Out of My Shell
I'm Coming...41 total reviews
Comment from ephraim crud, COS.
arrrgh, this bloody stupid thirty day rule for sixes
is bloody ridiculous! this soooo deserves one, Phillippa.
sorry!
i love it -it had me smiling from the off with your
wonderful word choice, and were not, as sure as eggs
is eggs, disappointed come the end. exceptional, me dear!
thank you for this ephin' masterclass in verse.
luv n hugz, xxx, ephin' ephy.
p.s- i wonder if i might ask a favour, Phillippa.
i'd very much appreciate your opinion on one of me
works, 'a conflict of words'. it's quite a departure
from me norm and's rather gruesome, dealing mainly with
some of the horrors me dad faced during WW2. i would be
most grateful and indebted to you if you would be so
kind. though, alas, it's longish and's now at 2 cents
-sorry!
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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arrrgh, this bloody stupid thirty day rule for sixes
is bloody ridiculous! this soooo deserves one, Phillippa.
sorry!
i love it -it had me smiling from the off with your
wonderful word choice, and were not, as sure as eggs
is eggs, disappointed come the end. exceptional, me dear!
thank you for this ephin' masterclass in verse.
luv n hugz, xxx, ephin' ephy.
p.s- i wonder if i might ask a favour, Phillippa.
i'd very much appreciate your opinion on one of me
works, 'a conflict of words'. it's quite a departure
from me norm and's rather gruesome, dealing mainly with
some of the horrors me dad faced during WW2. i would be
most grateful and indebted to you if you would be so
kind. though, alas, it's longish and's now at 2 cents
-sorry!
Comment Written 07-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Arrrgh I can't have a sixer every time...now don't be afraid to sling me a four if its a bit shitty okay? LOL
Now...you have a conflict, of words you say? Oh you want me to read your poem, Conflict of Words...
Departure you say...oooh lovely, not that I am in any way sick of your unique stuffs mate...just very busy at the mo and not time for many reviews...however got some time tonight and I promise I drop in soon and see you.
Cheers P
x
PS don't worry about the ephing 2c...you know that doesn't matter to me and I'll give you at least 20c worth! haha X
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i'd give a four if it deserved, don't worry!
and thank you in advance for your time to review me 'conflict'.
luv n hugz, xxx, ephin eph.
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Oh I EPHING know you would.
I just
don't write
four stuff!
hahahaha
well not in my op! LMAO
xxxxx
Comment from Joy Graham
Funny story! Tomorrow my hubby and I will go to Red Lobster for our anniversary dinner. We celebrate 30 years. Your poem was well timed :) My mouth watered at the lobster picture but we will be eating fresh lobster tomorrow.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Funny story! Tomorrow my hubby and I will go to Red Lobster for our anniversary dinner. We celebrate 30 years. Your poem was well timed :) My mouth watered at the lobster picture but we will be eating fresh lobster tomorrow.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Oh goodness, hope I didn't put you off! LOL
Thanks for a beaut review and be sure to have a lovely dinner.
Cheers and congrats on your anniversary, not sure which one that is...not Tin yet I hope! haha Kidding! Seriously though, have a great time.
P
Comment from Lovinia
Hi closet
At first I thought i was about to read about you with the crayfish as a metaphor. hahahahah! Well you do have association with the poor cray at least. OMG has that happened to me with crab .... though it is still my favorite crustacean. No memories of bad smells will turn me off!
A great tongue in cheek story in a poem ... and a bonus ... it is true. How could anyone forget the cray ... sacrilege!!! And what an assault on the poor cray's dignity! :)) Great rhyme and smooth bouncy flow. Great humor and pathos. I am pleased the cray did get his revenge .... serves you all right. :))
Excellent use of alliteration in "tasty treat", "made/meal", "shafted shell-fish", " ... so/soon/Started simmering", "celebration came", "them/that", great use of 't' alliteration and consonance in "this/the last time that". 'o' assonance in "so soon", "thought to look", "ooozing/boozing". Some great poetic techniques used to advantage. I enjoyed. Your usual, it-could-only-be-closet style. LOL Hugs - Lovi xoxo Sorry no sixes.
"Tangerine frustration" - just love it.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Hi closet
At first I thought i was about to read about you with the crayfish as a metaphor. hahahahah! Well you do have association with the poor cray at least. OMG has that happened to me with crab .... though it is still my favorite crustacean. No memories of bad smells will turn me off!
A great tongue in cheek story in a poem ... and a bonus ... it is true. How could anyone forget the cray ... sacrilege!!! And what an assault on the poor cray's dignity! :)) Great rhyme and smooth bouncy flow. Great humor and pathos. I am pleased the cray did get his revenge .... serves you all right. :))
Excellent use of alliteration in "tasty treat", "made/meal", "shafted shell-fish", " ... so/soon/Started simmering", "celebration came", "them/that", great use of 't' alliteration and consonance in "this/the last time that". 'o' assonance in "so soon", "thought to look", "ooozing/boozing". Some great poetic techniques used to advantage. I enjoyed. Your usual, it-could-only-be-closet style. LOL Hugs - Lovi xoxo Sorry no sixes.
"Tangerine frustration" - just love it.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Hey Lovi, thanks for the terriff review my friend.
Hope you are well...yes this is true and sorry you had a crab episode...not to be confused with "crabs" LMAO.
Loved your review my Aussie sister and hope things are good for you at the mo. I am very busy but have a bit of time at FS. Way too much poetry to write but too many other priorities I'm afraid.
Cheers P
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for letting us know this is a true story--fortunately, I read it before bedtime and it did not spoil my salmon dinner--now, I'll just have crayfish nightmares! I enjoyed your speaking in the voice of the creature for immediacy. Your "tangerine frustration" is quite vivid and your whimsical circularity in these rhymed quatrains is appealing. Hugs- Joan
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Thank you for letting us know this is a true story--fortunately, I read it before bedtime and it did not spoil my salmon dinner--now, I'll just have crayfish nightmares! I enjoyed your speaking in the voice of the creature for immediacy. Your "tangerine frustration" is quite vivid and your whimsical circularity in these rhymed quatrains is appealing. Hugs- Joan
Comment Written 07-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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LOL Thanks Joan, glad you have eaten long before this mushy tail came a'callin.
Nighters!
X
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To sleep, perchance to be chased by rotting crayfish!! lol May the sweet cancel out the stinky dreams! -J
Comment from Connie C
How gross! Nothing like rotten crayfish to smell up the place. But, of course, with your very clever rhyme (I especially liked "crustacean" and "frustration") and with your use of personification (one of my favorite writing techniques), it makes it a most fun experience for all of us who get to read about it and don't have to smell it.
You know, Phillippa, I always look forward to your poems--one just never knows what to expect. By the way, what a cute picture of Tahlia (hope I got the spelling right). She looks like a handful with that big grin and those closed eyes--gotta keep Mum on the move.
So good to see another poem from one my favorites.
Love ya,
Connie xoxoxo
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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How gross! Nothing like rotten crayfish to smell up the place. But, of course, with your very clever rhyme (I especially liked "crustacean" and "frustration") and with your use of personification (one of my favorite writing techniques), it makes it a most fun experience for all of us who get to read about it and don't have to smell it.
You know, Phillippa, I always look forward to your poems--one just never knows what to expect. By the way, what a cute picture of Tahlia (hope I got the spelling right). She looks like a handful with that big grin and those closed eyes--gotta keep Mum on the move.
So good to see another poem from one my favorites.
Love ya,
Connie xoxoxo
Comment Written 06-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Connie darling thanks for a beautiful review and I love that you love the personification thingy...me too.
This experience recalled now is kinda funny for me but at the time the stench was f**king crazy.
I have a couple of other tales about "smells"...another absolute beauty I'll save for another time...suffice to say this was quite possibly the worst thing I have EVER smelled in my life.
Shit...I'm inspired already...
I promise I'll dedicate the next stench to you honey! LMAO
Hugs to Bill. Tell him I did shower after the clean up! *snicker*
Love you girl,
Phillippa
xoxoxo
PS yes she is a darling...but christ what a handful...its BAD!
Thats why i am not here at the mo...she's killing me...
I have sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo many writes coming about this kid.
Later, gotta run...hun...xxxxxxxxxxxx thanks again.
Comment from Frankeddy
Boy oh boy you are just rolling them off now. This one paints it's own picture.
The night is good for the laughter your poems create, our winter must be half
over.Keep the balls rolling and the crawfish rotting. Very good, enjoyed.
Frankeddy
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Boy oh boy you are just rolling them off now. This one paints it's own picture.
The night is good for the laughter your poems create, our winter must be half
over.Keep the balls rolling and the crawfish rotting. Very good, enjoyed.
Frankeddy
Comment Written 06-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Adorable review thanks Ed. Always appreciate a sixer too.
Hugs to Marg.
Cheers P
xoxo
Comment from mroberts
This was rank but lovely. I have a soft spot and a frequent craving for crustaceans so I am quite ethically compromised in this realm. The voice of your creature is almost Christ-like in his willingness to be sacrificed for human consumption. The poem rolls like a blues number but reminds me of the tearfulness of The Walrus and the Carpenter, only in reverse!
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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This was rank but lovely. I have a soft spot and a frequent craving for crustaceans so I am quite ethically compromised in this realm. The voice of your creature is almost Christ-like in his willingness to be sacrificed for human consumption. The poem rolls like a blues number but reminds me of the tearfulness of The Walrus and the Carpenter, only in reverse!
Comment Written 06-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Haha...ethically compromised...I love that.
Thanks for a sterling review.
Much appreciated.
Cheers P
Comment from yonashalom
I was going to say just that. I hope no one was eating while reading this. Very nice poem and story. Good detail. I was just wondering if he was a crayfish or a lobster? We are known for our crawfish down here in Louisiana as we spell it. If you had a sack of those little mudbugs, you'd smell them fast. The orange description is really gross. LOL. Sounds like an expensive waste. I used to eat those but no longer. I eat a kosher diet. Now I get the title. Yuck! LOL :) ~Yona
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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I was going to say just that. I hope no one was eating while reading this. Very nice poem and story. Good detail. I was just wondering if he was a crayfish or a lobster? We are known for our crawfish down here in Louisiana as we spell it. If you had a sack of those little mudbugs, you'd smell them fast. The orange description is really gross. LOL. Sounds like an expensive waste. I used to eat those but no longer. I eat a kosher diet. Now I get the title. Yuck! LOL :) ~Yona
Comment Written 06-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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LOL Thanks for a delightful review.
Not sure about the pic but I think they are much the same...yes crawfish were listed when I looked up crayfish.
Much appreciate you stopping by.
Cheers P
Comment from C Hope
LMAO!! Thank you so much for the laugh this poem gave me!! Too flippin funny. You did a fantastic job telling this memory from the crayfish's perspective. Loved every detail! Smiles, Charlotte
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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LMAO!! Thank you so much for the laugh this poem gave me!! Too flippin funny. You did a fantastic job telling this memory from the crayfish's perspective. Loved every detail! Smiles, Charlotte
Comment Written 06-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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LOL thanks for a sterling sixer review. Glad you enjoyed this stinky crustacean tail.
Cheers P
Comment from charlyann
You are one kooky poet, I love how you write, this was terrific, you've inspired just to take an everyday event from my daily life in the next little while and turn it into one of these, so good bud ")
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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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You are one kooky poet, I love how you write, this was terrific, you've inspired just to take an everyday event from my daily life in the next little while and turn it into one of these, so good bud ")
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Comment Written 06-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Yup, I know it...they tell me all the fucking time.
LOL
Many thanks, I don't write much fiction...I have to base my story on something.
I have about three fictional writes...the other 400 have some shred of truth there or an absolute bio...you get to guess.
Haha
Thanks again miss bartender.. (the pic) LOL
Cheers P
