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What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?

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Comment from 9999pool
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Yes, we will fly all around including the Arctic Polar to get the pure ice to melt into water for that sweet delight. Tanzania, Hawaii,and to the Queen to get the milk.
Oh yes, we need the freshest eggs too..and that have to be from Kentucky Fresh Farm where all the chicks are fresh (really freshest) and their fresh eggs are flown to the States. Now what else...oh, yes, we need the cream and that has to be from New Zealand where the dairy herd are famed for their fluffy cream, better than the Queen's herd (hush, don't tell her that or she will take away my Knighthood, bless me!).
Now that everything is ready, will the imaginary Valentine just pop out - oh, for this one we need to get her/him from the deep oceans - the fantastic durable and adorable Mermaid/Neptune from Bahamas.
Well, I am ready with this Valentine velvet carpet from Arabia.
Good write and so deliciously edible and brilliant - now waiting for my valentine!
Oh yes, we need to go get that MasterChef Kitchen from Down Under, I suppose, LOL.
Cheers, Ritchie.

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2013


reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
    absolutely, Ritchie - you've got the idea! New Zealand? isn't that just that tiny couple of islands off Australia? :)))))
reply by 9999pool on 27-Jan-2013
    New Zealand, the location for the Hollywood movie "The Ring" of the Hobbits. It's a green country with hot geysers and vast pasture land. Fernleaf brand butter and milk powder + prime cut beef, yummy2. Located to the right side of Down Under..Ritchiesszzky.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
    really? is THAT all? You know what kiwis call Australia, right? That little island off New Zealand ...
reply by 9999pool on 27-Jan-2013
    Haha...kiwis called them ozzy? Lol. Why they are at logger heads beats me. But with 400,000 Kiwis in Ozzzy land..it might turn out to be a big Rugby circus? Joke of course.
Comment from wordsareus
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This is a fantastic poem. It would have made a wonderful entry in the FanStory Valentine's Poetry Contest. I enjoy reading your work. I am going to send you a fan request.

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2013


reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
    and am delighted that you did so my dear - I've returned the favor! thank you so much!
    :)Sharyn
Comment from Soledadpaz
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Chocolate, the best aphrodisiac in the world. It is luscious and velvety as it lingers on your tongue. Your poem is chock-full of sensory experiences and images. I love the refrain of,"just for you, my sweet"

Sol

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2013


reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
    Thank you so much, Sol, for enjoying my lucious chocolate (help yourself!) and for your extra yummy SIX this morning!
    :)Sharyn
Comment from steevie
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Oh my, you have put much effort into this poetry. The words practically just right off the page. You have hit upon a topic that most would surely aagree with and espouse te virtues of delicious mouth watering chocolate. I will be purchasing some today.

Well done, Sharyn
smiles
steve

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2013


reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
    thx so much, steevie - glad you enjoyed my caloric overload! :)Sharyn
reply by steevie on 27-Jan-2013
    always a pleasure, Sharyn
    steve
Comment from Bryana
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This seems like awful lot for work for some
chocolate. I just take a trip to Switzerland,
they make the best chocolates in the world
and they don't even have cacao beans LOL
Your poem is very romantic, it seems you are
willing to do anything for your love.
I enjoyed your poem very much.

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2013


reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
    thx so much Bryana - all in good fun and yes! I'd LOVE to go to Switzerland on a chocolate sampling tour! :)Sharyn
Comment from c_lucas
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Nothing is too good for one's Valentine. This is a well written poem composed of global ingreadiants. Molded and sealed with love.

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2013


reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
    you bet, Charlie! :)Sharyn
reply by c_lucas on 27-Jan-2013
    You're welcome, Sharyn. Charlie
Comment from OLA THOMAS
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All this troubles 'Just for you' to get you ready 'just for me' I like the smooth drift in this work and the evenatual balance delivery. Good word combinations and the infusion of gerund - ing.

ola thoams

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2013


reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
    thx so much, Ola! :)Sharyn
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
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Hello my friend this is very well written I enjoyed this journey full of sweetness and love I am ill at this time but will be back to be normal soon writing and reviewing well done on this write regards Jill

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2013


reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
    thx so much, Jill. Are you okay? I've noticed you've not been posting or reviewing much, but I also note that you must be facing some difficult personal challenges? I'm sending good thoughts your way - I can only begin to comprehend what your life has entailed.
    Best wishes
    Sharyn
reply by Mrs Happy Poet on 27-Jan-2013
    i am ill at the moment i will geth through ot i have an infected gall bladder which is rather painful so i cant sit up for long have to have lots of rest waiting to have a scan regards jill
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
    ouch!! raw beets, Jill, in smoothies! My husband occasionally has gall bladder twinges and beets are one of the best gall bladder de-toxes.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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What a tasty delicious poem you've written, and all for love! Now that is amazing! Don't know if I could willingly pass all those lovely chocolate goodies to my hubby, he wouldn't appreciate them as much as I would! And the roses, ahh, such wonder in perfectly formed deep red roses, wonderful! All in all a deeply satisfying calorie laden read! xsx Sandra

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2013


reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
    Thx so much Sandra! :)S
Comment from GarthL
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I love chocolate Sharyn. Chocolate malted milkshakes, I put drinking chocolate in my coffee and I'm happy to indulge in some Lindt chocolates almost any time. I certainly lingered my way through you delicious 'Just for Me' and loved every bit, or bite!? Also when I'm in India the first thing I seek out every morning is some crushed sugar cane juice, what a way to start any day!!

Loved your AN about Tarzania, I wondered initially but understand perfectly now thank you. You have a wonderful sense of humor, must be the OZ in you!?

If I may ask a favor might you have a look at my Brooke inspired ABC called 'Race Well Run'? I think you'll find my hybridized gathering of ABCs quite interesting.

Also Brooke has lately confimed that I've developed a new style/form. I call it an Eleven77. Just today I've received poems from other poets here using it! That was exciting and validating!! My original is called 'Story-Telling'. If you try one please let me know.

Thanks for the very tasty read this evening creatively conceived and beautifully presented. Cheers!!!
LiveLove'n'Light, Garth

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2013


reply by the author on 27-Jan-2013
    thx Garth - will take a peek! :)))