All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "Not enough?"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from ebeta
I like this. There were a lot of jumbled words at the top, but that was part of the style.
it's hard to not feel bad about being more fortunate than others, but at the same time, we feel both powerless to do anything, or unwilling to do what we can.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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I like this. There were a lot of jumbled words at the top, but that was part of the style.
it's hard to not feel bad about being more fortunate than others, but at the same time, we feel both powerless to do anything, or unwilling to do what we can.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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thx ebeta - if you read the "jumbled words" as a continuous sentence of thought flow, they should make sense to you I think. :)Sharyn
Comment from clbritch
Wow and congratulations on the win. This is superb. Very strong message and imagery. Way to go making us think. Those that can help, should help! Fabulous picture ties in perfectly with your poem.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Wow and congratulations on the win. This is superb. Very strong message and imagery. Way to go making us think. Those that can help, should help! Fabulous picture ties in perfectly with your poem.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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thanks so much cl! :)Sharyn
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Sharyn
A fantastic entry for the contest and no doubt well deserving of its win. Congratulations. Poignant, evocative .... yes. So well expressed and courageous in admitting your own lack of connection to this individual and to the young children exploited. Something we all can identify with. Though I know you have stopped and helped before, and I know how much you care and empathize. It can seem so overwhelming as we now see it on our own streets, not just third world countries.
So much wealth spent on frivolity, wars and creating more wealth than on caring for our own human kind. A lack that we should all feel ... though only some take the time to notice...... and even less it appears as life moves on into an age of greed and self-promotion.
Brilliant presentation .... care for our homeless, hungry, disabled and dis-functional seems to have become a farse and to me this image represents that. Fabulous lay-out of your poem - gives poer to the highlighted words and message contained in your phone. Speaking out to create awareness is a worthy step towards making a difference.
Lovinia xoxoox
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Hi Sharyn
A fantastic entry for the contest and no doubt well deserving of its win. Congratulations. Poignant, evocative .... yes. So well expressed and courageous in admitting your own lack of connection to this individual and to the young children exploited. Something we all can identify with. Though I know you have stopped and helped before, and I know how much you care and empathize. It can seem so overwhelming as we now see it on our own streets, not just third world countries.
So much wealth spent on frivolity, wars and creating more wealth than on caring for our own human kind. A lack that we should all feel ... though only some take the time to notice...... and even less it appears as life moves on into an age of greed and self-promotion.
Brilliant presentation .... care for our homeless, hungry, disabled and dis-functional seems to have become a farse and to me this image represents that. Fabulous lay-out of your poem - gives poer to the highlighted words and message contained in your phone. Speaking out to create awareness is a worthy step towards making a difference.
Lovinia xoxoox
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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thx so much Lovinia! I know you share my feelings! :)Sharyn
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Hi Sharyn
Yes, we do think a lot about the same issues. Great work. Hugs - Lovinia xoxo
Comment from Cornetist
Your story is sad and poignant but well-told with powerful imagery and you leave me with only one thing to say...STOP, ALREADY!! Reach out to that poor person and, if nothing else, let them know that somebody SEES them! Sometines, that's all they need.
(Sorry for the preaching!)
Cornetist
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Your story is sad and poignant but well-told with powerful imagery and you leave me with only one thing to say...STOP, ALREADY!! Reach out to that poor person and, if nothing else, let them know that somebody SEES them! Sometines, that's all they need.
(Sorry for the preaching!)
Cornetist
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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That was rather the point of my poem dear! :)S
Comment from TonyD
Conflicting thoughts "enough" "not enough" is, I think typical of the sensitive heart as we see so much pain and suffering around us. Too much technology that allows us to disconnect. But, we must keep the connection and do not become indifferent to the needy.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Conflicting thoughts "enough" "not enough" is, I think typical of the sensitive heart as we see so much pain and suffering around us. Too much technology that allows us to disconnect. But, we must keep the connection and do not become indifferent to the needy.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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you have the picture exactly, Tony! :)Sharyn
Comment from Doc Holiday
At least you looked at him, turned your phone off and thought of him, and now you have even written a poem about him, but you're right....that's not enough!
So what are you intending to do the next time you see this boy? You pose this question to us in your write, but I throw it back to you as well. I have seen a man with a very similar look on his face.
I made the next move and I was glad that I did...he thanked me with a smile.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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At least you looked at him, turned your phone off and thought of him, and now you have even written a poem about him, but you're right....that's not enough!
So what are you intending to do the next time you see this boy? You pose this question to us in your write, but I throw it back to you as well. I have seen a man with a very similar look on his face.
I made the next move and I was glad that I did...he thanked me with a smile.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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thx Doc - I'll probably just give him money. :)S
Comment from Bobbi22
The differences between the haves and the have nots. I used to be one who would look the other way, stereo-typical thinking that if I gave the homeless anything they'd waste it on booze or cigarettes. I've changed. There are too many hungry people to just pass by. Your poem states the problem very well. Congratulations on the contest win.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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The differences between the haves and the have nots. I used to be one who would look the other way, stereo-typical thinking that if I gave the homeless anything they'd waste it on booze or cigarettes. I've changed. There are too many hungry people to just pass by. Your poem states the problem very well. Congratulations on the contest win.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Good for you RP! :)S
Comment from David Flynn
Wow, very colorful indeed. I love the honesty in it, yes your art is honest my dear and powerful. Thank you for sharing this jolting jaunt!
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Wow, very colorful indeed. I love the honesty in it, yes your art is honest my dear and powerful. Thank you for sharing this jolting jaunt!
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Thx so much David! :)Sharyn
Comment from Alan K Pease
I see a wonderful piece of art expressed on this poem of inequality - cold and dark - a dark side of you to write it so well. Congratulations on winning the contest. I spent two years working out of India. To me as a Westerner the poverty is expressed in a small children some crippled - begging at each street corner -was disheartening. There were so many to give to and I gave up. I also get angry as I walk by and prefer to donate to Feed Nova Scotia to feed my conscience.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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I see a wonderful piece of art expressed on this poem of inequality - cold and dark - a dark side of you to write it so well. Congratulations on winning the contest. I spent two years working out of India. To me as a Westerner the poverty is expressed in a small children some crippled - begging at each street corner -was disheartening. There were so many to give to and I gave up. I also get angry as I walk by and prefer to donate to Feed Nova Scotia to feed my conscience.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Thank you so much Alan. Difficult to know how to cope, isn't it!?
Comment from MM lives on :)
Wow.. I can for sure see why you won the contest visionary1234.. With your imagery and notes they really get the reader but the poem. Truly you did a magnificent job expressing. Great work and congrats.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Wow.. I can for sure see why you won the contest visionary1234.. With your imagery and notes they really get the reader but the poem. Truly you did a magnificent job expressing. Great work and congrats.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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thank you so much Christopher! :)Sharyn
