All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Just for Me"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Gregory K Shipman
Oh Me!... Oh My!... oh me and my. What an absolutely delicious poem... absolutely delicious. I did read it aloud (with no one around) and the taste was absolutely delightful. There is so much imagery that one becomes overwhelmed... so descriptive, so wonderful... simply marvelous, my dear... simply marvelous... I love it.
And the ultimate was the refrain of 'just for you'... the building of the valentine gift... and then the luscious climax (sorry) of 'just for me'
so good, so great, so incredible
greg
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Oh Me!... Oh My!... oh me and my. What an absolutely delicious poem... absolutely delicious. I did read it aloud (with no one around) and the taste was absolutely delightful. There is so much imagery that one becomes overwhelmed... so descriptive, so wonderful... simply marvelous, my dear... simply marvelous... I love it.
And the ultimate was the refrain of 'just for you'... the building of the valentine gift... and then the luscious climax (sorry) of 'just for me'
so good, so great, so incredible
greg
Comment Written 04-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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oh good! I was hoping you'd get to this one! could you tell that I had fun?
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Oh Yes... I could tell you had fun... as I did reading you having fun!
Comment from RominaItalia
A wonderful piece. Thank you for a wonderful trip :) You carry the reader eagerly on to the next line and next line and next line. And now, I want desert! :) Great imagery and flow! Love it.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013
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A wonderful piece. Thank you for a wonderful trip :) You carry the reader eagerly on to the next line and next line and next line. And now, I want desert! :) Great imagery and flow! Love it.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013
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Ciao! :)Sharyn
Comment from Imn2writingstories
That is wonderful and well writen as a poem and even though it kind of floats all over the place as you wanted it to this was very good to me I like the words and the way you laid it out.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2013
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That is wonderful and well writen as a poem and even though it kind of floats all over the place as you wanted it to this was very good to me I like the words and the way you laid it out.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2013
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thx so much stories! :)S
Comment from MumEsGirl
this is a truly romantic work. One feels however that the love of chocolate in all its forms is more appealing that carnal love. It is certainly more enduring.
Thank you for sharing this fun work
hugs
kate
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2013
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this is a truly romantic work. One feels however that the love of chocolate in all its forms is more appealing that carnal love. It is certainly more enduring.
Thank you for sharing this fun work
hugs
kate
Comment Written 29-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2013
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chocolate better than sex? shame on you kate!! :)))))
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I did read it aloud, Sharyn and so
enjoyed it - such a delicious poem...
but what a busy time for you, my friend.
Most impressive.
Margaret
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2013
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I did read it aloud, Sharyn and so
enjoyed it - such a delicious poem...
but what a busy time for you, my friend.
Most impressive.
Margaret
Comment Written 29-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2013
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lucky I like to travel, hmm? thx Margaret! :)Sharyn
Comment from l.raven
HI Sharyn, LOL!!! Not sure where it is at. But I will be glad to go with you. Help make that chocolate. Sounds great. Love you poem, Has a good smooth chocolate taste to it. LOL Linda xx
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2013
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HI Sharyn, LOL!!! Not sure where it is at. But I will be glad to go with you. Help make that chocolate. Sounds great. Love you poem, Has a good smooth chocolate taste to it. LOL Linda xx
Comment Written 29-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2013
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thx Linda! :)Sharyn
Comment from marion
Hi there
How can one not give this delightful love story (poem) a six star review! I hung onto every word - twice. It's original, its funny/cute/clever and well-presented. And I love this - red-black-red dew-dropped roses. A classic, in fact, I love it all. Good luck in the contest. Marion.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2013
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Hi there
How can one not give this delightful love story (poem) a six star review! I hung onto every word - twice. It's original, its funny/cute/clever and well-presented. And I love this - red-black-red dew-dropped roses. A classic, in fact, I love it all. Good luck in the contest. Marion.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2013
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Glad you did the whirlwind chocoloholic tour with me Marion - and a special thank you for that lovely SIX! :)SHARYN
ps: I nearly went to NZ's cows, but thought the queen had a little more cloud! :)))
Comment from Alan K Pease
Tarzania is in East Africa and I assume your source of cocoa beans. Blending is with sugar from Hawaii and clotted cream from the Queens dairy herd is ostentatious, but what the hell. Its for Valentine's day. A good reason for traveling around the world gathering love for loves sake. Thanks for the trip and tip.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2013
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Tarzania is in East Africa and I assume your source of cocoa beans. Blending is with sugar from Hawaii and clotted cream from the Queens dairy herd is ostentatious, but what the hell. Its for Valentine's day. A good reason for traveling around the world gathering love for loves sake. Thanks for the trip and tip.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2013
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Thank you SO much for being a discerning world traveler with me AK! And a special big THANK YOU for that LOVELY SIX!!
:)SHARYN
Comment from Taffspride
Just wonderful alliteration in this well written expressive poem.
The way you write has appealed to all five senses. I can see the red flowers, and hear the herd munching the lush green grass, feel the soft velvet valentine swirls, feel the soft powdered sugar. Most of all smell that delicious sensuous chocolate aroma.
Thank you for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
Iechyd da
Ann
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2013
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Just wonderful alliteration in this well written expressive poem.
The way you write has appealed to all five senses. I can see the red flowers, and hear the herd munching the lush green grass, feel the soft velvet valentine swirls, feel the soft powdered sugar. Most of all smell that delicious sensuous chocolate aroma.
Thank you for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
Iechyd da
Ann
Comment Written 29-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much, Ann - and congrats to YOU for your wonderful Tanka win!
:)Sharyn
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You are so Welcome Sharon. and than YOU. I am still in shock. I never expected it.
Iechyd da
Ann
Comment from prayingpoet
Yummy! I could taste the wonderful sweetness of the sugar and chocolate, I could feel the wind beneath my wings traveling to see the Queen... Great word pictures, well written, a "good read" for all year long, not just for the Valentine velvet day!
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2013
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Yummy! I could taste the wonderful sweetness of the sugar and chocolate, I could feel the wind beneath my wings traveling to see the Queen... Great word pictures, well written, a "good read" for all year long, not just for the Valentine velvet day!
Comment Written 29-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2013
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thx so much pp! :) Sharyn
