All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 39 "Through My Open Door"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Deniz22
You are a blithe spirit if ever there was one! Not that that is a bad thing! Your heart seems to be an open door and that's a good ting! Just remember to kick the bad guys out the back door, which I'm pretty sure you are quite capable of doing.
I really like this. You set the scene and invite us in.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013
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You are a blithe spirit if ever there was one! Not that that is a bad thing! Your heart seems to be an open door and that's a good ting! Just remember to kick the bad guys out the back door, which I'm pretty sure you are quite capable of doing.
I really like this. You set the scene and invite us in.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2013
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Thanks so much Deniz - I've been reading some Billy Collins lately - similar style - have you read any? I think you'd enjoy him!
:)S
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is very well written my friend and really beautiful brought to life with the imagery and feeling through out I enjoyed well done regards Jill
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This is very well written my friend and really beautiful brought to life with the imagery and feeling through out I enjoyed well done regards Jill
Comment Written 31-Jan-2013
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Thx so much Jill! :)Sharyn
Comment from fairy77
Wow! really enjoyable. It sounds so exotic and you and Holly represent LOL!I loved it and the description of furniture and trees. Well done Sharyn. Beth fairy77.
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Wow! really enjoyable. It sounds so exotic and you and Holly represent LOL!I loved it and the description of furniture and trees. Well done Sharyn. Beth fairy77.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2013
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Glad you enjoyed it, Beth - join me for coffee any time! I've been reading some of Billy Collins lately - have you read any of him? I think you'd enjoy! :)Sharyn
Comment from Robert Lee Brown
This is a beautiful free verse write, contest or not. You certainly have the reader with you on this early morning coffee drinking experience. Thank you for sharing, Your friend, Bob
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This is a beautiful free verse write, contest or not. You certainly have the reader with you on this early morning coffee drinking experience. Thank you for sharing, Your friend, Bob
Comment Written 31-Jan-2013
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Just a gentle easy write this morning, Bob. I've been reading some Billy Collins and he rubbed off on me! Glad you shared coffee with me, my dear! :)Sharyn
Comment from Opal H.
A poem aimed at generating great scene and amazing imagery as we read it - can't go wrong with it :). Great write and good luck in the contest!! :)
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A poem aimed at generating great scene and amazing imagery as we read it - can't go wrong with it :). Great write and good luck in the contest!! :)
Comment Written 30-Jan-2013
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thx Opal - a gentle little write - I've been reading some Billy Collins - have you read him? He rubbed off on me this morning for this one. :)Sharyn
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Oh, man! We're looking at a flash freeze tonight after a day of record breaking warm temperatures.
And here you are, teasing me with images of o.
Mmm, I can just see you there, enjoying your morning coffee, watching the birds.
Wonderful read, Sharyn.
Av
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Oh, man! We're looking at a flash freeze tonight after a day of record breaking warm temperatures.
And here you are, teasing me with images of o.
Mmm, I can just see you there, enjoying your morning coffee, watching the birds.
Wonderful read, Sharyn.
Av
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Comment Written 30-Jan-2013
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flash freeze? oh panic! flash freezes are only allowed in my FRIDGE Av! Glad you enjoyed being teased a little!
:)Sharyn
Comment from poesyapprentice
I love the rooster shepharding his harem! Awesome line in an easy chillin enjoying the day thankful to be here and alive with nature's beauty surrounding lovely write. NOW who needs comma, lol! Great imagery! Loved it!
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I love the rooster shepharding his harem! Awesome line in an easy chillin enjoying the day thankful to be here and alive with nature's beauty surrounding lovely write. NOW who needs comma, lol! Great imagery! Loved it!
Comment Written 30-Jan-2013
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Commas are such a waste of breath, poesy, right? he he he! :)Sharyn
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LOL! They sure are, girl! ; )xx
Comment from Walu Feral
Wow great work my friend. You captured it beautifully. I could see myself sitting there with you drinking my cup of over strength coffee in the morning. Well done. Cheers Fez.
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Wow great work my friend. You captured it beautifully. I could see myself sitting there with you drinking my cup of over strength coffee in the morning. Well done. Cheers Fez.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2013
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hey Fez - I figured you'd probably resonate with this one as your mornings are probably similar? :)Sharyn
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I usually get up at around 4am and watch what i call the changing of the shifts, cya to the nighttime creatures and G'day to the daytime ones. I am working on a poem as we speak on this very subject which i guess will be called the changing of the shifts or something along those lines, hehehehehe.
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oh good - I'll look forward to it, Fez. We get up at about 5.50 to do the school dash for my 16 year old - on the other side of the island, do you believe. So Jeff does the morning ride, and I do the afternoon pickup. It means they both leave early though, so I get to enjoy quiet mornings at home, which I appreciate! I've also been reading Billy Collins - have you come across him at all? Very readable free verse - I'm totally enjoying him! :)S
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Sounds beautiful out there. I haven't come across Billy Collins yet but i will check him out. I am still to chicken (buck buck) to write in free verse but I will give it a crack soon. There is only one way to learn i think, boots and all.
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well, Billy is an easy introduction - Charles Bukowski, too ... both introduced to me by Fanstorians. (I'm too busy to read most of the time!) :)
Comment from donaldww
I love the images you create this poem. A beautiful poem to wake up to, especially if you like roosters.
I like the frigid tumbleweed simile, but think you should keep it going to the end of the stanza. By that, I'm referring to the word 'fly' in the last line.
The tumbleweeds have rolled down the mountain, so my suggestion is to find a different word than fly keeps the rolling idea going.
Words like:
to flow
to stream
to trickle
to pour (already used with the coffee)
to sweep (already used with cold drafts)
etc.
Cheers,
DW
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I love the images you create this poem. A beautiful poem to wake up to, especially if you like roosters.
I like the frigid tumbleweed simile, but think you should keep it going to the end of the stanza. By that, I'm referring to the word 'fly' in the last line.
The tumbleweeds have rolled down the mountain, so my suggestion is to find a different word than fly keeps the rolling idea going.
Words like:
to flow
to stream
to trickle
to pour (already used with the coffee)
to sweep (already used with cold drafts)
etc.
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 30-Jan-2013
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I sleep straight through the roosters, thank goodness, DW! Thank you for that lovely six by the way! Hmmm ... you don't like tumbleweed flying, eh? How about - whistle, whisper, whirl, waft, swirl, huff, flurry, gust or puff? I rather like "waft" or "flurry" ... actually I rather like them all ... "swirl" too ... what's your vote, dear?
:)Sharyn
Comment from MizKat
Sharyn - This is another wonderful poem. It sounds beautiful in Hawaii. I had to check the spelling of it and found out it's part of the United States. Learn something every day. Kat
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Sharyn - This is another wonderful poem. It sounds beautiful in Hawaii. I had to check the spelling of it and found out it's part of the United States. Learn something every day. Kat
Comment Written 30-Jan-2013
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oh my goodness Kat, yes, we're the States' 50th state dear! No cold winters for us thank goodness!
Blessings to you, as always
:)Sharyn
