From Then and there to Here and Now
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Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Cogitator:
You are not quite 7 years older than me so I know about this life about which you speak. I was raised on a farm my dad share-cropped - life was difficult on the one hand, yet, in retrospect, was so great. We raised our own food - no pesticides, no steroids - just good clean food, our own milk and eggs, and neighbors - although often a mile or two away - always helped each other.
Rdfrdmom2
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2021
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Cogitator:
You are not quite 7 years older than me so I know about this life about which you speak. I was raised on a farm my dad share-cropped - life was difficult on the one hand, yet, in retrospect, was so great. We raised our own food - no pesticides, no steroids - just good clean food, our own milk and eggs, and neighbors - although often a mile or two away - always helped each other.
Rdfrdmom2
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2021
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Thank you
Comment from BethShelby
I enjoyed reading this. I like non-fiction and biography best so I hope to see more of this. I will fan you so I'll be notified when you post. Some of own childhood was a bit like yours.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2021
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I enjoyed reading this. I like non-fiction and biography best so I hope to see more of this. I will fan you so I'll be notified when you post. Some of own childhood was a bit like yours.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2021
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Thank you
Comment from Bluesatinbutterfly
A fascinating glimpse into a life on the land, using the land and thriving. I am very interested to read what differences moving to Chicago wrought on the family.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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A fascinating glimpse into a life on the land, using the land and thriving. I am very interested to read what differences moving to Chicago wrought on the family.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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The following chapters are posted if you choose to read on...John
Comment from Sherry Asbury
At long last - a kindred spirit! I believe, support and preach on these topics. I am 76 years old and a woman who has been down on the ground and suffered much...I a have been abused terribly by a spouse, now gone, and soon will go to a facility where I will get care my aging self needs. There it is large and I have office equipment...and I shall write of these things too, from a different type of writing. You are a hero and I look forward to reading much more.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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At long last - a kindred spirit! I believe, support and preach on these topics. I am 76 years old and a woman who has been down on the ground and suffered much...I a have been abused terribly by a spouse, now gone, and soon will go to a facility where I will get care my aging self needs. There it is large and I have office equipment...and I shall write of these things too, from a different type of writing. You are a hero and I look forward to reading much more.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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The following chapters should be linked for you. Let me know if they are not, please. There is a balloon on it that should reward each chapter....John
Comment from Ivan Escareno
Kind of hard to follow. Seems a bit gloomy. Overall the message is well thought out. Im new to this so my opinion doesn't really matter much. I miss understood the rules and really entered 3 lines to say goodbye when i had actually written a pg and a half.
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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
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Kind of hard to follow. Seems a bit gloomy. Overall the message is well thought out. Im new to this so my opinion doesn't really matter much. I miss understood the rules and really entered 3 lines to say goodbye when i had actually written a pg and a half.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
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You can always redo a review. My own rule is that, if I do not understand the message, I do not rate.
Clarification is available if you choose. If I am not conveying the images from my mind to yours, we should communicate.
Comment from Susan Newell
This is truly exceptional writing throughout. You brought your childhood to life with high quality writing, good stories and good descriptions. I really loved this line: "It's the middle of the century; I wonder where I'll be at the end of it?" I was five years old.
I proofed it as I read, and have a couple typo corrections and some suggestions that follow.
small town I was born. -- suggest: small town where I was born
and was even slapped occasionally. -- suggest: and even being slapped occasionally. (parallelism)
and ride the train together. ==> rode
for their prized product. ==> products
The entire town would participate with the farmers in bringing the crops in. -- suggest: with farmers bringing in the crops.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
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This is truly exceptional writing throughout. You brought your childhood to life with high quality writing, good stories and good descriptions. I really loved this line: "It's the middle of the century; I wonder where I'll be at the end of it?" I was five years old.
I proofed it as I read, and have a couple typo corrections and some suggestions that follow.
small town I was born. -- suggest: small town where I was born
and was even slapped occasionally. -- suggest: and even being slapped occasionally. (parallelism)
and ride the train together. ==> rode
for their prized product. ==> products
The entire town would participate with the farmers in bringing the crops in. -- suggest: with farmers bringing in the crops.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
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Many thanks...John
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Welcome.
Comment from Alan K Pease
Your biography is written very well and very interesting from the standpoint of life's experiences. Your parents were very strict and disciplined but the depth of family is very great as is your feelings for them. Your maturation is measured by the experience of living abroad. I look forward to reading your description of a futuristic society maintained by technologies support of communities.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2016
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Your biography is written very well and very interesting from the standpoint of life's experiences. Your parents were very strict and disciplined but the depth of family is very great as is your feelings for them. Your maturation is measured by the experience of living abroad. I look forward to reading your description of a futuristic society maintained by technologies support of communities.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2016
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Thank you much for the kind words and stellar review. I am motivated to describe a society that has shed all desires caused by greed, corruption and downright madness. We are in a race to save ourselves before Mother Earth starts all over....John
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Cogitator,
I enjoyed the story of your youth and the poem you offered leading into the story of your first ten years. I just found a couple of minor tweaks that I'll list below:
(my recommendations are in parentheses)
After his (he, not his) fulfilled his obligation...
and settled in the small town (where) I was born
ride the train (rode, as you are in past tense)
Great work. It was my pleasure to read and review.
Kim
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2016
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Hi Cogitator,
I enjoyed the story of your youth and the poem you offered leading into the story of your first ten years. I just found a couple of minor tweaks that I'll list below:
(my recommendations are in parentheses)
After his (he, not his) fulfilled his obligation...
and settled in the small town (where) I was born
ride the train (rode, as you are in past tense)
Great work. It was my pleasure to read and review.
Kim
Comment Written 18-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2016
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Many thanks for the review and kind words...John
Comment from Helen Bach
A fascinating insight into your early years. Interesting that despite the beatings you still look back fondly. You paint a vivid picture with your pen you are amongst a few I look forward to your posts. Respect and kindest wishes Helen x
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2016
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A fascinating insight into your early years. Interesting that despite the beatings you still look back fondly. You paint a vivid picture with your pen you are amongst a few I look forward to your posts. Respect and kindest wishes Helen x
Comment Written 18-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2016
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Thank you kindly...John
Comment from Jay Squires
I'm so glad to get in at the introduction to the new series. There is so much to learn from your writing. I found a few uncharacteristic nits you might want to attend to.
and settled in the small town I was born. [... in the small town IN WHICH I was born, or possibly, "in the small town where I was born.]
the only thing I could do - I tossed the cat-o-nine-tails into the outhouse. [Always use two dashes (an EM dash) with no space before or after it.
Legionnaire training is brutal.No one ever [Need space after period.]
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2016
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I'm so glad to get in at the introduction to the new series. There is so much to learn from your writing. I found a few uncharacteristic nits you might want to attend to.
and settled in the small town I was born. [... in the small town IN WHICH I was born, or possibly, "in the small town where I was born.]
the only thing I could do - I tossed the cat-o-nine-tails into the outhouse. [Always use two dashes (an EM dash) with no space before or after it.
Legionnaire training is brutal.No one ever [Need space after period.]
Comment Written 17-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2016
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Many thanks, my friend...John
