Hands of Man
A Story48 total reviews
Comment from Titanx9
After reading your author notes, I can see what you mean. There's a lot going on in this piece, but what I see is destruction and desecration in practically every stanza. The beautiful forests have been destroyed as it became the killing fill. It seems the "killing hands" of man has more or less destroyed all that we proclaim good. I enjoyed reading this very arcane or esoteric piece of writing!
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2013
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After reading your author notes, I can see what you mean. There's a lot going on in this piece, but what I see is destruction and desecration in practically every stanza. The beautiful forests have been destroyed as it became the killing fill. It seems the "killing hands" of man has more or less destroyed all that we proclaim good. I enjoyed reading this very arcane or esoteric piece of writing!
Comment Written 28-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2013
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Thank you for your thoughts on this piece my friend, they are appreciated.
Curt
Comment from adewpearl
wonderful use of enjambment in creating a flow of ideas
strong rhymes
good consonance of hard C sounds in clumps of oak
and in killing/stacked
good consonance of R and L sounds in rolled and curled
excellent alliteration and consonance throughout
nice internal rhyme in phrases like died with pride
and begotten had forgotten
strong emotion in a very well composed poem Brooke
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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wonderful use of enjambment in creating a flow of ideas
strong rhymes
good consonance of hard C sounds in clumps of oak
and in killing/stacked
good consonance of R and L sounds in rolled and curled
excellent alliteration and consonance throughout
nice internal rhyme in phrases like died with pride
and begotten had forgotten
strong emotion in a very well composed poem Brooke
Comment Written 28-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Thanks Brooke, you didn't have to spend all that time for two cents, but I appreciate it even more that you did.
Curt
Comment from terry drake
Fantastic! I enjoyed this so much I cannot do it justice in my review. I loved the double rhyme in your lines that lent to a spirited rhythm all its own. Very good job with a solid message.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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Fantastic! I enjoyed this so much I cannot do it justice in my review. I loved the double rhyme in your lines that lent to a spirited rhythm all its own. Very good job with a solid message.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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Thank you so much fro your comments and highest of ratings my friend.
I am indeed honored.
Curt
Comment from DALLAS01
This begs for more than one interpretation. The structure and all of the poetic devices, which number quite a few, make this for a memorable read. Book marked. Like to share the exceptional ones with my sister. Most impressed with the smooth flow that included same line rhyming.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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This begs for more than one interpretation. The structure and all of the poetic devices, which number quite a few, make this for a memorable read. Book marked. Like to share the exceptional ones with my sister. Most impressed with the smooth flow that included same line rhyming.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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Thank you!
I am more impressed with a review that wishes to share than any stars, so thank you once again my friend, I am honored.
Curt
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You're welcome.
Comment from Larissa B
Simply great and compelling... the story, rhyme and rhythm. Nothing to add or minus. Love your word choices and how nothing seems forced at all.
blaze
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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Simply great and compelling... the story, rhyme and rhythm. Nothing to add or minus. Love your word choices and how nothing seems forced at all.
blaze
Comment Written 26-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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Thank you Blaze,
You truly honor me with your thoughts and rating of this piece.
Curt
Comment from RominaItalia
I had an imagine whe I started reading that changed quickly as I kept on. A subtle but then clear character and message. Great imagery, rhyme, rhythm and flow. Very well done Curt, again.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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I had an imagine whe I started reading that changed quickly as I kept on. A subtle but then clear character and message. Great imagery, rhyme, rhythm and flow. Very well done Curt, again.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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Thank you so much!
I do like to keep you guessing!
Curt
Comment from Peter Mansson
Firstly the techniques displayed here are just superb with consistent aabb rhyme, internal rhymes in every line that do not appear stilted, and the smooth heptametric rhythm. But the real glory of this piece lies in the content of which you have cleverly suggested lies in the eyes of the beholder. The message is profound and the allusions awesome.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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Firstly the techniques displayed here are just superb with consistent aabb rhyme, internal rhymes in every line that do not appear stilted, and the smooth heptametric rhythm. But the real glory of this piece lies in the content of which you have cleverly suggested lies in the eyes of the beholder. The message is profound and the allusions awesome.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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Thank you Peter,
I am truly honored by your comments and highest of ratings for this piece.
Best wishes,
Curt
Comment from Pili Pubul
Due to the fact that I was raised in a convent all the religious, (even if I do not belong to any organized religion anymore, just very spiritual ) I can feel
By the Imagery written masterfully the subject is connected with
Biblical passages, ending with Jesus crucifixion by the hands of man.
Excellent.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2013
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Due to the fact that I was raised in a convent all the religious, (even if I do not belong to any organized religion anymore, just very spiritual ) I can feel
By the Imagery written masterfully the subject is connected with
Biblical passages, ending with Jesus crucifixion by the hands of man.
Excellent.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2013
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Thank you so much for understanding and for your wonderful thoughts Pili, I am honored again by your comments and rating.
Curt
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Otis my pleasure Curt.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Can't give you the well deserved 6, Curt, this one is an absolute masterful creation in poetry. It is what makes poets realise why they write. You have taken the scriptures and delivered us a version of the truth that is simply amazing. Your rhyming and rhythm is perfect, I cannot praise it enough. A real pleasure to read. xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2013
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Can't give you the well deserved 6, Curt, this one is an absolute masterful creation in poetry. It is what makes poets realise why they write. You have taken the scriptures and delivered us a version of the truth that is simply amazing. Your rhyming and rhythm is perfect, I cannot praise it enough. A real pleasure to read. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 25-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2013
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Thank you Sandra!
I am honored for the virtual six, and am so pleased you find such merit in my work, it is truly what makes the endeavor worthwhile.
Curt
Comment from Jean Lutz
For me this writing is the work of a modern day scribe. So many Biblical passages came to mind. Beginning with Genesis 4 where Cain offered the works of his hands and his brother Abel offered a lamb. God accepted Abel's sacrifice. Another passage is found in Genesis 9:6 -- an extended chiasmus:
Whoever sheds (A)
the blood (B)
of man (C)
by man shall (C')
his blood (B')
be shed (A')
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2013
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For me this writing is the work of a modern day scribe. So many Biblical passages came to mind. Beginning with Genesis 4 where Cain offered the works of his hands and his brother Abel offered a lamb. God accepted Abel's sacrifice. Another passage is found in Genesis 9:6 -- an extended chiasmus:
Whoever sheds (A)
the blood (B)
of man (C)
by man shall (C')
his blood (B')
be shed (A')
Comment Written 25-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2013
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Thank you Jean!
I am so glad you could find the deeper meaning in this piece, and do not criticize for my paraphrasing. It really means a lot to me. Your rating humbles me, and I thank you once again,
Curt
