Forgotten Thoughts
Sometimes They Come Back103 total reviews
Comment from terry drake
Marvelous, this will surely draw attention as an example of how to use verse structure to create rhythm to enhance your rhymes and maintain your central theme.
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Marvelous, this will surely draw attention as an example of how to use verse structure to create rhythm to enhance your rhymes and maintain your central theme.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Thank you my friend,
I believe this style is already an established pattern, unlike the Vers Beaucoup style, which I created here at the site, but I sincerely appreciate your comments.
Curt
Comment from c_lucas
Sometimes it takes courage to face the fears of yesterdays. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very solid read.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Sometimes it takes courage to face the fears of yesterdays. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very solid read.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Thanks friend.
I agree, it takes courage to face that which comes unbidden to the forefront of consciousness, and even more courage to do something about them.
I appreciate your time and comments,
Curt
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You're welcome, Curt. Charlie
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your well-written, thought-provoking poem powerfully--and perfectly--describes how bad memories come to take over one's mind, one tiny stream at the time. Excellent
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Your well-written, thought-provoking poem powerfully--and perfectly--describes how bad memories come to take over one's mind, one tiny stream at the time. Excellent
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Thank you for your time and thoughts my friend, they are appreciated very much.
Curt
Comment from words
I can relate to your write on forgotten thoughts.
I especially liked your first stanza:
Forgotten thoughts resurface like the dim light of the stars
seeping from the wounds that sit on shelves in broken jars
never to be mended in the tattered threads perceived
knotted in the fabric of the falsehoods I believed
contained inside the cobalt tide that no one vessel keeps
what seems are dreams to some become the nightmares while I sleep.
I do,however, believe that we can be freed from these nightmare thoughts.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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I can relate to your write on forgotten thoughts.
I especially liked your first stanza:
Forgotten thoughts resurface like the dim light of the stars
seeping from the wounds that sit on shelves in broken jars
never to be mended in the tattered threads perceived
knotted in the fabric of the falsehoods I believed
contained inside the cobalt tide that no one vessel keeps
what seems are dreams to some become the nightmares while I sleep.
I do,however, believe that we can be freed from these nightmare thoughts.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Thanks so much for your kindest of thoughts on this write.
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Curt Mongold ....
Your first line in this attractively presented poem is one which should become a saying to be remembered and passed on ... "Forgotten thoughts re-surface like the dim light of the stars ..."
I also like "and used-up yesterdays" which is very descriptive. All round, this is a fine piece of writing which I enjoyed reading. Thank you for sharing it with us.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Hullo Curt Mongold ....
Your first line in this attractively presented poem is one which should become a saying to be remembered and passed on ... "Forgotten thoughts re-surface like the dim light of the stars ..."
I also like "and used-up yesterdays" which is very descriptive. All round, this is a fine piece of writing which I enjoyed reading. Thank you for sharing it with us.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Thank you, my adopted Aunt across the pond.
You are too kind with your rating, your stars shine brightly for me.
Always,
Curt
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, curt, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the thoughts that spout up from time to time interrupt our blissful thoughts. great imagery presented here.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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this is very well written, curt, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the thoughts that spout up from time to time interrupt our blissful thoughts. great imagery presented here.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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I appreciate your time, comments and generous stars my friend.
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I love this poem and I should give you a four but I have to forgive your count being off in the second, third and forth lines. I count thirteen not fourteen syllables. It is just a lovely poem and I have got to try one. It is an inspiration to me and evidence that you are a poet.
Your aabb rhyme is great. Well done. Nancy
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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I love this poem and I should give you a four but I have to forgive your count being off in the second, third and forth lines. I count thirteen not fourteen syllables. It is just a lovely poem and I have got to try one. It is an inspiration to me and evidence that you are a poet.
Your aabb rhyme is great. Well done. Nancy
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Thank you Nancy.
I'll have to look at that discrepancy, I swore I had the count right, but I will check and if it isn't correct, I will wither fix it or remove the comment from my notes.
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Not all memories are happy one we do try to hide them away store them in the back of our mind but they still resurface causing so much pain well done on this write regards Jill
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Not all memories are happy one we do try to hide them away store them in the back of our mind but they still resurface causing so much pain well done on this write regards Jill
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Thank you Jill, I truly appreciate your time and comments,
Curt
Comment from Shadow Pahn
Strong piece and beautiful wordplay, but i do have a question.
(I know little about the "rules" of poetry.) Is it supposed to be one sentence without capitalization whatsoever?
Why does the artist choose to leave those rules out?
Genuinely curious.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Strong piece and beautiful wordplay, but i do have a question.
(I know little about the "rules" of poetry.) Is it supposed to be one sentence without capitalization whatsoever?
Why does the artist choose to leave those rules out?
Genuinely curious.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Thank you for your comments my friend.
In poetry, there are as many "rules" as there are opinions. In formal writing, rules are adhered to strictly, but in poetry, some like punctuation while others see it as unnecessary. I chose no punctuation simply because I didn't feel that the lines needed them for the natural pauses you take at the end of some lines,while in others, the enjambment prevents their use. All in all, it is just an aesthetic for me not to use a lot of commas, and I truly hope this does not detract you from feeling the emotion in this write, which is what is paramount to me.
Thanks again,
Curt
Comment from Nebukadneser
Absolutely brilliant! No actually the other side of brilliant!
What a beautiful poem. This poem talks to the reader in so many ways giving us insight into the poets heart, conveying a profound lesson with a touch of wisdom.
Well done
you're a star
Cool bananas and warm regards
Nebukadneser
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Absolutely brilliant! No actually the other side of brilliant!
What a beautiful poem. This poem talks to the reader in so many ways giving us insight into the poets heart, conveying a profound lesson with a touch of wisdom.
Well done
you're a star
Cool bananas and warm regards
Nebukadneser
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Thank you my friend, your kindest of thoughts truly do humble me.
I am honored.
Curt
