are deaf to the truth.
Okay, enough of my inspired silliness - hey, it was YOUR poem that inspired my delighted tirade.
Seriously, as I read it I found myself hoping for a deeper insight, a profound wisdom that would go beyond a cautionary, possibly ecological - definitely anti-war, tale of woe. Boy-howdy did you deliver. Sure there are elements of both environmentalism and counter-conflict but the real message of the Christian theme shines through like the proverbial beacon in the night. Jolly good job!
I particularly liked the first line of the last stanza. What a provocative commentary on human pride - that thing so many wars are fought over, on who's account so many wrong choices are made and because of which so much time, resources and lives are lost. Truly, in the end, it tallies up for naught.
Literally the only improvement I could possibly offer is that you change the word "saw" to see in the second line of the first stanza. Now, of course, I realize that only applies if indeed you mean for that first stanza to be in the present tense. It seems to me (after four readings, the last three of which were out loud) that that is your intention. The rest of the poem is in the past or even present-past tense until the last phrase of the last sentence which, of course, is in future tense. If, however, you meant to provide the reader with a bit of confusion, thereby forcing him/her to realize Christs's omnipresence then, obviously, we can forget I even mentioned it.
The last thing I have to say to you is that this poem moved me deeply both as a fellow Christian and as a fellow poet. I'm looking forward to seeing more of your work. - PEACE -
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
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Yep, yep, I thought it might be and . . . YES! It is a wonderful rendition of Revelations, of Christ's story, a warning for those with ears to hear and, sadly, simply just one hell of a poem for those who are deaf to the truth.
Okay, enough of my inspired silliness - hey, it was YOUR poem that inspired my delighted tirade.
Seriously, as I read it I found myself hoping for a deeper insight, a profound wisdom that would go beyond a cautionary, possibly ecological - definitely anti-war, tale of woe. Boy-howdy did you deliver. Sure there are elements of both environmentalism and counter-conflict but the real message of the Christian theme shines through like the proverbial beacon in the night. Jolly good job!
I particularly liked the first line of the last stanza. What a provocative commentary on human pride - that thing so many wars are fought over, on who's account so many wrong choices are made and because of which so much time, resources and lives are lost. Truly, in the end, it tallies up for naught.
Literally the only improvement I could possibly offer is that you change the word "saw" to see in the second line of the first stanza. Now, of course, I realize that only applies if indeed you mean for that first stanza to be in the present tense. It seems to me (after four readings, the last three of which were out loud) that that is your intention. The rest of the poem is in the past or even present-past tense until the last phrase of the last sentence which, of course, is in future tense. If, however, you meant to provide the reader with a bit of confusion, thereby forcing him/her to realize Christs's omnipresence then, obviously, we can forget I even mentioned it.
The last thing I have to say to you is that this poem moved me deeply both as a fellow Christian and as a fellow poet. I'm looking forward to seeing more of your work. - PEACE -
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
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Thank you Kit,
I am most impressed with your review. I am also glad you could see the meaning behind the words, for it was truly an inspired write. I really just sat there and wrote the words that came to me, so you could actually say I was the instrument and another source was the Creator, so to speak.
I am honored by your thoughts and stars, thank you once again,
Curt
