Hands of Man
A Story48 total reviews
Comment from GarthL
Very solid aabb rhyme scheme and heptameter syllable count. Great internal rhymes made for a smooth flow to each line and some b and s alliteration.
The message is what one might make of it and I had several emerge whilst reading. Thanks for an entertaining and educational read this morning.
because the [the] hands - ??
Very well written - the hands of man are capable of so much beauty and so much to despair. StaySafe, Garth
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Very solid aabb rhyme scheme and heptameter syllable count. Great internal rhymes made for a smooth flow to each line and some b and s alliteration.
The message is what one might make of it and I had several emerge whilst reading. Thanks for an entertaining and educational read this morning.
because the [the] hands - ??
Very well written - the hands of man are capable of so much beauty and so much to despair. StaySafe, Garth
Comment Written 24-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Thanks Garth, that was my intent, to let the reader draw their own conclusions based on their experiences.
Curt
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Very well done, I enjoyed it very much. You're a master of these heptameter you introduced me to. I did a 15 syllable rhyming couplets recently, 'Wordsmiths', in a trochaic meter based on my learning from you, thank you very much Curt. Stay well, Garth
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Wow,
Glad I could inspire you! :>)
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I do like the way you craft you work, it's always very inspiring thank you!!
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Right back atcha! :>)
Comment from ravenblack
yep. the hands of man have a way of doing that, twisting everything to serve their purpose, turning spiritual quest into wars, killing everything and everyone different from what the hands in power wrought. crusades and jihads - not the way to go. love the 4th stanza. great job in presenting a message that is assessable to all.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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yep. the hands of man have a way of doing that, twisting everything to serve their purpose, turning spiritual quest into wars, killing everything and everyone different from what the hands in power wrought. crusades and jihads - not the way to go. love the 4th stanza. great job in presenting a message that is assessable to all.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Thanks Ed,
I'm glad you got this one.
Curt
Comment from pbroussard209
You should of title this "if Poe wrote the bible." Okay so I say awesome a lot when I review your writing but in all honesty it really is. I enjoy all your poems happy, sad, scary, you have a wonderful way of telling a story and you draw me in every time.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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You should of title this "if Poe wrote the bible." Okay so I say awesome a lot when I review your writing but in all honesty it really is. I enjoy all your poems happy, sad, scary, you have a wonderful way of telling a story and you draw me in every time.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Thanks,
I am always glad to hear from you, you make my day when I can entertain in many different venues.
Curt
Comment from seren james
This really is a six star poem.It is a joy to read. You have said all needed to say in the author notes so there is no need for me to repeat. It flows so beautifully and has a very powerful message. You certainly have huge talent to write.
A slight glitch I have is the last line of the third stanza.
Although the 14 syllables are there, the word 'legacy' somehow spoils the beat.It may be just me.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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This really is a six star poem.It is a joy to read. You have said all needed to say in the author notes so there is no need for me to repeat. It flows so beautifully and has a very powerful message. You certainly have huge talent to write.
A slight glitch I have is the last line of the third stanza.
Although the 14 syllables are there, the word 'legacy' somehow spoils the beat.It may be just me.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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The iamb is slightly different, but if read through in a slightly slower cadence, it will work. I apologize for that anyway, and thank you so much for your thoughts and highest of ratings, believe me, they are appreciated more than I can say.
Curt
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
I am not sure where to start. The message of a lost and dying world, no matter how hard some battle, is clearly told. In words so well chosen they leave no room for doubt, and yet they rhyme. Wonderful job, and yes he will come again. Best to you, Carolyn
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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I am not sure where to start. The message of a lost and dying world, no matter how hard some battle, is clearly told. In words so well chosen they leave no room for doubt, and yet they rhyme. Wonderful job, and yes he will come again. Best to you, Carolyn
Comment Written 24-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Thank you Carolyn,
I am honored by your thoughts and the rating is icing on the commentary cake you bestowed so graciously upon me.
Curt
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, curt, you did an excellent job writing this aabb poem with the internal rhymes that added to the meter of it, brings me to mind of Jesus battling the whore of babylon. i enjoyed reading it
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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this is very well written, curt, you did an excellent job writing this aabb poem with the internal rhymes that added to the meter of it, brings me to mind of Jesus battling the whore of babylon. i enjoyed reading it
Comment Written 24-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Thank you so much my friend,
I am so glad you could see the parallels in this write and feel its meaning.
Curt
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Curt Mongold ....
I read this with interest and clearly, you have concentrated on the internal rhymes whilst telling a story which you refer to in your words ... "The message is what you make of it." The thoughts you have expressed are your own and somewhat different from the true story of the One Who came on earth, was Crucified and rose again from the dead.
Thank you for sharing these thoughts with us.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Hullo Curt Mongold ....
I read this with interest and clearly, you have concentrated on the internal rhymes whilst telling a story which you refer to in your words ... "The message is what you make of it." The thoughts you have expressed are your own and somewhat different from the true story of the One Who came on earth, was Crucified and rose again from the dead.
Thank you for sharing these thoughts with us.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Thank you Nanette,
I never take the Story and repeat it, but make it my own, as we all do to understand the things our minds cannot fully grasp.
Thank you so much for your thoughts, as always,
Curt
Comment from MM lives on :)
Always enjoy poetry that lets me make my own thought. Nice work here Curt it was ever interesting and indeed well written throughout. Creative use of imagery as well. Thanks for sharing..
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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Always enjoy poetry that lets me make my own thought. Nice work here Curt it was ever interesting and indeed well written throughout. Creative use of imagery as well. Thanks for sharing..
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Comment Written 24-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Thanks for the thoughts my friend, they are always appreciated.
Curt
