Out of My Shell
I'm Coming...41 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
I read your author's notes first and I'm still laughing from them LOL
love that you've narrated the story poem from the point of view of the crayfish
good use of abcb rhyme
I love his attitude! LOL
great pairing of crustacean/frustration
good alliteration in bag a brewing
love the closing - this is absolutely hilarious :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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I read your author's notes first and I'm still laughing from them LOL
love that you've narrated the story poem from the point of view of the crayfish
good use of abcb rhyme
I love his attitude! LOL
great pairing of crustacean/frustration
good alliteration in bag a brewing
love the closing - this is absolutely hilarious :-) Brooke
Comment Written 07-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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LOL I keep thinking "do away with the f**king notes Phillippa" but I simply can't Brooke.
I end up writing most of the same subject just cover it differently...anyway thanks for enjoying mr off crayfish.
Boy was HE a stench? Yup.
Cheers and thanks for your review.
Phillippa xo
Comment from l.raven
LMAO!!!Oh Phillippa, You are so crazy. I just love ya. I can see it all now. A great poem all around. I can just imagine what that had to smell like. LOL You are truly a talented writer tuss. Love it!! Linda xx
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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LMAO!!!Oh Phillippa, You are so crazy. I just love ya. I can see it all now. A great poem all around. I can just imagine what that had to smell like. LOL You are truly a talented writer tuss. Love it!! Linda xx
Comment Written 07-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Thanks Linda, I appreciate your delightful review.
Hmmm tuss? What does that mean...if it means anything to do with compliment I'll take it! haha
loved your review girl...thanks a mill.
Cheers P
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wrong spelling. LMAO!!!
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So whats tuss?
Still confoosed.
LMAO
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Sweet heart!! you know !!LOL oh shit!!can't think how to spell the damn word. LOL
Comment from LaDonnaCole
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I will never forget my first impression of crayfish. South Louisiana gang dumped huge pot on the table and dove in with fingers and slurp. I thought I was eating with a bunch of Klingons!
So sorry you had this experience. Ugh. Live and learn right?
Thanks for putting this to a catchy rhythmic rhyme.
Nicely done.
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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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I will never forget my first impression of crayfish. South Louisiana gang dumped huge pot on the table and dove in with fingers and slurp. I thought I was eating with a bunch of Klingons!
So sorry you had this experience. Ugh. Live and learn right?
Thanks for putting this to a catchy rhythmic rhyme.
Nicely done.
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Comment Written 07-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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ick indeed
Thanks for the read
Comment from Titanx9
What a delightful read! The rhyming and cadence is perfectly synchronized. There's nothing like putrid fish in the house, because long after it makes its exist, the smell is still around. I like this one, great job!
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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What a delightful read! The rhyming and cadence is perfectly synchronized. There's nothing like putrid fish in the house, because long after it makes its exist, the smell is still around. I like this one, great job!
Comment Written 07-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Thanks so much Titan...indeed the putrid fish exists long after its dead.
Funny how it comes back to life again! hahaha
Beaut review. Many thanks
Cheers P
Comment from amada
This is so much fun! I laughed so hard at what you say in here. I think it could me a wonderful metaphor as well for a person who has been ignored, or forgot that he was waiting, outside, on the cold. Best wishes in your writings.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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This is so much fun! I laughed so hard at what you say in here. I think it could me a wonderful metaphor as well for a person who has been ignored, or forgot that he was waiting, outside, on the cold. Best wishes in your writings.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Thanks amada. Appreciate your kind words and yep, the title was a definite double play.
Cheers P
Comment from clbritch
This is such a wonderfully fun poem. It's great has you wrote this from the crayfish perspective. Your description are so good I can almost smell him. Really good rhyme and a nice picture choice.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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This is such a wonderfully fun poem. It's great has you wrote this from the crayfish perspective. Your description are so good I can almost smell him. Really good rhyme and a nice picture choice.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Thanks so much.
The fish really do need a voice...especially the "off" ones! Haha
Cheers P
Comment from mystery poet
Christmas dinner can get out of hand and I do
believe this one did just that. Your poem flows
beautifully and makes an easy read. You have
described how a crayfish would feel if he had
feelings and what he would say about all this.
Very fun reading and thank you!
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Christmas dinner can get out of hand and I do
believe this one did just that. Your poem flows
beautifully and makes an easy read. You have
described how a crayfish would feel if he had
feelings and what he would say about all this.
Very fun reading and thank you!
Comment Written 07-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Thanks so much and yes at least this one was memorable...just for all the wrong reasons.
Cheers and much appreciated.
P
Comment from Carrie Carson
Oooh, plastic can render all kinds of foods mush or worse.
Best line...my epiderm is oozing. No spag good form, I'm glad I cant' eat shell-fish after reading this.
:) Carrie
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Oooh, plastic can render all kinds of foods mush or worse.
Best line...my epiderm is oozing. No spag good form, I'm glad I cant' eat shell-fish after reading this.
:) Carrie
Comment Written 07-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Haha, thanks Carrie...glad you enjoyed.
Cheers P
Comment from Spiritual Echo
It's hard not to give you a six star response based on the sheer entertainment value of your poetry.
You have a new art form here, that actually, in my mind is highly saleable. It could convert many people from their aversion to the 'high-brow' content of so many poems that are technically correct, but rarely inspire.
yours always make me laugh.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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It's hard not to give you a six star response based on the sheer entertainment value of your poetry.
You have a new art form here, that actually, in my mind is highly saleable. It could convert many people from their aversion to the 'high-brow' content of so many poems that are technically correct, but rarely inspire.
yours always make me laugh.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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A sixer? Wow, thanks my friend. You seem to have a larger stash of these than others for I'm sure this is about the third one this week you've given me! LOL
Not sure this is a new form...just writin what I know. I can't do the fiction thing...I've tried and I can only really get imaginative with the spin on the shreds of truth. I mean I can extend those and bullshit a bit, but to start with complete bullshit, I just can't do.
So you'll know there is always SOME shred of truth in it somewhere. The complete fiction I can count on one hand.
I always love your reviews and to be honest when I read this one I know I've not bothered with exact rhyme and syllable count but I feel if you have the flow and punctuation right, you can end your lines anywhere...the story provides the entertainment, but I still need some kind of da DUM beat to it.
Thanks again my friend I really appreciate your encouragement.
Cheers P
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Phillipa, I have been reading you before your sabbatical and since. I really only work in prose, and rarely throw a six at a poet, but you are a linguistic artist.
I don't respond to all your posts but I enjoy most. ingrid.
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Well you are a champion my friend and I certainly appreciate your kindness and encouragement.
The power of words is absolutely amazing.
Be it positive or negative.
Thank so much.
X
Take care Ingrid.
Comment from justjo66
Very creative to write from the crayfish's point of
view. I really enjoyed this read. Your author's
notes also added to the pleasure. Oh, I bet that bag
did stink. Nice rhythm to your story...very well
done.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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Very creative to write from the crayfish's point of
view. I really enjoyed this read. Your author's
notes also added to the pleasure. Oh, I bet that bag
did stink. Nice rhythm to your story...very well
done.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2013
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many thanks for your thoughtful review and yes the bag reeked to high heaven! LMAO
Cheers P
