All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "In Velvet Dark"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Enrique28
Well, what can I say? Nicely done, and in very good taste. A rundown of passion from dance floor to a predictable goal with lovely images in fine poetic tones. Excellent presentation! Enrique
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2013
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Well, what can I say? Nicely done, and in very good taste. A rundown of passion from dance floor to a predictable goal with lovely images in fine poetic tones. Excellent presentation! Enrique
Comment Written 16-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2013
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thx so much Enrique - so glad y ou enjoyed! :)Sharyn
Comment from Indie Skreet
this reads so smoothly and the passion intense enough for it to be tangible. So much skill, I felt a chill through my body as reading. Probably my most favourite poem since arriving on Fanfare. I cannot praise highly enough.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2013
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this reads so smoothly and the passion intense enough for it to be tangible. So much skill, I felt a chill through my body as reading. Probably my most favourite poem since arriving on Fanfare. I cannot praise highly enough.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2013
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bless you, Indie! I'm SO very glad you loved this one too - I enjoyed writing it! (If you enjoyed this one, hop into my portfolio and read "It's Time" and also "Midnight in Paris" - they've both got similar themes). Thank you so much for "fanning" me, too - may I return the favor? AND, of course, a HUGE 'thank you' for your wonderful SIX! that went down awfully well with my morning coffee! :)Sharyn
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Oh I certainly will. So glad your coffee tasted good :), Very best Indie
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a nice piece of writing describing a beautiful, memorable and pleasant moment shared by two people connected by love. very great flow. kudos
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2013
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This is a nice piece of writing describing a beautiful, memorable and pleasant moment shared by two people connected by love. very great flow. kudos
Comment Written 16-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2013
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thx Perp!
Comment from chasennov
'In Velvet Dark.' This work was very well formulated allowing formal structure and a good rounding of the body to encompass a strong extension to the narrative. Okay I accepted your fire as two syllables. I liked your ocean rhythm, I write poems like this as well. Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2013
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'In Velvet Dark.' This work was very well formulated allowing formal structure and a good rounding of the body to encompass a strong extension to the narrative. Okay I accepted your fire as two syllables. I liked your ocean rhythm, I write poems like this as well. Well done.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2013
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This work was very well formulated allowing formal structure and a good rounding of the body to encompass a strong extension to the narrative - ok - this is the third one of these dear!!! Please, on bended knee, I beg you - write a real, individual review, ok?
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I read every word you wrote and I responded in the fastest way I could. Your writing is good, why do you want me to say otherwise? Just because I use the same terms of reference for convenience sake? I review a lot of work in one day and my time is my own. Next time I'll write you a different review if you like. Kind regards.
Comment from Titanx9
This is one of the most seductive poems I've ever read and it literally burns the screen. These lovers, lost in their own world are dancing to their own intimate rhythm. The fluidity of this piece makes it more readable and enjoyable. Great job and good luck!
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2013
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This is one of the most seductive poems I've ever read and it literally burns the screen. These lovers, lost in their own world are dancing to their own intimate rhythm. The fluidity of this piece makes it more readable and enjoyable. Great job and good luck!
Comment Written 16-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2013
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thank you so much, Dossie ... I love writing "subtle" ... there's a great deal more power in "quiet" power, yes?
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I agree 100 percent!!!
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aah, great minds Dossie!
Comment from EMB
Hmm. So this is what it's like to pick up a babe at a ball instead of a disco club. LOL You did a wonderful job with the visuals with this one, and I have a better understanding of what women love about these fancy shindigs. :)
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2013
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Hmm. So this is what it's like to pick up a babe at a ball instead of a disco club. LOL You did a wonderful job with the visuals with this one, and I have a better understanding of what women love about these fancy shindigs. :)
Comment Written 16-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2013
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got to get into the silkies Ed! :)))
Comment from Righteous Riter
The message is clear and understandable. Although this piece does not rhyme, it flows well and the harmony is where it needs to be. My attention is captured and held from beginning to end. Good job.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2013
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The message is clear and understandable. Although this piece does not rhyme, it flows well and the harmony is where it needs to be. My attention is captured and held from beginning to end. Good job.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2013
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oh good! thx RR - yes, it's free verse, so not rhyming - but utilizes "slant rhyme" and assonance, plus rhythm ...
Comment from Phoenix Rising
Wow!
Wonderful imagery and passion dance through your verses. A terrific read and my pleasure to review. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Phoenix
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2013
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Wow!
Wonderful imagery and passion dance through your verses. A terrific read and my pleasure to review. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Phoenix
Comment Written 15-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2013
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lovely! thx so much PR - likewise! :)
Comment from me_tudor
Wow, this is really good. This was a fast paced read but it flowed very well. I loved all your uses of romantic words in such a quick succesion. Very well done.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2013
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Wow, this is really good. This was a fast paced read but it flowed very well. I loved all your uses of romantic words in such a quick succesion. Very well done.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2013
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thx so much!
Comment from elliejean
I love the poem. I love the picture. I love hip hugging dancing. It is so romantic. Go with the beat of the music. Just feel. Feel each others closeness. Great work.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2013
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I love the poem. I love the picture. I love hip hugging dancing. It is so romantic. Go with the beat of the music. Just feel. Feel each others closeness. Great work.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2013
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thx so much elliejean - I thought you'd get a kick out of this one!
