All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Just for Me"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from GWHARGIS
This was a fun one to read. I read it to myself the first time, then when I saw your notes I re read it aloud and you were right. The extremes you mention were wonderful. All that when a chocolate bar would probably do. LOL. Wonderful description and emotion. Nice job.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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This was a fun one to read. I read it to myself the first time, then when I saw your notes I re read it aloud and you were right. The extremes you mention were wonderful. All that when a chocolate bar would probably do. LOL. Wonderful description and emotion. Nice job.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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thx so very much, GW! You've definitely made my morning even sweeter (if that's possible) with your yummy chocolate overload SIX!
blessings,
Sharyn
Comment from Righteous Riter
This is a beautiful piece. This piece grabbed my attention and my attention is escalated as the piece goes on. The words used are spectacular and bring the photo to life. From beginning to end this is flat out good. Good work.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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This is a beautiful piece. This piece grabbed my attention and my attention is escalated as the piece goes on. The words used are spectacular and bring the photo to life. From beginning to end this is flat out good. Good work.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Thx so much RR - I had fun with this one.
:)Sharyn
Comment from Rondeno
Hi, Sharyn!
This is a Valentine on acid! You have crammed your poem with so many sensory delights, it's just plain gorgeous! Well done.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Hi, Sharyn!
This is a Valentine on acid! You have crammed your poem with so many sensory delights, it's just plain gorgeous! Well done.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Valentine on acid? ABSOLUTELY! THX MICHAEL!
:)sharyn
Comment from Deniz22
I gained 10 unneeded pounds just by reading it. I hope your hubby doesn't read and say something like, "I 'll settle for you just getting off FS and doing the dishes." That would be a mood killer, even the delicious one that you have so artfully drawn here. You are a terrific writer ... now pass the chocolate!
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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I gained 10 unneeded pounds just by reading it. I hope your hubby doesn't read and say something like, "I 'll settle for you just getting off FS and doing the dishes." That would be a mood killer, even the delicious one that you have so artfully drawn here. You are a terrific writer ... now pass the chocolate!
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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dark, white or milk?
And if he did that, I'd pull HIS chocolate privileges PERMANENTLY! GRRRR!
Bless you for your lovely chocolate six, Deniz - what a lovely way to start my Sunday!
:)Sharyn
Comment from misscookie
You had my attention all the way
and made my mouth water.
This is a cute yummy poem
I found it to be a delight to read.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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You had my attention all the way
and made my mouth water.
This is a cute yummy poem
I found it to be a delight to read.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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thx for enjoying my chocolate feast misscookie!
:)Sharyn
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Your very welcome, until next time.
Comment from justatuna
I really enjoyed this, Sharn. I agree...the things we're willing to do. I often wonder why. I find real value in these questions and in your work. You never cease to amaze me with your imagination and talent. To take such a simple thing and make it so wonderful. Your poems are always like movies to me. I learn from them and appreciate them. Be good. I've heard of Tarzania. Heard it's nice.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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I really enjoyed this, Sharn. I agree...the things we're willing to do. I often wonder why. I find real value in these questions and in your work. You never cease to amaze me with your imagination and talent. To take such a simple thing and make it so wonderful. Your poems are always like movies to me. I learn from them and appreciate them. Be good. I've heard of Tarzania. Heard it's nice.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Bless you, Rob! :)Sharyn
Comment from Earl of Oxford
Hi, Sharyn.
Great fun alliterated 1st line - 'Tarzania' LOL.
Excellent 'v' alliteration to end.
In between, you create many vivid images which is proof an an excellent poet, and conjure them with imaginative metaphors and romance.
I haven't a swet tooth and never even think of chocolate, but if it's put in front of me, I'll eat it. :-)
This HAS to be worth my 'sixer' for all the wonderful poetic devices you master.
Best wishes, Ray
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Hi, Sharyn.
Great fun alliterated 1st line - 'Tarzania' LOL.
Excellent 'v' alliteration to end.
In between, you create many vivid images which is proof an an excellent poet, and conjure them with imaginative metaphors and romance.
I haven't a swet tooth and never even think of chocolate, but if it's put in front of me, I'll eat it. :-)
This HAS to be worth my 'sixer' for all the wonderful poetic devices you master.
Best wishes, Ray
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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Wow, Ray, you scrolled down the page with no complaint AND a magic SIX to boot. I'm in chocolate six heaven your Grace! Thank you so much for the lovely big one - er ... six ... :)Sharyn
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
This one is sure to move you up the rankings my dear. I laughed out loud -not a good thing at 4:30 am with guests upstairs- at your luscious sky antics and de-vine chocolate attainment. This was just a fun romp through your clever (and slightly naughty) wordy mind and a joy to read. Hope his gift fits well with yours. - Wendy
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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This one is sure to move you up the rankings my dear. I laughed out loud -not a good thing at 4:30 am with guests upstairs- at your luscious sky antics and de-vine chocolate attainment. This was just a fun romp through your clever (and slightly naughty) wordy mind and a joy to read. Hope his gift fits well with yours. - Wendy
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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aaah, glad the "slightly naughty" didn't escape you Wendy. Thank you so much!
:)Sharyn
Comment from paul O'Brien
"Trinitario cocoa beans from Tanzania create flavourful and wonderful chocolate! I LOVE single origin chocolate. I love it for its aromas and ..."
But cacao beans from Tarzania-- how exotic.
"to lick the sky
into pink and glowing submission
till it begs for laughing mercy
and cedes the finest
powdered, snowy sugar ...
just for you, my sweet:="
Goodness me a valentine double entendre.
"just
for
me"
Hmmmn
He's going to have to come up with good Valetine for you
Paul
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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"Trinitario cocoa beans from Tanzania create flavourful and wonderful chocolate! I LOVE single origin chocolate. I love it for its aromas and ..."
But cacao beans from Tarzania-- how exotic.
"to lick the sky
into pink and glowing submission
till it begs for laughing mercy
and cedes the finest
powdered, snowy sugar ...
just for you, my sweet:="
Goodness me a valentine double entendre.
"just
for
me"
Hmmmn
He's going to have to come up with good Valetine for you
Paul
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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He'd jolly well better, hadn't he? (Unfortunately he can't write legibly, and his spelling's even worse!) Glad ou got the double entendre you naughty man!
:)Sharyn
Comment from isurp
What a deliciously delightful poem! I love the Tarzania reference, and Yes, you must swing from vines. :) I also appreciated that the cream came from 'her most contented cows' Very fun and creative ending. ;p
Thanks for sharing this sweet poem. Write on! -Steve
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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What a deliciously delightful poem! I love the Tarzania reference, and Yes, you must swing from vines. :) I also appreciated that the cream came from 'her most contented cows' Very fun and creative ending. ;p
Thanks for sharing this sweet poem. Write on! -Steve
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
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thx so much, Steve - I had fun swinging on those vines! :)S
