Forgotten Thoughts
Sometimes They Come Back103 total reviews
Comment from visionary1234
Very interesting to follow your stream-of-consciousness thought processes here, Curt. Your poem is an auditory feast for anyone reading it aloud! Love the internal rhyming and the occasional assonance ("scars that last")- gutsy! occasionally verging on contrived ("into my mouth as I turn south") but you JUST managed to avoid being corny - whew! :)Sharyn
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Very interesting to follow your stream-of-consciousness thought processes here, Curt. Your poem is an auditory feast for anyone reading it aloud! Love the internal rhyming and the occasional assonance ("scars that last")- gutsy! occasionally verging on contrived ("into my mouth as I turn south") but you JUST managed to avoid being corny - whew! :)Sharyn
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Thanks Sharyn,
I try not to be corny in anything but my verbal skills. (lol)
I'm so glad you didn't think so of this piece, and appreciate your kind thoughts and generous stars.
Curt
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I appreciate the risks you took with this piece, Curt. You've ended up with a fine write ... but sooooooooooo close at times, it made me nervous! Well done!
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I DO push the envelope from time to time...:>)
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ya think?
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Mmmm...after conferring with my expert orator, who says, "Yes, every time you open your mouth," I have to abide by my original statement. :>)
Comment from IndianaIrish
We think we have past memories of our hurts and pains neatly sealed away, but they sure know how to escape without our help. They invade our daydreams and nightmares and each time it gets more difficult to put them back where they belong.
Great reading your work again, Curt.
Kar
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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We think we have past memories of our hurts and pains neatly sealed away, but they sure know how to escape without our help. They invade our daydreams and nightmares and each time it gets more difficult to put them back where they belong.
Great reading your work again, Curt.
Kar
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Thanks so much Indy,
I truly appreciate the fact that you like reading what I scribble down, it makes the arduous chore (yeah, right!)tolerable.
(Did you notice the sarcasm in that?) :>)
Curt
Comment from lappmellott
I enjoyed reading this piece. I think it's well written, very colorful with great care to detail. It appears that you are dealing with hurts and pain from your past. All I can say, is to turn your life over to God and let Him take you where He wants. Good job.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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I enjoyed reading this piece. I think it's well written, very colorful with great care to detail. It appears that you are dealing with hurts and pain from your past. All I can say, is to turn your life over to God and let Him take you where He wants. Good job.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much for your inspirational thoughts and generous rating my friend.
Curt
Comment from Deniz22
"How proudly they parade in gaudy colors crimson laced
to radiate so fiercely from the fears I haven't faced"
Those are my favorites in this well crafted poem. You are an artisan in words, sir. As nicely out together as a fine watch.
A six if I had one.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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"How proudly they parade in gaudy colors crimson laced
to radiate so fiercely from the fears I haven't faced"
Those are my favorites in this well crafted poem. You are an artisan in words, sir. As nicely out together as a fine watch.
A six if I had one.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Aw, than you so much!
Your comments are a six to me, so thank you once again for the lovely thoughts.
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment from Benjamin Valencia
Hello Curt. Thank you for sharing your poem based on re-surfaced memories once thought forgotten. You effectively captured my own thoughts on the subject as well. Your choice of words like ourselves as the vessel and scars within us in the form of blacks and greys provide vivid imagery into what lurks in-between. Thanks again and Cheers.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Hello Curt. Thank you for sharing your poem based on re-surfaced memories once thought forgotten. You effectively captured my own thoughts on the subject as well. Your choice of words like ourselves as the vessel and scars within us in the form of blacks and greys provide vivid imagery into what lurks in-between. Thanks again and Cheers.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Thank you Benjamin.
I truly appreciate your well worded and succinct thoughts on this piece, and am glad to see I am not alone in my thoughts on the subject.
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment from Robin Gilmor
A lovely and well penned verse. Haunting memories so neatly kept and reviewed. Interesting picture adds to your lovely presentation.
"but scattered dusty memories and used up yesterdays". An enjoyable, thought provoking piece. Robin :)
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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A lovely and well penned verse. Haunting memories so neatly kept and reviewed. Interesting picture adds to your lovely presentation.
"but scattered dusty memories and used up yesterdays". An enjoyable, thought provoking piece. Robin :)
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Thank you Robin,
I really appreciate your thoughts, time and generous rating on this piece.
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment from fictionwriter
I loved the pictures this poem brough to mind. They were vivid and haunting, but I do feel like it would read better with some commas and punctuation. Just my opinion
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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I loved the pictures this poem brough to mind. They were vivid and haunting, but I do feel like it would read better with some commas and punctuation. Just my opinion
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Thank you my friend.
You are not the first to comment on my lack of punctuation. I will have to see if I can add some to resolve this issue.
Again, many thanks,
Curt
Comment from CassMarie
I think that you did a nice job writing this piece. I liked your word choice and your personification of forgotten thoughts. Very nicely written,
Cass
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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I think that you did a nice job writing this piece. I liked your word choice and your personification of forgotten thoughts. Very nicely written,
Cass
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much for your thoughts and your time, Cass.
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment from October21
Hello there! Loved your strong simile at the beginning as it expresses power in the thoughts and gives off wonderful imagery. A beautiful start. Our thoughts always have a thing for returning to us, no matter how much we wish to forget sometimes:-) Thank you for sharing this strong and interesting piece of well crafted poetry:-) Shenel
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Hello there! Loved your strong simile at the beginning as it expresses power in the thoughts and gives off wonderful imagery. A beautiful start. Our thoughts always have a thing for returning to us, no matter how much we wish to forget sometimes:-) Thank you for sharing this strong and interesting piece of well crafted poetry:-) Shenel
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Thank you Shenel, and hello there yourself!
Yes, our thoughts, good, bad, or indifferent,always seem to come back on us, kinda like a bad bean burrito.
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment from pattipac
Your poem about forgotten thoughts that creep back into our dreams, creating nightmares based on past events is poignant. Your choice of rhyme scheme, alliteration and couplets make your well-penned poem flow.
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Your poem about forgotten thoughts that creep back into our dreams, creating nightmares based on past events is poignant. Your choice of rhyme scheme, alliteration and couplets make your well-penned poem flow.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Thank you my friend, I am honored by your most generous rating and humbled by your thoughts.
Sincerely,
Curt
