All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 41 "What More Could I Need?"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
9 total reviews
Comment from words
I love your write on the perfect day.
And, I do agree:
now, taste-buds tingle
with a mingling of cranberry goat cheese
a perfect buttery avocado
fresh picked from my kind neighbor's tree,
warm new bread, and
a glass of red ...
flavors laze and tease my tongue
as I lift pen to ruffled pad of yellow paper
in the last savored shaft of this day's light
glowing gold through my afternoon window
captive beam dances my words straight to God -
and
you
are
here
what more could I need, my love?
Yes, what more could you need.
Hugs d
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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I love your write on the perfect day.
And, I do agree:
now, taste-buds tingle
with a mingling of cranberry goat cheese
a perfect buttery avocado
fresh picked from my kind neighbor's tree,
warm new bread, and
a glass of red ...
flavors laze and tease my tongue
as I lift pen to ruffled pad of yellow paper
in the last savored shaft of this day's light
glowing gold through my afternoon window
captive beam dances my words straight to God -
and
you
are
here
what more could I need, my love?
Yes, what more could you need.
Hugs d
Comment Written 11-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2013
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wow, d. that's so sweet of you to go back to my portfolio and find this one. I actually loved it, but never promoted it. It was for a competition, so "blind" - never enough $$! I'm so glad you found this one! :))S
Comment from MAMONIA
Sounds like my kind of happy...cheese, wine and thee.
I guess there is nothing more I could ask for.
This flows very beautifully down the page and it is
very creative and artistic.
I love how the sweetness of your words sound so
very sincere.
What more can one ask for?
I doubt there is more to make one happy.
Good luck to you.
Marie
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2013
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Sounds like my kind of happy...cheese, wine and thee.
I guess there is nothing more I could ask for.
This flows very beautifully down the page and it is
very creative and artistic.
I love how the sweetness of your words sound so
very sincere.
What more can one ask for?
I doubt there is more to make one happy.
Good luck to you.
Marie
Comment Written 08-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2013
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Thank you Marie - those golden afternoons are pretty hard to beat!
Comment from Patricia1
Nice job! I'm not familiar with this style but the way it flowed spoke to me and I felt their was an expression of love and appreciation for what was right in this woman's present surroundings and she needed no more. I enjoyed it a lot. Lovely photo as well.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2013
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Nice job! I'm not familiar with this style but the way it flowed spoke to me and I felt their was an expression of love and appreciation for what was right in this woman's present surroundings and she needed no more. I enjoyed it a lot. Lovely photo as well.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2013
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Thank you Patricia - this is simply free verse, with a lot of alliteration and internal rhyming, and is written to be performed/ read aloud. I'm so glad you enjoyed it! :)
Comment from RYME4U
This is well done. The free verse flows well and the imagery is great. You describe a case of "perfect' happiness here...even the chair. Great job!
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2013
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This is well done. The free verse flows well and the imagery is great. You describe a case of "perfect' happiness here...even the chair. Great job!
Comment Written 08-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2013
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thx so much my dear!
Comment from elliejean
I love the picture. I love the poem. A easy chair and a fresh picked snack. Addd a sweet wine and a loved one. Makes perfect happiness. Great work.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2013
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I love the picture. I love the poem. A easy chair and a fresh picked snack. Addd a sweet wine and a loved one. Makes perfect happiness. Great work.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2013
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thx so much elliejean!
Comment from LaDonnaCole
They don't make chairs like this anymore
embracing me in sunlight
softly, sinking down
sighing as day's frowns subside
Gorgeous!
Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2013
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They don't make chairs like this anymore
embracing me in sunlight
softly, sinking down
sighing as day's frowns subside
Gorgeous!
Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 08-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2013
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Thank you so much my dear!
Comment from C Hope
I found this to be a very elegant and peaceful write. Nice imagery throughout, as you end correctly, what more does one need? Enjoyed! Smiles, Charlotte
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2013
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I found this to be a very elegant and peaceful write. Nice imagery throughout, as you end correctly, what more does one need? Enjoyed! Smiles, Charlotte
Comment Written 07-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2013
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thx Charlotte!
Comment from kcross11
Definitely a happy poem. I read it, and it made me feel warm. The combination of red and bread was really good to read, and the image of avocados and cranberry goat cheese, for some reason, was colorful.
Thank you- this was a fun read.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2013
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Definitely a happy poem. I read it, and it made me feel warm. The combination of red and bread was really good to read, and the image of avocados and cranberry goat cheese, for some reason, was colorful.
Thank you- this was a fun read.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2013
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Thank you k!
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this happy poem about being surrounded in softness and the last light of day. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2013
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this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this happy poem about being surrounded in softness and the last light of day. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 07-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2013
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thx sweets! :)
