Velence time day
Love is a very ordinary words, but don't easy.3 total reviews
Comment from LoveLifeKnight
hmmmm interesting.....definitely original....tell me, im not sure, but i think that the point of some of the mixed up words is that what matters in love is genuine unedited emotion...
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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hmmmm interesting.....definitely original....tell me, im not sure, but i think that the point of some of the mixed up words is that what matters in love is genuine unedited emotion...
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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dear friends,
thank you.
Comment from angelmagnet
this is a love poem, but I'm not sure that it follows any wrong scheme, let alone a 575 format. I would love to have giving you more stars. The grammar is wrong and I didn't understand why the incorrect grammar was supposed to be an addition to the content of the whole poem.work on this, it's a good start
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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this is a love poem, but I'm not sure that it follows any wrong scheme, let alone a 575 format. I would love to have giving you more stars. The grammar is wrong and I didn't understand why the incorrect grammar was supposed to be an addition to the content of the whole poem.work on this, it's a good start
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Thanks for his comment.
Comment from FLutterodt
Interesting poem; though I do not know if there is an error with the first line 'Are you love me?' it does not seem to make any sense. The rest of the poem however is fine. It does not follow the line count of a tanka so again I am not sure how to rate this. I will rate it average and hope to return to read after you have made corrections if any
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Interesting poem; though I do not know if there is an error with the first line 'Are you love me?' it does not seem to make any sense. The rest of the poem however is fine. It does not follow the line count of a tanka so again I am not sure how to rate this. I will rate it average and hope to return to read after you have made corrections if any
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Dear friends,
thank you for his marble gift.
