All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Just for Me"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from cvcopac
I don't usually review the mushy ones but this one's a cut above. Unusual form: invented as you wrote (or after) I guess, but it works good and the imagination of the poem is good too and affects and stimulates all the senses; esp. sweet and thanks for the protein. Best of luck in the contest. cvc
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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I don't usually review the mushy ones but this one's a cut above. Unusual form: invented as you wrote (or after) I guess, but it works good and the imagination of the poem is good too and affects and stimulates all the senses; esp. sweet and thanks for the protein. Best of luck in the contest. cvc
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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"mushy" only works if it's chocolate based dear - and I agree wholeheartedly (I don't do "mushy" either).
Best wishes
Sharyn
Comment from Galactia
beautiful written free cerse for vallentines day.
Loved the lines...
cacao and cream and speckled sugar all assembled
I'll find my warm brown freckled eggs with yolks of marigold suns
favourite stanza...
scarlet feathered flowers
set a-flame
at sunset
to lick the sky
into pink and glowing submission
till it begs for laughing mercy
and cedes the finest
powdered, snowy sugar ...
just for you, my sweet
great job
regards
tia
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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beautiful written free cerse for vallentines day.
Loved the lines...
cacao and cream and speckled sugar all assembled
I'll find my warm brown freckled eggs with yolks of marigold suns
favourite stanza...
scarlet feathered flowers
set a-flame
at sunset
to lick the sky
into pink and glowing submission
till it begs for laughing mercy
and cedes the finest
powdered, snowy sugar ...
just for you, my sweet
great job
regards
tia
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much Tia! :)Sharyn
Comment from kiwisteveh
No six to give you, I'm afraid and yes, I could have picked this a syours without seeing your name on it.
Some delicious tongue in cheek humour here, too - I can just see all the Queens' cows plopping all over the manicured lawns.... or does each one have a royal footman (tailman?) with a personalised pooper-scooper?
Love it.
Steve
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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No six to give you, I'm afraid and yes, I could have picked this a syours without seeing your name on it.
Some delicious tongue in cheek humour here, too - I can just see all the Queens' cows plopping all over the manicured lawns.... or does each one have a royal footman (tailman?) with a personalised pooper-scooper?
Love it.
Steve
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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Well of course you could dear - we both have pretty distinctive styles, hmm? The queen's cows don't poop! Didn't I tell you that? (special breed she gets - imported all the way from Tarzania!) :)))S
Comment from honeytree
The art work is great and the words written so well for
" The Valentines Poetry Contest"
I love the color combination and the many words written
To make this the best "Valentines Day."
Honey tree
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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The art work is great and the words written so well for
" The Valentines Poetry Contest"
I love the color combination and the many words written
To make this the best "Valentines Day."
Honey tree
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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Bless you big-time for enjoying this one Honeytree, and for that LOVELY MAGIC SIX!!!
Many thanks!
Sharyn
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I am glad you liked the review.
I enjoyed reading the words very much.
Annie
Comment from fayesh
Your free verse is a hyperbole of feats that a lover would try to please the palate and win his Love for Valentine's Day. His acquisitions, though exaggerated, may well win a woman's heart if she is willing to accept the poetry of the words.
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Your free verse is a hyperbole of feats that a lover would try to please the palate and win his Love for Valentine's Day. His acquisitions, though exaggerated, may well win a woman's heart if she is willing to accept the poetry of the words.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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exaggerated? moi? :)Sharyn
Comment from gazzagodbod
oo hadnt heard about the queens legendary dairy cows i wonder if she milks them herself beautifully presented sumptuous poem my friend xxgazzaxx
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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oo hadnt heard about the queens legendary dairy cows i wonder if she milks them herself beautifully presented sumptuous poem my friend xxgazzaxx
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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She dresses up specially in her milkmaid's outfit, didn't you know? thx gazza! :)Sharyn
Comment from adewpearl
love the alliteration and descriptive detail of jitterbug jungles of torrid Tarzania
Wonderfully creative and fun examples of hyperbole in this declaration of the things this speaker would do for her love
Scrumptious detail in this wonderful Valentine's Day poem - good luck in the contest with a fanciful and exuberant entry :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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love the alliteration and descriptive detail of jitterbug jungles of torrid Tarzania
Wonderfully creative and fun examples of hyperbole in this declaration of the things this speaker would do for her love
Scrumptious detail in this wonderful Valentine's Day poem - good luck in the contest with a fanciful and exuberant entry :-) Brooke
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
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hyperbole? ya think? thx Brooke - glad you dropped by for a little chocolate! :)Sharyn
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
LOL! LOve the ending... You do all that for him so that he will make good love to you. Win-win, I'd say! LOL! I love your descriptions... you're reeealllly good at that. :)
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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LOL! LOve the ending... You do all that for him so that he will make good love to you. Win-win, I'd say! LOL! I love your descriptions... you're reeealllly good at that. :)
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
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Thank you Phyllis - it's all those endorphins in chocolate!! Grrr! :))) Sharyn
Comment from rjuselius
any poem about chocolate is a treat:)
valentine's just around the corner but in finland we don't celebrate valentine's day for lovers but friends instead.
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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any poem about chocolate is a treat:)
valentine's just around the corner but in finland we don't celebrate valentine's day for lovers but friends instead.
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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thx Rebekka! :)S
Comment from AprilShower
Wow! This took some thought to up with a valentine like this one. All that work hopefully will get you the prize. I liked it, Visionary, but it will make a pretty big valentine. I sure.
April
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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Wow! This took some thought to up with a valentine like this one. All that work hopefully will get you the prize. I liked it, Visionary, but it will make a pretty big valentine. I sure.
April
Comment Written 27-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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Thx so much April! :)S
