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Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Ghostly Winter Ball"Inspiration of Life from Photographs
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Comment from EMB
Ha! Okay, you're a pretty cool customer to throw in Hip Hop with the mention of fancy Balls. You also did a wonderful job with providing the sounds that one might hear while standing next to one of these frozen waterfalls. I never thought about it, but I guess you would hear echoes.
Nice job with this, my friend. :)
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2013
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Ha! Okay, you're a pretty cool customer to throw in Hip Hop with the mention of fancy Balls. You also did a wonderful job with providing the sounds that one might hear while standing next to one of these frozen waterfalls. I never thought about it, but I guess you would hear echoes.
Nice job with this, my friend. :)
Comment Written 29-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2013
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Thank you much Edward. I enjoyed you review.
Comment from yonashalom
I don't know much about Rondeau but this poem is an awesome piece about this gorgeous picture. I agree that it looks like a choir of ghosts. I imagine the sounds like a pipe organ from this picture. Echo off frozen walls is a great appeal to the senses.
Nice alliteration with merry music, hip hop, mad maestro and magic mood.
I'm not into ghosts and goblins and the like but you did a great job with this. :)
~Yona
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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I don't know much about Rondeau but this poem is an awesome piece about this gorgeous picture. I agree that it looks like a choir of ghosts. I imagine the sounds like a pipe organ from this picture. Echo off frozen walls is a great appeal to the senses.
Nice alliteration with merry music, hip hop, mad maestro and magic mood.
I'm not into ghosts and goblins and the like but you did a great job with this. :)
~Yona
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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Thank you Yona. I glad you liked my fantasy piece.
Comment from Thesis
I agree, the ice does look like a choir of ghosts. You've captured a good shot to inspire your poem.
I like the use of the water and the cold. It accentuates the chilling nature of the poem, providing a sense of mystery and chilling feel to the piece.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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I agree, the ice does look like a choir of ghosts. You've captured a good shot to inspire your poem.
I like the use of the water and the cold. It accentuates the chilling nature of the poem, providing a sense of mystery and chilling feel to the piece.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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Thank you Thesis.
Comment from dmt1967
This is a very good poem I like it very much I like the blue background and the picture the structure and format I like also thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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This is a very good poem I like it very much I like the blue background and the picture the structure and format I like also thank you for sharing
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much dmt1967.
1967 was a good year. It's the year I started my 44 year career.
Comment from Kasensei
This is really good.The way you've described the nature's beauty...i like "drawn by the merry music of the water's sound" i can almost imagine the pretty scene.Its kind of spooky though thinking about the ghosts.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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This is really good.The way you've described the nature's beauty...i like "drawn by the merry music of the water's sound" i can almost imagine the pretty scene.Its kind of spooky though thinking about the ghosts.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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Thank you Kasensei.
Comment from Bill Schott
The poem sounds great. I'm not certain of the rondeau adherence, and it is invisible to me anyway. I like that you caught this great shot. It definitely speaks to one to use its contrasting states to speak about life and nature.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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The poem sounds great. I'm not certain of the rondeau adherence, and it is invisible to me anyway. I like that you caught this great shot. It definitely speaks to one to use its contrasting states to speak about life and nature.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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Thanks you Bill. I appreciate your review.
Comment from Scribbler67
What a lovely poem this is, transforming your inspiration into a picture painted with words. The imagery is superb, capturing an atmosphere of ghostly goings-on, yet it is entertaining and amusing rather than an eerie.
I do have a few little niggles:-
L.2. This only has 11 syllables, and I also feel it could be more poetic. How about:-'Seeking resonance (as in those symphonic)halls.'
L.7.'...their (spectral)calls.' Again, I think, more poetic.
L.11'...the mad(maestro)installs...' Spelling.
A most enjoyable poem, with an infrequently encountered format, which only added to the reading pleasure.
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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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What a lovely poem this is, transforming your inspiration into a picture painted with words. The imagery is superb, capturing an atmosphere of ghostly goings-on, yet it is entertaining and amusing rather than an eerie.
I do have a few little niggles:-
L.2. This only has 11 syllables, and I also feel it could be more poetic. How about:-'Seeking resonance (as in those symphonic)halls.'
L.7.'...their (spectral)calls.' Again, I think, more poetic.
L.11'...the mad(maestro)installs...' Spelling.
A most enjoyable poem, with an infrequently encountered format, which only added to the reading pleasure.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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Thank you for the suggestions to improve my poem, Scribbler. I like them all and will implement them. I was struggling with L2, you really helped. Much appreciated.
Comment from terry drake
Oh you succeeded alright and a magnificent success it was with the rhythm well defined. Your rhyme scheme is in direct compliance yet so easily delivered it seems common place and beautiful. Congratulations on your efforts.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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Oh you succeeded alright and a magnificent success it was with the rhythm well defined. Your rhyme scheme is in direct compliance yet so easily delivered it seems common place and beautiful. Congratulations on your efforts.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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Thank you Terry, I appreciate the encouragement.
Comment from PoeticXscape
Comparing winter to ghosts is a brilliant move. Both are cold, quiet and sad. The rhytm worked well also in this great piece. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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Comparing winter to ghosts is a brilliant move. Both are cold, quiet and sad. The rhytm worked well also in this great piece. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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Thank you, PoeticXscape.
Comment from sunnilicious
Good poem. Vivid imagery created. Nice flow of rhythm and rhymes. Excellent work.
I appreciated the author notes too. Good choice of artwork.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Good poem. Vivid imagery created. Nice flow of rhythm and rhymes. Excellent work.
I appreciated the author notes too. Good choice of artwork.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Thank you sunnilicious. Thank for the visit.
